Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了喜欢唱歌的原因，但语言不够自然且有语法错误，句子结构混乱，影响理解。建议简化句子，使用正确的时态和表达方式，并避免重复。

例: Yes, I like singing very much because songs by artists like Taylor Swift and Adele help me relax and relieve stress.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题，句子不连贯。建议使用完整句子，清晰表达没有学过唱歌的原因，并说明未来的计划。

例: No, I haven't learned how to sing because I was busy in high school, but I want to improve my singing skills in the future.

提案: 回答中有很多语法和表达错误，句子不连贯，影响理解。建议简化表达，明确说明想为谁唱歌及原因，并使用连接词使句子流畅。

例: I want to sing for my family and close friends because they support me and appreciate my efforts. Singing for them motivates me to perform better and creates a warm, joyful atmosphere.

提案: 回答中有严重语法和词汇错误，句子不通顺。建议使用简单明了的句子，清楚表达唱歌带来的好处，并避免拼写错误。

例: Yes, singing can bring happiness because it helps people relax, reduce stress, and improve social bonds in the community.

× I thought there's son is seem like very good for us to feel relaxed and relax our stress and to fail.

✓ I thought the songs seem very good for us to feel relaxed and relieve our stress.

这里's son 是错误的单复数形式，应该用复数形式 songs 来表示多首歌曲。'there's' 是 there is 的缩写，表示单数，和后面的 son 不匹配。建议使用复数形式 songs 来表达多首歌曲。

× Actually no 'cause in my high school I didn't have time to learn how to say in, so I always say unknown becauses I thought maybe my.

✓ Actually no, because in my high school I didn't have time to learn how to sing, so I always sang unknown songs because I thought maybe my singing quality is not so good, so I will try to improve it.

原句中 'say in' 应为 'sing'，且时态应与过去时间点一致，使用过去式 sang。'say unknown' 语义不通，改为 'sang unknown songs' 更符合表达。

× I would like to sing for my family and close friends, saying for the inferior special because they are supportive and appreciate my efforts, which motivate me.

✓ I would like to sing for my family and close friends, singing for the people who are special because they are supportive and appreciate my efforts, which motivate me.

原句中 'saying for the inferior special' 语法和用词错误，应为 'singing for the people who are special'，使用正确的介词和表达方式。

× Moreover, share music with not the one created warm and joyful atmosphere that strengthening my my band.

✓ Moreover, sharing music with them creates a warm and joyful atmosphere that strengthens my bond.

原句结构混乱，缺少主语和谓语，且用词错误。应调整为完整句子，使用现在分词作主语，动词用单数形式，表达清晰。

× Yes, for sure Seine is a good same start, people can feel relaxed and it can reduce some stress and sending all these others also can improve our bounden, improves our community abilities.

✓ Yes, for sure, singing is a good start; people can feel relaxed and it can reduce some stress. Singing also can improve our bonds and enhance our community abilities.

原句中 'Seine' 应为 'singing'，'same start' 应为 'good start'，'sending' 应为 'singing'，'bounden' 应为 'bonds'。词汇错误导致句意不明，需更正为正确单词。