Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱，影响理解。建议练习用简单明了的句子表达自己的感受，并避免语法错误。

例: Yes, I like singing very much because it makes me feel relaxed and peaceful. When I sing, I can forget my worries and enjoy the moment.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够自然。建议使用正确的时态和词汇，简洁明了地回答问题。

例: No, I have never learned to sing professionally. But I enjoy singing by myself and often record my voice on my phone.

提案: 回答内容不够具体，表达不清晰。建议明确表达自己的想法，并用连词使句子更连贯。

例: I don't have specific goals for singing, but I would love to sing for my parents, my loved ones, and my friends to make them happy.

提案: 回答语法和表达混乱，难以理解。建议用简单句表达观点，并举例说明唱歌如何带来快乐。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because songs often express feelings of love and peace. Singing for others can also make them feel joyful.

× Yes, I do like singing very much 'cause when I'm saying I feel my body and.

✓ Yes, I do like singing very much because when I'm singing I feel my body and.

这里'saying'用错了，应该用现在分词形式的'singing'，因为表达的是正在进行的动作。

× A man become peaceful and lightly.

✓ A man becomes peaceful and light.

主语是单数，谓语动词应加-s，'become'应改为'becomes'。'lightly'是副词，形容词形式是'light'，用来描述状态。

× So. But I'm just saying I can lose.

✓ But I'm just saying I can lose myself.

句子结构不完整，缺少宾语，'lose'后应加宾语'self'。

× No, I didn't actually.

✓ No, I haven't actually.

这里表达的是过去到现在的经历，应该用现在完成时'haven't'而不是过去时'didn't'。

× I had never learn about thing professionally.

✓ I have never learned about it professionally.

使用现在完成时'have never learned'表示从过去到现在未曾学习过。'learn'应为过去分词'learned'。'thing'应具体化为'it'。

× I like to sing on the phone.

✓ I like to sing on the phone.

此句语法正确，无需修改。

× I record a lot of my voice in the recorder.

✓ I record a lot of my voice on the recorder.

录音设备用介词'on'，表示在设备上录音。

× Actually, I don't have a real goals about my singing.

✓ Actually, I don't have real goals about my singing.

'goals'是复数，前面不应加不定冠词'a'。

× However I'd love to sing for my parents testing thing, for the one who I love and for my friends.

✓ However, I'd love to sing for my parents, the one I love, and my friends.

'testing thing'不明确，应去掉。'the one who I love'改为'the one I love'更自然。

× Obviously I do for me lot of song spirit may about peaceful happiness and love and I love and I also like to sing the song for the.

✓ Obviously I do. For me, a lot of songs are about peace, happiness, and love, and I love them. I also like to sing songs for others.

句子结构混乱，缺少主谓一致，代词使用不当，需重组句子使其通顺。

× Other peoples to make dinner no learn about the love and hapiness.

✓ Other people to learn about love and happiness.

'peoples'应为'people'，'make dinner no learn'语义不明，改为'learn about love and happiness'更合理。