Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and shows personality, but it is a bit informal and unclear in parts. Try to be more precise and avoid slang like 'bathroom single'. Also, keep your answer concise and directly related to the question.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. However, I usually sing only when I am alone, like in my bathroom, where I feel comfortable.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'in officially' and 'akademik study'. Try to use correct grammar and link your ideas smoothly.

例: No, I have never officially learned how to sing because I was busy with sports and academic studies. Also, my parents did not encourage me to take singing classes. However, I would love to learn singing in the future.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and has grammatical mistakes. Try to organize your ideas clearly and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

例: I would like to sing for any music label, whether it is T-Series, Punjabi, or English. However, I prefer to work with companies that are passionate about music rather than just focusing on making money.

提案: Your answer has several grammatical errors and incomplete thoughts. Try to express your ideas clearly and complete your sentences. Use linking words to connect your points logically.

例: Honestly, I believe singing is very peaceful and can bring happiness to people because it soothes the mind. For example, some studies suggest that listening to soft music while studying can improve concentration.

× Yes, I absolutely love singing, though I did not want to sing anywhere unless it's my bathroom 'cause I'm more like a bathroom single.

✓ Yes, I absolutely love singing, though I do not want to sing anywhere unless it's my bathroom 'cause I'm more like a bathroom singer.

The word 'single' is incorrect here; the correct noun form related to 'sing' is 'singer'. This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammar problem, but it affects the meaning. The verb form 'did not want' is past tense, but the context suggests a general preference, so present tense 'do not want' is more appropriate.

× Well in officially I didn't get a chance to learn singing because I was too busy in my sports and akademik study so my parents also did not like me singing so they never sent me to any singing classes.

✓ Well, officially I didn't get a chance to learn singing because I was too busy with my sports and academic studies, so my parents also did not like me singing and never sent me to any singing classes.

The phrase 'in officially' is incorrect; it should be 'officially'. 'Busy in' should be 'busy with'. 'Akademik' is a spelling error; correct spelling is 'academic'. The sentence is long and needs commas to separate clauses for clarity. The conjunction 'so' is used twice; the second should be 'and' to connect the two related ideas.

× But yes in future I would love to learn that.

✓ But yes, in the future I would love to learn that.

The phrase 'in future' should be 'in the future' to be grammatically correct. Adding a comma after 'yes' improves readability.

× I don't mind singing for any labels like T series or Punjabi labels or an English or label also but the company should be true to singing and not and should not focus on making money out of it.

✓ I don't mind singing for any labels like T-Series or Punjabi labels or an English label also, but the company should be true to singing and should not focus on making money out of it.

The phrase 'an English or label' is incorrect; it should be 'an English label'. Also, 'T series' should be 'T-Series' as a proper noun. The sentence is long and needs a comma before 'but' to separate the clauses. The phrase 'not and should not' is redundant; 'and should not' suffices.

× Do we honest, I believe singing is the most peaceful audios one can listen to becauses it soothes your mind and your brain functions will under singing.

✓ To be honest, I believe singing is the most peaceful audio one can listen to because it soothes your mind and your brain functions better under singing.

'Do we honest' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'To be honest'. 'Audios' should be 'audio' as it is uncountable here. 'Becauses' is a spelling error; correct spelling is 'because'. The phrase 'your brain functions will under singing' is incorrect; it should be 'your brain functions better under singing' to convey the intended meaning.