Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid unclear fragments (e.g. “Escape 3”), use correct grammar and provide one or two brief supporting reasons. Keep it under five sentences and use linking words for coherence.

例: Yes, I do like eating chocolate. I especially enjoy dark chocolate because it has a rich, slightly bitter taste that I find satisfying. However, I also like milk chocolate for its creamy sweetness. Overall, I eat different types depending on my mood.

提案: Be precise and grammatically correct: give a clear frequency, use a linking phrase for examples, and correct collocations (e.g. “take a break”, “small treat”). Keep it concise and natural.

例: I usually have chocolate once or twice a week as a small treat. For example, I often enjoy a piece after dinner or when I need to take a break at work.

提案: Expand slightly with a specific reason or brief example and use a linking word. Avoid vague phrases like “it was easy”; explain what you mean (easy to get, tasty, etc.).

例: Yes, I used to eat chocolate quite often as a child because it was easy to buy and my parents often gave it as a treat. For instance, I remember getting a chocolate bar after swimming lessons.

提案: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and two specific reasons. Use correct grammar and linking words (e.g. “firstly”, “also”). Avoid confusing or irrelevant phrases like “it's like a tree.”

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide for two main reasons. Firstly, it tastes good and appeals to many people. Secondly, it is often given as a gift on special occasions, which makes it culturally significant in many countries.

提案: Start with a direct answer and give a clear name of the flavour. Correct vocabulary (e.g. “white chocolate” or “milk chocolate”), and give a brief reason why it is your favourite.

例: I'm not a big fan of chocolate in general, but I do like white chocolate. I enjoy its creamy, sweet flavour and often choose it in desserts or as a small treat.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and two concise reasons with correct grammar and collocations (e.g. “universally enjoyed”, “small token of appreciation”). Use linking words like “because” and “also.”

例: Yes, I think chocolate makes a good gift because it is widely enjoyed and feels a bit elegant. Also, it works well as a small token of appreciation for birthdays or celebrations.

× Yes, I enjoy eating chocolate Escape 3 dark chocolates.

✓ Yes, I enjoy eating chocolate. I especially like dark chocolate.

Original mixes singular/plural and contains extraneous phrase 'Escape 3'. Use consistent noun form: 'chocolate' (uncountable) and 'dark chocolate' (uncountable) or 'dark chocolates' if referring to individual pieces. Remove irrelevant text and split into two clear sentences.

× They are very tasty looking me but they are little bitter but it is satisfying and less ironic.

✓ They look very tasty to me, but they are a little bitter; however, they are satisfying and not unpleasant.

Several problems: 'tasty looking me' has wrong word order and preposition; 'little bitter' needs determiner 'a little'; 'it is satisfying' should refer to plural 'they are'; 'less ironic' is inappropriate—likely meant 'not unpleasant' or 'less sweet'. Rearranged for clarity and correct adjective/adverb usage.

× Milk chocolate I like.

✓ I like milk chocolate.

Incorrect word order. English standard subject-verb-object order should be used: 'I like milk chocolate.'

× I eat chocolate once or about twice a week, usually as a smaller treat after dinner or I need to kick break.

✓ I eat chocolate once or twice a week, usually as a small treat after dinner or as a break.

Removed redundant 'about' after 'or' and fixed quantifier placement. 'Smaller treat' should be 'small treat'. 'I need to kick break' is ungrammatical; likely meant 'as a break' or 'for a quick break'. Corrected to fit present habitual tense.

× Yes, I used to eat chocolate quite often as a child because it was easy.

✓ Yes, I used to eat chocolate quite often when I was a child because it was easy to get.

Original is mostly correct but 'as a child' is fine; added 'to get' to clarify 'easy' meaning. 'Used to' correctly expresses past habitual action.

× Chocolate's global popularity stems several because it is a tasty as well.

✓ Chocolate's global popularity stems from several reasons because it is tasty as well.

Missing preposition 'from' after 'stems' and awkward 'several' needs 'several reasons'. 'A tasty' is incorrect; use 'tasty' without article.

× It is a sweet as it's used to give gifts.

✓ It is a sweet treat and is often used as a gift.

'A sweet' is acceptable but sentence structure awkward. Rephrased to clarify that chocolate is a sweet treat commonly given as a gift.

× Also, sometimes it's like a tree.

✓ Also, sometimes it is associated with celebrations or special occasions.

Original 'it's like a tree' is meaningless in context. Suggested a plausible intended meaning: chocolate as part of celebrations. If speaker meant packaging like a tree, they should clarify. Rephrased for coherence.

× I'm not big fan of chocolate but there is a one flavor which I like to eat.

✓ I'm not a big fan of chocolate, but there is one flavor that I like.

Missing article 'a' before 'big fan' and 'a one flavor' is incorrect; use 'one flavor'. 'Which I like to eat' is wordy; 'that I like' is clearer.

× It's known as chop white chocolate milk.

✓ It's known as white chocolate with milk, or milk white chocolate.

Original phrase 'chop white chocolate milk' is unclear and ungrammatical. Suggested clearer descriptions: 'white chocolate with milk' or 'milk white chocolate', depending on intended meaning.

× It's my favorite one.

✓ It's my favorite.

Redundant use of 'one' after 'favorite'. 'Favorite' alone suffices.

× Yes, I think it's a good and a wonderful gift because it is universally enjoy and feel elegant specially as a small token and appreciate or celebrate.

✓ Yes, I think it's a good and wonderful gift because it is universally enjoyed and feels elegant, especially as a small token to show appreciation or to celebrate.

'Universally enjoy' needs past participle 'enjoyed'. 'Feel elegant' should be 'feels elegant' to agree with singular 'it'. 'Specially' should be 'especially'. Reordered phrase 'to show appreciation or to celebrate' clarifies purpose. Also removed extra article before 'wonderful'.