Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够清晰，语法和词汇使用错误较多，表达不自然。建议简洁明了地回答问题，避免重复和语法错误，使用正确的词汇表达喜欢唱歌的原因。

例: Yes, I like singing very much because I have been trained since I was a child. My parents noticed my talent and sent me to a music school. Singing brings me joy and helps me express my emotions.

提案: 回答中存在大量语法错误和表达不清，缺乏连贯性。建议直接回答问题，使用正确的时态和词汇，简洁描述学习唱歌的经历。

例: Yes, I have learned how to sing. When I was a child, my parents noticed my talent and sent me to a professional teacher. I have a clear voice and enjoy learning melodies.

提案: 回答内容混乱，表达不清，无法理解具体意思。建议明确回答想为谁唱歌，使用简单句子表达感情和原因。

例: I want to sing for my grandfather because he means a lot to me. Although he is no longer here, I hope to honor him through my singing.

提案: 回答表达不清，逻辑混乱。建议直接表达观点，使用连词连接句子，举例说明唱歌如何带来快乐。

例: I think singing can bring happiness to many people because music can lift their mood. For example, when someone feels successful, happy songs can make them feel even better.

× So actually I like seeing very much because I have trained since I was a child and the because my parents think me, I have the gifts for thing and they send me into the teaching thing agency.

✓ So actually I like singing very much because I have trained since I was a child and because my parents think I have the gift for singing and they sent me to the teaching agency.

这里'seeing'应为'singing'，因为题目是关于唱歌。'think me'应改为'think I have'，表达父母认为我有天赋。'send me into the teaching thing agency'应改为'sent me to the teaching agency'，介词和表达更准确。

× So actually I like seeing very much because I have trained since I was a child and the because my parents think me, I have the gifts for thing and they send me into the teaching thing agency.

✓ So actually I like singing very much because I have trained since I was a child and because my parents think I have the gift for singing and they sent me to the teaching agency.

句中描述过去发生的动作，'send'应使用过去式'sent'。

× So actually I like seeing very much because I have trained since I was a child and the because my parents think me, I have the gifts for thing and they send me into the teaching thing agency.

✓ So actually I like singing very much because I have trained since I was a child and because my parents think I have the gift for singing and they sent me to the teaching agency.

'have trained'使用正确的过去分词形式，保持时态一致。

× Yes, so as I said when I was a child, I my parents think me a thing.

✓ Yes, so as I said when I was a child, my parents taught me singing.

'think me a thing'表达错误，应为' taught me singing'，且'taught'为teach的过去式。

× Yes, so as I said when I was a child, I my parents think me a thing.

✓ Yes, so as I said when I was a child, my parents taught me singing.

句中多余的'I'应删除，'think me'应改为'taught me'，正确使用代词和动词。

× I have a very clean voices and beautiful melody.

✓ I have a very clear voice and a beautiful melody.

'voices'应为单数'voice'，'clean'形容声音不合适，应使用'clear'。

× When I was saying so they sent me to the professional teacher and let me teach me how to say.

✓ When I was singing, they sent me to a professional teacher who taught me how to sing.

'saying'应为'singing'，'let me teach me'表达错误，应为'who taught me'。

× When I was saying so they sent me to the professional teacher and let me teach me how to say.

✓ When I was singing, they sent me to a professional teacher who taught me how to sing.

'let me teach me'重复且错误，正确用法是'taught me'。

× The most the person that I want to see is definitely my grandfathers, but unfortunately he is possibly possibly furious go.

✓ The person I want to sing for the most is definitely my grandfather, but unfortunately he has possibly passed away.

'grandfathers'复数与后文单数'he'不符，应为单数'grandfather'。'furious go'表达错误，应为'passed away'。

× The most the person that I want to see is definitely my grandfathers, but unfortunately he is possibly possibly furious go.

✓ The person I want to sing for the most is definitely my grandfather, but unfortunately he has possibly passed away.

'he is possibly possibly furious go'语法和表达错误，需改为正确表达去世的句子。

× So this is a very picky. I can shoot my voice is too he if they have any opportunity, which I would like to see a lot of source 22. He and the message.

✓ He is very picky. I can adjust my voice if I have any opportunity, and I would like to sing a lot of songs for him and send him my message.

句子结构混乱，代词使用错误，需调整为正确表达。

× So I think he's a depends because people different people have barriers, you know, emotion and the prescription.

✓ So I think it depends because different people have barriers, you know, emotions and perceptions.

'he's a depends'错误，应为'it depends'，表达可能性。

× So I think he's a depends because people different people have barriers, you know, emotion and the prescription.

✓ So I think it depends because different people have barriers, you know, emotions and perceptions.

'people different people'重复且语序错误，应为'different people'。

× So if someone who are get success, they heard some songs sounds like very happy they met, met feeling a sense of achievement, but instead for the set person have the opposite deal.

✓ So if someone who has success hears some songs that sound very happy, they may feel a sense of achievement, but for others, it may have the opposite effect.

动词时态和主谓一致错误，形容词和副词使用不当，需调整语序和词汇。