Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer clearer and more natural by using correct grammar and linking your ideas logically. For example, explain why singing helps you relax and avoid unclear words like 'Qalam working'.

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me feel excited and relaxed when I am stressed. Sometimes, I sing while doing housework, which makes the tasks more enjoyable.

提案: Improve your answer by using clearer sentences and linking words. Explain your learning process more specifically and avoid confusing phrases like 'I don't know how to think'.

例: Yes, I have learned how to sing. Sometimes, when I want to sing a new song but don't know it well, I try to practice and learn the melody carefully.

提案: Make your answer more natural and coherent by correcting grammar and linking your ideas. Explain your feelings about singing for others clearly and avoid incomplete sentences.

例: I am a shy person, so I prefer not to sing for others. I like to sing alone in a quiet place, especially when I am working.

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to express your ideas in full sentences and explain how singing affects people's emotions clearly.

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people. It can make them feel excited and relaxed, helping them forget about their daily hard work.

× Yes, I do like singing. Uhm, because it feels excites an relax when I'm stress sometime I think.

✓ Yes, I do like singing. Uhm, because it feels exciting and relaxing when I'm stressed sometimes, I think.

The verbs 'excites' and 'relax' should be in the '-ing' form ('exciting' and 'relaxing') to correctly describe feelings. Also, 'stress' should be the past participle 'stressed' to describe the state, and 'sometime' should be plural 'sometimes' to indicate frequency.

× Qalam working. By cleaning and do housework.

✓ I calm down by working, cleaning, and doing housework.

The original sentences are fragments and lack proper structure. 'Qalam' seems to be a typo for 'calm'. Also, 'do housework' should be 'doing housework' to maintain parallel structure with 'cleaning'.

× Yes, I have. Sometime I need to sing a new song but I don't know how to think so I try and learn how to sing the new song.

✓ Yes, I have. Sometimes I need to sing a new song but I don't know how to, so I try to learn how to sing the new song.

'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'How to think' is incorrect; it should be 'how to' followed by the verb. Also, 'try and learn' is better as 'try to learn' for correct verb usage.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing to?

The correct preposition with 'sing' when indicating the audience is 'to', not 'for'.

× I'm a shy guy and I would never sing for anyone. I like to sing alone in a silent place. In enjoy doing my working.

✓ I'm a shy guy and I would never sing for anyone. I like to sing alone in a quiet place. I enjoy doing my work.

'In enjoy' is incorrect; it should be 'I enjoy'. 'Working' should be 'work' as a noun. 'Silent place' is better expressed as 'quiet place' in this context.

× Yes, I do. Thinking can bring happiness. Excited How many? And fear. Relax. An forget about the hard work they do each day.

✓ Yes, I do. Singing can bring happiness, excitement, and relaxation, and help people forget about the hard work they do each day.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. 'Thinking' should be 'singing'. 'Excited How many? And fear. Relax.' are incomplete and confusing. The corrected sentence combines ideas into a clear, grammatically correct statement.