Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và có nội dung tốt, nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và câu chưa rõ ràng, ví dụ như "helps may relieve stress" và "when I fell over and I often sing". Bạn nên chú ý sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và làm câu rõ ràng hơn để tránh gây hiểu nhầm. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời hơi dài và có thể rút gọn để tránh lặp từ và dư thừa.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it is a fun and relaxing activity that helps me relieve stress. It allows me to express my emotions freely and entertain myself. For example, when I feel down, I often sing along to my favorite songs, which instantly lifts my mood and makes me feel more positive.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng tốt nhưng có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác như "I'm joined our vocal cost" và "an these things could help". Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng thì đúng và từ vựng phù hợp. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời có thể được tổ chức lại để rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I have. I joined a vocal course about two or three years ago because I wanted to improve my singing skills. I learned many techniques such as breathing control and pitch accuracy, which helped me sing better. Since then, I have gained more confidence and enjoy singing more than before.

提案: Câu trả lời khá tự nhiên và có nội dung rõ ràng, tuy nhiên có một số lỗi nhỏ về ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ như "more relaxing than natural" không hợp lý. Bạn nên sửa lại để câu trả lời mạch lạc và chính xác hơn. Ngoài ra, có thể thêm một vài chi tiết cụ thể hơn để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn.

例: Honestly, I prefer to sing for myself rather than for others because it feels more relaxing and natural. When I sing alone, I can enjoy the moment freely without worrying about mistakes or being judged. This helps me feel less nervous and more confident to express my emotions through music.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng tốt nhưng có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và câu không hoàn chỉnh như "feelings that words alone and often can convey" và "many is a way to really stress boost mode end or even connect with other" khiến câu khó hiểu. Bạn nên luyện tập cách nối câu và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác để câu trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, absolutely. I believe singing has a powerful emotional impact because it allows people to express feelings that words alone often cannot convey. Whether someone is singing in the shower or performing on stage, it can be incredibly uplifting and therapeutic. Singing helps reduce stress and can even help people connect with others.

× Yes, I really enjoy singing because it's a fun and relaxing activity that helps may relieve stress.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy singing because it's a fun and relaxing activity that may help relieve stress.

The modal verb 'may' should be followed by the base form of the verb 'help', not 'helps'. The correct structure is 'may help'. This corrects the modal verb usage.

× For example, when I fell over and I often sing along to my favorite songs, which instantly lifts my mood and makes me feel more positive.

✓ For example, when I feel down, I often sing along to my favorite songs, which instantly lifts my mood and makes me feel more positive.

The phrase 'when I fell over' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'when I feel down' to express the intended meaning. Also, mixing past tense 'fell' with present tense 'sing' is inconsistent. Correcting the tense and phrase improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Yes I have. I'm joined our vocal cost about two or three years ago because I wanted to improve my singing skills.

✓ Yes, I have. I joined our vocal class about two or three years ago because I wanted to improve my singing skills.

The phrase 'I'm joined' is incorrect; the past tense 'joined' should be used without 'am'. Also, 'cost' is a typo and should be 'class'. This corrects the past tense usage and word choice.

× I learned a lot from the lessons such as breathing techniques, pitch control, an these things could help me sing better than before.

✓ I learned a lot from the lessons, such as breathing techniques and pitch control; these things help me sing better than before.

The conjunction 'an' is incorrect and should be 'and'. Also, 'could help' is better expressed as 'help' to indicate current ability. The sentence is corrected for conjunction and verb usage.

× Since then I have gained more confidence in my voice and enjoy singing more than ever.

✓ Since then, I have gained more confidence in my voice and enjoy singing more than ever.

A comma after 'Since then' improves sentence clarity. The present perfect tense 'have gained' and present tense 'enjoy' are correctly used here.

× Honestly, I prefer to sing for myself rather than for others because it feels more relaxing than natural when I sing along and I can enjoy the moment freely without worrying about making mistakes or being judged.

✓ Honestly, I prefer to sing for myself rather than for others because it feels more natural and relaxing when I sing along, and I can enjoy the moment freely without worrying about making mistakes or being judged.

The phrase 'more relaxing than natural' is incorrect; it should be 'more natural and relaxing'. Also, adding a comma before 'and' improves sentence structure.

× Yes, absolutely. I believe singing has a powerful emotional impact. It allows people to express feelings that words alone and often can convey.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I believe singing has a powerful emotional impact. It allows people to express feelings that words alone often cannot convey.

The sentence 'feelings that words alone and often can convey' is ungrammatical. The correct structure is 'feelings that words alone often cannot convey' to express the intended meaning clearly.

× Whether someone is singing along in the shower or performing on the stage.

✓ Whether someone is singing along in the shower or performing on the stage, singing can be incredibly uplifting and therapeutic for many.

This is a sentence fragment lacking a main clause. Combining it with the following sentence completes the thought and corrects the sentence structure.

× It can be incredibly uplifting and therapeutic for many is a way to really stress boost mode end or even connect with other.

✓ It can be incredibly uplifting and therapeutic for many; it is a way to really boost mood, reduce stress, and even connect with others.

The original sentence has pronoun and word choice errors ('many is a way', 'stress boost mode end', 'connect with other'). Correcting pronouns and word order clarifies the meaning and improves grammar.