Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ không chính xác, ví dụ như 'It it's', 'I often singing', và 'helps at spawn'. Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng thì đúng và cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời hơi dài dòng và có phần lặp lại, bạn nên trả lời ngắn gọn, tự nhiên và mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I like singing because it is a relaxing hobby. I often sing along with my mom, which helps us bond and have fun together. Since I was a child, singing has always made me feel happy and calm.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý sử dụng thì hiện tại hoàn thành hoặc thì hiện tại đơn cho thói quen, ví dụ 'I have learnt' hoặc 'I learn'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời có phần lủng củng và thiếu liên kết, bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và tránh ngắt quãng không cần thiết.

例: Yes, I have been learning to sing for a long time. I practice singing every day because it is something I really enjoy and never get tired of.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt, có cấu trúc rõ ràng và nội dung cụ thể. Tuy nhiên, bạn có thể sử dụng thêm một số từ nối để câu văn mạch lạc hơn và mở rộng ý hơn một chút.

例: I want to sing for my loved ones because they always support me and enjoy my performances. Moreover, singing for them makes me feel happy and allows me to express my emotions freely. It is a special way to show my appreciation and strengthen our connection.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý phát âm và ngữ pháp, ví dụ 'it can of lift' nên là 'it can lift', 'Where sample' không đúng ngữ pháp. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngắt quãng, bạn nên sử dụng các từ nối để câu văn mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I believe singing can definitely bring happiness to people. It allows us to express our emotions, and cheerful songs can lift our mood and make us feel joyful. For example, many people sing along to happy melodies to relieve stress and feel more positive.

× I really enjoy singing because.

✓ I really enjoy singing because it is a relaxing hobby to me.

The original sentence ends abruptly with 'because.' which is incomplete and causes a sentence structure error. The correction completes the thought by adding 'it is a relaxing hobby to me.' to form a complete sentence.

× It it's a relaxing hobby to me.

✓ It is a relaxing hobby to me.

The phrase 'It it's' is incorrect due to repetition of the subject and verb contraction. The correction removes the extra 'it' to form the correct phrase 'It is'.

× I often singing along with my mom which helps at spawn and have fun together.

✓ I often sing along with my mom which helps us bond and have fun together.

The verb 'singing' is incorrectly used after 'often' which requires the base form 'sing'. Also, 'helps at spawn' is incorrect; it should be 'helps us bond' to convey the intended meaning.

× Since I was a little kid, singing has always make me feel happy and calm.

✓ Since I was a little kid, singing has always made me feel happy and calm.

The verb 'make' should be in the past participle form 'made' to agree with the present perfect tense 'has always made'.

× Of course I learn to sing every single day, every single hour's, in minutes and seconds.

✓ Of course I learn to sing every single day, every single hour, in minutes and seconds.

The phrase 'hour's' is incorrect; it should be the plural 'hours' without an apostrophe. However, since 'every single hour' is correct, the apostrophe is unnecessary and causes a grammatical error.

× It's. Just something that I never get tired of.

✓ It's just something that I never get tired of.

The period after 'It's' incorrectly splits the sentence. Removing the period creates a correct sentence structure.

× Singing allows us to express our emotions and when we see cheerful songs it can of lift our mood and make us feel joyful.

✓ Singing allows us to express our emotions and when we hear cheerful songs it can lift our mood and make us feel joyful.

The phrase 'see cheerful songs' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'hear' since songs are heard, not seen. Also, 'can of lift' is incorrect; it should be 'can lift'.

× Where sample many people sing along too happy melodies to relieve stress and feel more positive.

✓ For example, many people sing along to happy melodies to relieve stress and feel more positive.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains incorrect words: 'Where sample' should be 'For example', and 'too' should be 'to'. The correction fixes these errors and forms a complete sentence.