Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but lacks clarity and natural flow. Try to use a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, start with a direct answer, then explain why singing helps you relax.

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax whenever I feel stressed. For instance, after a long day at work, singing calms my mind and lifts my mood.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Please respond directly and clearly. Use simple sentences and avoid vague phrases like 'or whatever'. Also, provide a little more detail to enrich your answer.

例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons. I just enjoy listening to different kinds of music in my free time.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains many incomplete sentences. Please answer directly and clearly. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid unnecessary phrases. Also, try to keep your answer within 5 sentences.

例: I usually sing for myself when I am alone, especially when I feel stressed from work. Since I have little leisure time, singing helps me relax and enjoy a few favourite songs.

提案: Your answer is unclear and difficult to understand. Please try to express your ideas clearly and logically. Use linking words to connect your points and provide specific examples to support your opinion.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. For example, when people feel sad, they often listen to uplifting songs to improve their mood. Similarly, singing soulful songs can help express emotions and bring joy.

× Yes, I do like singing whenever, whenever I was in a stress or stressful environment.

✓ Yes, I do like singing whenever I am in a stressful environment.

The sentence mixes present and past tense incorrectly. Since the speaker is talking about a habitual action, present tense 'am' should be used instead of past tense 'was'. Also, 'a stress' is incorrect; 'stressful environment' is the correct phrase.

× No, I didn't learn anything, some classical music or anything like that.

✓ No, I haven't learned anything like classical music or anything like that.

The question is about past experience up to now, so present perfect tense 'haven't learned' is appropriate instead of simple past 'didn't learn'. Also, the sentence structure is unclear; 'like classical music' clarifies the meaning.

× I just come to the music or whatever.

✓ I just listen to music or whatever.

The phrase 'come to the music' is incorrect. The correct verb is 'listen to music'. Also, present simple tense 'listen' fits the habitual action better than 'come'.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Whom do you want to sing for?

The object form 'whom' should be used instead of 'who' because it is the object of the preposition 'for'.

× Hi there, it's a simple question. I just want to sing for myself whenever I'm alone or more stressed.

✓ Hi there, that's a simple question. I just want to sing for myself whenever I'm alone or feeling stressed.

The phrase 'more stressed' is incomplete; 'feeling stressed' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'it's' changed to 'that's' for better naturalness.

× Because of the work I had.

✓ Because of the work I have.

The speaker refers to current work, so present tense 'have' is appropriate instead of past tense 'had'.

× An I never have any leisure time, I'll just sing fuel.

✓ And I never have any leisure time, so I'll just sing for fun.

'An' is a typo for 'And'. 'Sing fuel' is incorrect; likely intended 'sing for fun'. Also, 'so' connects the clauses better.

× Just prefer few songs to listen.

✓ I just prefer a few songs to listen to.

The sentence lacks subject 'I' and the phrase 'a few' is needed instead of 'few' to indicate some songs. Also, 'to listen to' is the correct phrase.

× Yes. It often brings happiness to the people based on I think many people will listen to the songs based on their mode when there there said they listened to some main some.

✓ Yes. It often brings happiness to people because I think many people listen to songs based on their mood when they say they listen to some main songs.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and unclear phrases. 'Will listen' changed to 'listen' for habitual action. 'Mode' corrected to 'mood'. 'There there said' is incorrect and removed. 'Main some' is unclear and simplified.

× Broken songs or like that whenever they are happy, they want to listen a soulful.

✓ Broken songs or similar; whenever they are happy, they want to listen to soulful songs.

The phrase 'or like that' is informal and unclear; replaced with 'or similar'. 'Listen a soulful' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'listen to soulful songs'.