Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và mạch lạc, nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Hãy cố gắng sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và câu có cấu trúc đúng để truyền đạt ý tưởng một cách tự nhiên hơn.

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. I also enjoy singing with my friends, which makes it more fun and helps me make new friends.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, khiến ý nghĩa không rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản và rõ ràng, đồng thời tránh sử dụng từ không đúng hoặc không cần thiết. Hãy cố gắng diễn đạt ý tưởng một cách mạch lạc và có cấu trúc hợp lý.

例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons. I usually sing by myself and consider myself a beginner because I haven't had any professional training.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý nghĩa tốt nhưng bị ảnh hưởng bởi lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, làm giảm tính tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và có cấu trúc hợp lý. Hãy thêm các chi tiết cụ thể để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn.

例: I want to sing for my mom because she has always supported me, especially when I participate in competitions. Singing for her is my way of showing gratitude for all her efforts.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn không rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng không phù hợp khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh sử dụng từ không chính xác. Hãy cố gắng diễn đạt ý tưởng một cách mạch lạc và có cấu trúc hợp lý.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because music expresses emotions and its smooth melodies can lift everyone's mood.

× Yes I'm very lies singing because Y know I sings my song my voice can't connect.

✓ Yes, I really like singing because you know I sing my song, my voice can't connect.

The original sentence uses 'lies' incorrectly instead of 'like' and 'sings' instead of 'sing'. 'Like' is the correct verb to express enjoyment, and 'sing' is the base form used after 'I'. The sentence also lacks proper punctuation and capitalization, which affects clarity.

× Everyones an make this more furious, more fund an everyone can.

✓ Everyone can make this more fun and more exciting.

The word 'Everyones' is incorrect; the correct form is 'Everyone' which is singular. 'Fund' should be 'fun'. The phrase 'more furious' is likely intended to mean 'more exciting' or 'more fun'. The sentence structure is also unclear and needs rephrasing for clarity.

× Make friends through singing.

✓ Make friends by singing.

The preposition 'through' is less appropriate here; 'by' is commonly used to indicate the means of making friends in this context.

× No, I have a learn how to sing, I'm just saying by myself by a singing natural voice and not die learned Rusanen lesaint oh R training from teachers.

✓ No, I have not learned how to sing; I'm just singing by myself with my natural voice and have not received training from teachers.

The phrase 'have a learn' is incorrect; it should be 'have learned' or 'have not learned'. The sentence is fragmented and contains unclear words; it needs to be restructured for clarity and correct tense usage.

× So I would say I'm stilled A beginner when it's come to my singing.

✓ So I would say I'm still a beginner when it comes to my singing.

'Stilled' is incorrect; the correct word is 'still'. 'When it's come' should be 'when it comes' to match present tense usage.

× I want to sing for my mom because she's all the way a person whose support is means in when I'm whenever I joins any competition.

✓ I want to sing for my mom because she is always the person who supports me whenever I join any competition.

The sentence has incorrect pronoun usage and awkward phrasing. 'She's all the way a person whose support is means in' is incorrect; it should be 'she is always the person who supports me'. 'I joins' should be 'I join' to agree with the subject.

× And so I wonder sinks it time to her whatever whatever efforts she put on me.

✓ And so I want to dedicate my singing to her for all the efforts she has put into me.

'I wonder sinks it time to her' is unclear and incorrect. The intended meaning is likely to dedicate or sing for her. 'Whatever whatever' is redundant. 'Efforts she put on me' should be 'efforts she has put into me'.

× Yes, I do think is can bring happiness to people because music, Cantor Peach emotion or whatever we fuse sat by their smooth melodies beside is is can boot movie everyone off.

✓ Yes, I do think it can bring happiness to people because music can touch emotions or whatever, we feel it through their smooth melodies; besides, it can boost everyone's mood.

The sentence contains many unclear and incorrect words: 'Cantor Peach emotion' likely means 'can touch emotions'; 'we fuse sat' should be 'we feel it'; 'is is can boot movie everyone off' is incorrect and likely means 'it can boost everyone's mood'. Pronouns and verbs are misused and need correction for clarity.