Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Та илүү тодорхой, энгийн бөгөөд байгалийн хариулт өгөх хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "No, I don't like singing because I think my voice is not very good, so I feel shy to sing in front of others."

例: No, I don't like singing because I think my voice is not very good, so I feel shy to sing in front of others.

提案: Хариултаа илүү ойлгомжтой, зөв бүтэцтэй болгох хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "No, I have never learned how to sing properly in my life."

例: No, I have never learned how to sing properly in my life.

提案: Хариултаа ойлгомжтой, логик холбоотой, бүрэн өгүүлбэрээр илэрхийлэх хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "If I have a chance to sing, I would like to sing for my family first because they support me. Also, I admire Billie Eilish as a singer."

例: If I have a chance to sing, I would like to sing for my family first because they support me. Also, I admire Billie Eilish as a singer.

提案: Хариултаа илүү тодорхой, логик холбоотой, ойлгомжтой болгох хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people who enjoy it, but personally, I don't like singing."

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people who enjoy it, but personally, I don't like singing.

× Come in my life, I have never learned to sync.

✓ In my life, I have never learned to sing.

The phrase 'Come in my life' is incorrect; it should be 'In my life' to indicate experience. Also, 'sync' is a wrong word here; the correct verb is 'sing'. The sentence uses present perfect tense correctly to express experience up to now.

× If I have a chance for singing, will now first and I. I need to. I want to seeing. Billie Eilish.

✓ If I have a chance to sing, I will sing first. I want to see Billie Eilish.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Will now first and I' is not a proper structure. 'I want to seeing' is incorrect; it should be 'I want to see'. The corrected sentence uses proper conditional and future tense structures and correct verb forms.

× If the person like singing that bring happiness, that person people but but I don't like seeing yes.

✓ If a person likes singing, it brings happiness to them, but I don't like singing.

The sentence has pronoun errors and unclear references. 'That person people' is incorrect; it should be 'it brings happiness to them'. Also, 'like seeing yes' is incorrect; it should be 'like singing'. The corrected sentence clarifies pronoun use and verb agreement.