Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan terstruktur. Cobalah untuk memberikan kalimat topik yang jelas dan mendukungnya dengan detail yang spesifik. Hindari pengulangan dan kalimat yang tidak lengkap.

例: Yes, I love singing because it allows me to express my emotions freely. For me, singing is a fun hobby that helps me relax and feel happy.

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan tata bahasa kurang tepat. Gunakan kalimat lengkap dan jelaskan dengan detail bagaimana Anda belajar menyanyi.

例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons. I usually learn by myself using YouTube apps and online tutorials.

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang terstruktur dan ada pengulangan. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang jelas dan gunakan kata penghubung agar jawaban lebih koheren.

例: I want to sing for my friends because they are very supportive. I believe they will encourage me whenever I perform.

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan ada kesalahan tata bahasa. Jelaskan alasan Anda dengan kalimat yang lengkap dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk memperjelas hubungan ide.

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because people often sing when they feel happy or even when they are sad, as a way to express their emotions.

× Yes, I do love singing because singing is very fun for me and it helps me. Show how I feel without telling how I feel. Directly an for me is very fun and. It's. My hobby.

✓ Yes, I do love singing because it is very fun for me and it helps me show how I feel without telling. Singing is directly fun for me and it's my hobby.

The original sentence has fragmented and incomplete sentences causing sentence structure errors. Combining related ideas into complete sentences improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× No, I only learn book. Not like. With other person I learn by myself with YouTube like apps.

✓ No, I only learned from books. Not like with other people; I learned by myself using YouTube-like apps.

The verb 'learn' should be in past tense 'learned' to match the past action. Also, 'other person' should be plural 'other people' for correct meaning.

× I think my friends become my because my friends is very supportive and I think if I sing for them they will support me. What ever support me, yeah.

✓ I think my friends become mine because my friends are very supportive and I think if I sing for them they will support me. Whatever supports me, yeah.

'Friends' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. Also, 'my' should be 'mine' to correctly indicate possession.

× I think my friends become my because my friends is very supportive and I think if I sing for them they will support me. What ever support me, yeah.

✓ I think my friends become mine because my friends are very supportive and I think if I sing for them they will support me. Whatever supports me, yeah.

Repeated correction for subject-verb agreement: 'friends' plural requires 'are' not 'is'. Also, 'whatever' is singular and requires 'supports'.

× Yes, I do think singing can bring happiness to people because a singing usually people usually sing when they feel happy or sad with the. Song date.

✓ Yes, I do think singing can bring happiness to people because usually people sing when they feel happy or sad with the song.

The article 'a' before 'singing' is incorrect; 'singing' here is uncountable and does not need an article. Also, 'song date' is unclear and corrected to 'song'.