Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽고 명확하게 들리도록 문장을 간결하게 구성하고, 중복되는 표현을 줄이세요. 예를 들어, 'I don't enjoy singing because I am a quiet and introverted person, so I feel shy singing in front of others.'처럼 말할 수 있습니다.

例: I don't really like singing because I am a quiet and introverted person. Therefore, I often feel shy when I have to sing in front of others, so I haven't had many opportunities to do so.

提案: 답변을 더 자연스럽고 논리적으로 연결하세요. 'But someday in the future, I want to try. How to?' 부분은 명확하지 않으니, 'But I would like to learn how to sing someday in the future.'처럼 표현하세요.

例: No, I haven't had a chance to learn how to sing because I am a quiet and introverted person. I often feel shy singing in front of others, but I would like to learn how to sing someday in the future.

提案: 질문에 직접적으로 답변하고, 문장을 완성하세요. 현재 답변은 불완전하고 중복이 많습니다. 예를 들어, 'I don't usually sing for others because I feel shy, but if I had to, I would sing for my close family.'라고 말할 수 있습니다.

例: I don't usually sing for others because I feel shy. However, if I had to, I would sing for my close family members.

提案: 답변을 더 자연스럽고 명확하게 연결하세요. 예를 들어, 'Although I don't enjoy singing much because I am introverted, I feel happy and relaxed when I sing with my children. It is a good way to spend time together.'라고 표현할 수 있습니다.

例: Although I don't enjoy singing much because I am an introverted person, I feel really happy and relaxed when I sing with my children. Singing together is a great way to spend quality time.

× I consider myself a quiet an introvert person

✓ I consider myself a quiet and introverted person

The phrase 'a quiet an introvert person' is incorrect because 'an' is used before a vowel sound and 'introvert' should be the adjective form 'introverted' to describe the noun 'person'. Also, 'and' should be used to connect two adjectives. Correct form is 'a quiet and introverted person'.

× I feel shy when I have to singing a song in front of others

✓ I feel shy when I have to sing a song in front of others

After the modal verb phrase 'have to', the base form of the verb should be used, not the '-ing' form. Therefore, 'singing' should be corrected to 'sing'.

× So I haven't had many opportunities. To.

✓ So I haven't had many opportunities to.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'To.' which is incomplete. The preposition 'to' should be connected to the following verb or phrase. The sentence should be completed or restructured to avoid fragment.

× Because I consider myself a quiet an introvert person

✓ Because I consider myself a quiet and introverted person

Same as previous explanation: 'an' is incorrect here and 'introvert' should be 'introverted' to function as an adjective. Also, 'and' is needed to connect the two adjectives.

× But someday in the future, I want to try. How to?

✓ But someday in the future, I want to try. How?

The phrase 'How to?' is incomplete and unclear. It should be either removed or rephrased for clarity. Possibly the student meant 'How to do it?' but as it stands, it is a sentence fragment.

× I think I consider myself a quiet and introverted person

✓ I think I consider myself a quiet and introverted person

This sentence is correct as is; no correction needed.

× So. I feel really, I feel a bit shy when I have to sing in front of others, but.

✓ So, I feel really shy, a bit shy, when I have to sing in front of others.

The sentence is fragmented and ends with 'but' without continuation. It should be restructured to form a complete sentence without unnecessary pauses or incomplete conjunctions.

× Singing is a good way to spend with my children together

✓ Singing is a good way to spend time with my children together

The verb 'spend' requires an object such as 'time' before the preposition 'with'. Without 'time', the sentence is incomplete and incorrect.