Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，且有些词汇使用不当（如'shagaru'和'singer song'），影响了表达的自然性和有效性。建议你在回答时注意语法准确，使用正确的词汇，并且尽量简洁明了地表达观点。

例: No, I don't like singing because I am shy and feel embarrassed singing in front of others. Even when I sing for my family, I feel uncomfortable. Therefore, I usually avoid singing in public.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，句子结构混乱，表达不清晰。建议你练习使用简单明了的句子结构，避免重复和错误的词汇，确保回答内容连贯且符合逻辑。

例: Yes, I have learned how to sing before. When I was learning to play the piano, my teacher also asked me to practice singing to improve my musical skills.

提案: 回答表达了情感，但存在语法错误和用词不当（如'see yourself for you'），影响了表达的清晰度。建议你注意主谓一致和代词的正确使用，表达时更自然流畅。

例: I would like to sing for my mother because she is not only my mother but also my friend. I want to sing for her on her birthday or just to show my love.

提案: 回答中有许多发音和拼写错误（如'Cerner'、'Pipe of the Sun'、'ceiling'），且句子结构不够清晰。建议你加强词汇的准确使用和句子结构的练习，使表达更自然和连贯。

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because the sound and rhythm of songs can express strong emotions. When I feel sad, I prefer to listen to optimistic and positive songs, which help me feel better.

× I I don't like because I'm a shagaru and I'm afraid of singer song in front of a crowd of people.

✓ I don't like it because I'm a shy person and I'm afraid of singing songs in front of a crowd of people.

这里'shagaru'应为'shy person'，且'singer song'应为'singing songs'，复数形式表示多首歌曲。

× For example, even when I single sign in front of my family members, I feel embarrassed.

✓ For example, even when I sing in front of my family members, I feel embarrassed.

动词'sing'后不需要加'sign'，且'单词'single sign'是错误的表达，应直接用'sing'。

× So I ovoid 2 things in Seosan in public.

✓ So I avoid singing in public.

'ovoid 2 things in Seosan'表达不清，且数字'2'不合适，应该表达避免在公共场合唱歌。

× Yes, I used to have the experience to nurse how to sing a song 'cause I used to learn how to play instruments and during the process I have to learn how to sing ourself.

✓ Yes, I used to have the experience of learning how to sing a song because I used to learn how to play instruments and during the process I had to learn how to sing myself.

'nurse'应为'learn'，时态应保持过去式，'have to'改为'had to'，'ourself'应为'myself'。

× Example what first two tuner the piano.

✓ For example, when I first tuned the piano.

句子结构混乱，'what first two tuner'应为'when I first tuned'。

× My teacher asked me to single cell also.

✓ My teacher asked me to sing as well.

'single cell'错误，应为'sing as well'。

× So I used to have the experience to number two thing.

✓ So I used to have the experience of learning to sing.

'number two thing'无意义，应表达'learning to sing'，保持过去时态。

× Oh, absolutely my mother because my mother is not only my mother but also my friends.

✓ Oh, absolutely my mother because my mother is not only my mother but also my friend.

'friends'应为单数形式'friend'，与主语一致。

× So I would like to see yourself for you to celebrate his birthday, her birthday or just to show my love.

✓ So I would like to sing for her to celebrate her birthday or just to show my love.

'see yourself for you'错误，应为'sing for her'，代词使用错误。

× And so that is definitely my mother who I want to sing a song for her.

✓ And so that is definitely my mother who I want to sing a song for.

句尾不应重复使用宾格代词'her'，避免冗余。

× Cerner today, yes, because the sounds of Pipe of the Sun can and transfer the strong emotion in the lyrics or the rhythms.

✓ Certainly, yes, because the sounds of the pipe organ can convey the strong emotions in the lyrics or the rhythms.

'Cerner today'应为'Certainly'，'Pipe of the Sun'应为'pipe organ'，动词'can and transfer'应为'can convey'。

× And especially when I feel sad, I will try, I will prefer to listen some optimistic songs or positive source.

✓ And especially when I feel sad, I prefer to listen to some optimistic songs or positive songs.

'try, I will prefer'重复且不合适，'listen some'应为'listen to some'，'positive source'应为'positive songs'。

× So I think the ceiling can bring the joy to people.

✓ So I think singing can bring joy to people.

'ceiling'应为'singing'，且'the joy'改为'joy'更自然。