Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınızda dilbilgisi hataları ve tekrarlar var. Cümlenizi daha doğal ve akıcı hale getirmek için tekrarları azaltmalı ve cümle yapısını düzeltmelisiniz. Ayrıca, neden şarkı söylemeyi sevdiğinizi daha açık ve net ifade edin.

例: I like singing because it helps me relax. Even though I don't have a great voice, I enjoy singing when I take a shower or go for a walk.

提案: Dilbilgisi açısından 'learn' yerine 'learned' kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, cevabınızı biraz daha detaylandırarak neden profesyonel olmanın gerekli olmadığını düşündüğünüzü açıklayabilirsiniz.

例: No, I haven't learned to sing professionally, but I believe that anyone can enjoy singing and improve with practice without formal training.

提案: Cümlenizde tekrarlar ve dilbilgisi hataları mevcut. Daha net ve akıcı bir şekilde kendiniz için şarkı söylemeyi tercih ettiğinizi ifade edin ve nedenini açıklayın.

例: I prefer to sing for myself rather than for others because I'm not a professional and I enjoy it more when it's just for my own pleasure.

提案: Cümlenizde anlam bozuklukları ve tekrarlar var. Daha açık ve doğru ifadeler kullanarak şarkı söylemenin insanlara nasıl mutluluk getirdiğini açıklamalısınız.

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it allows them to express their emotions and improve their mood.

× I like singing because it's it's relaxed me and even though I I have a bad voice, really, really bad words.

✓ I like singing because it relaxes me even though I have a bad voice, really, really bad.

The phrase 'it's it's relaxed me' is incorrect because 'relaxed' is the past participle form and does not fit here. The correct verb form is 'relaxes' (third person singular present tense) to agree with 'it'. Also, 'really, really bad words' is unclear and likely a misuse; 'really, really bad' suffices to describe the voice.

× But I think when I when I take a shower, when I go for Valk.

✓ But I think when I take a shower or when I go for a walk.

The sentence is incomplete and contains repetition ('when I when I'). 'Valk' is a typo and should be 'walk'. Also, 'or' is needed to connect the two activities properly.

× No, I haven't learn how to sing professionally, but I don't think that you need to be professional in order to sing very well.

✓ No, I haven't learned how to sing professionally, but I don't think that you need to be professional in order to sing very well.

The verb 'learn' should be in the past participle form 'learned' after 'haven't' to form the present perfect tense correctly.

× I prefer to think for myself, not not for other people because as I said before, I don't even I'm not a professional.

✓ I prefer to think for myself, not for other people because, as I said before, I'm not a professional.

The phrase 'I don't even I'm not a professional' is incorrect and redundant. Removing 'I don't even' clarifies the sentence. Also, the preposition 'for' is correctly used here.

× Yeah, I think singing Cambrian capitalist people, because when you are, when you are singing a song, you, you feel some emotions to describe your mood.

✓ Yeah, I think singing can bring happiness to people because when you are singing a song, you feel emotions that describe your mood.

The phrase 'singing Cambrian capitalist people' is nonsensical and likely a mishearing or typo. It should be 'singing can bring happiness to people'. Also, 'you, you' is repetitive and should be simplified.