Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and well-structured with good use of linking words and specific examples. However, avoid minor errors like capitalising 'A' in 'A joyful atmosphere'. Also, try to vary your vocabulary a bit more to enhance your response.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me unwind and express my feelings openly. For example, after a tiring day, singing my favourite songs instantly brightens my mood and soothes my mind. Additionally, singing is an enjoyable and effective way to bond with others during social events, as it promotes interaction and creates a cheerful environment.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains unclear phrasing ('Shore Will I receive') which affects clarity. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary and correct grammar to improve coherence and naturalness.

例: Yes, I have learned how to sing. When I was in school, I participated in choir where I received basic vocal training and learned about pitch and rhythm. Singing has always been my passion, so those lessons really helped me boost my confidence and improve my technique.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but watch subject-verb agreement errors like 'feel' instead of 'feels' and 'create' instead of 'creates'. Also, try to add a bit more variety in vocabulary to make your answer more engaging.

例: Well, I would like to sing for my family and close friends. Singing for them feels special because they are supportive and appreciate my efforts, which motivates me to perform better. Moreover, sharing music with loved ones creates a warm and joyful atmosphere that strengthens our bond.

提案: Your answer is on point but contains grammatical errors such as 'and definitely bring' instead of 'can definitely bring' and awkward phrasing like 'connect with the songs and can be'. Try to correct these and use clearer sentence structures.

例: Yes, I believe singing can definitely bring happiness to people. It allows individuals to express their emotions freely and connect with the music, which can be a great way to relieve stress. For example, many people feel uplifted and joyful when they sing their favourite songs, whether alone or with others.

× When I was in school I took part in Shore Will I receive basic vocal training and learned about pitch and rhythm.

✓ When I was in school I took part in choir where I received basic vocal training and learned about pitch and rhythm.

The original sentence contains incorrect words 'Shore Will' which seem to be a typographical error for 'choir where'. Also, 'receive' should be in past tense 'received' to match the past tense context of the sentence. The correction fixes these errors to maintain proper past tense and clarity.

× Singing for them feel special because they are supportive and appreciate my efforts, which motivates me to perform better.

✓ Singing for them feels special because they are supportive and appreciate my efforts, which motivates me to perform better.

The subject 'Singing for them' is singular, so the verb should be 'feels' instead of 'feel' to agree in number. This is a subject-verb agreement issue related to singular and plural forms.

× Moreover, sharing music with loved ones create a warm and joyful atmosphere that strengthens our bond.

✓ Moreover, sharing music with loved ones creates a warm and joyful atmosphere that strengthens our bond.

The subject 'sharing music with loved ones' is singular, so the verb should be 'creates' instead of 'create' to maintain subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, I believe singing and definitely bring happiness to people.

✓ Yes, I believe singing can definitely bring happiness to people.

The original sentence is missing the modal verb 'can' to correctly link the subject and verb. Adding 'can' clarifies the meaning and corrects the verb usage. Also, 'and' is incorrectly used and should be replaced with 'can' to express ability.