Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but a bit long and slightly unclear. Try to make your response more concise and structured by starting with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explaining your reason. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence flow by using linking words.

例: Yes, I like singing, but only in a closed room because I feel my voice is not good enough. Therefore, I prefer to sing alone where I can freely express my feelings without worrying about others.

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details using linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences and irrelevant phrases.

例: No, I have never learned how to sing formally. I do not know the rules or techniques of singing, so I have only sung casually without any training.

提案: Your answer has a good idea but contains some unclear phrases and grammatical errors. Try to express your thoughts clearly with correct grammar and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I want to sing for my parents because they deserve it. One day, I definitely want to sing a beautiful song in front of them to express my gratitude and feelings.

提案: Your answer conveys the main idea but is grammatically incorrect and somewhat confusing. Try to use clearer sentences and linking words to explain your opinion logically and specifically.

例: Definitely, I think singing or listening to music can make people happy. When people feel bored or unhappy, music helps them overcome negative moods and feel better.

× Yes, I like singing but in a closed room because I think that my voice is not good, so I do not prefer to sing in the public or with someone else as when I think I can express my feelings and emotions to what I feel.

✓ Yes, I like singing but in a closed room because I think that my voice is not good, so I do not prefer to sing in public or with someone else as I think I can express my feelings and emotions better when I am alone.

The phrase 'in the public' is incorrect; 'in public' is the correct expression without the article 'the'. Also, 'as when I think' is awkward and unclear; it is better to say 'as I think' or 'because I think'. The preposition 'to' in 'express my feelings and emotions to what I feel' is incorrect; feelings are expressed 'about' or 'of' something, but here it is better to rephrase for clarity.

× As I. Do you have any kind of interest in singing so I'd. Have not ever learned how to sing or what are the rules of singing and what are the perfect way to sing this song. So I can say that I have never learned this thing.

✓ No, I have never learned how to sing or the rules of singing, nor the perfect way to sing a song. So I can say that I have never learned this.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'As I. Do you have any kind of interest in singing so I'd.' is incomplete and confusing. The corrected sentence removes unnecessary fragments and restructures the sentence for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Well I want to sing for my parents because they are the one who deserver like a Raisin thing in singing.

✓ Well, I want to sing for my parents because they are the ones who deserve a raisin thing in singing.

'They are the one' should be 'they are the ones' to agree in number. 'Deserver' is a misspelling of 'deserve'. The phrase 'like a Raisin thing in singing' is unclear and likely incorrect; it may be a mishearing or typo. Without context, it is left as is but corrected for spelling and number agreement.

× So one day I definitely want to sing a beautiful song for them an in front of them to express my gratitude an feelings towards them.

✓ So one day I definitely want to sing a beautiful song for them and in front of them to express my gratitude and feelings towards them.

The original sentence has spelling errors 'an' instead of 'and'. The preposition 'towards' is acceptable here but 'to' is more common with 'feelings'. The correction focuses on fixing spelling and conjunction errors.

× Definitely, whenever I see people are bored or unhappy there usually a listen music or a thing saying music.

✓ Definitely, whenever I see people are bored or unhappy, they usually listen to music or something like music.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'There usually a listen music or a thing saying music' is incorrect. The correction adds the subject 'they', corrects the verb form to 'listen to', and clarifies the phrase to 'something like music'.

× So I think somehow it makes them happy and overcome from the other catastrophic mood or thinking.

✓ So I think somehow it makes them happy and helps them overcome other catastrophic moods or thoughts.

The phrase 'overcome from' is incorrect; 'overcome' does not require 'from'. Also, 'the other catastrophic mood or thinking' is awkward; 'other catastrophic moods or thoughts' is clearer and grammatically correct.