Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with correct grammar and collocations (e.g., “dark chocolate boosts my mood” not “increase our mood swings”). Avoid redundancy and keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate, especially dark chocolate. I prefer dark chocolate because it contains less sugar and makes me feel more energetic and mentally relaxed.

提案: Answer the frequency directly using correct tense and simple adverbs (e.g., “once a week,” “rarely”). If you mention a recent occasion, describe it clearly and grammatically. Avoid contradictions like “ever never.” Keep to 1–2 sentences.

例: I usually eat chocolate once a week. Last week I had a Dairy Milk bar, which I found very tasty.

提案: Use the past simple for habits in childhood and give a short explanation. Organize the sentence: topic sentence + specific detail. Avoid awkward phrasing and questions to yourself.

例: Yes, I ate chocolate a lot when I was a child. My parents often bought sweets for me, so I could have chocolate almost every week.

提案: Give a fuller answer: start with a direct statement then add 1–2 specific reasons (e.g., affordability, variety, cultural factors). Use linking words like “because” or “also” to connect ideas.

例: I think chocolate is popular because it tastes good and is available in many varieties. Also, it’s affordable and used in celebrations and gifts worldwide.

提案: Give a complete sentence naming your favourite and explain briefly why. Use correct terms—people usually say a flavour like “milk chocolate,” “dark chocolate,” or add flavouring like “mint” or “orange.” Explain what you like about the taste or texture.

例: My favourite type is dark chocolate with strong cocoa flavour because I like its rich, slightly bitter taste and firm texture.

提案: Provide a polite opinion with reasons and, if possible, a brief alternative. Use present tense and avoid absolute statements; explain why you think it’s cheap and offer when it might be appropriate.

例: Not always; I don’t usually give chocolate as a gift because it feels too ordinary for special occasions. However, it can be a nice, affordable gift for friends or small celebrations.

× Yes, I like to eat chocolates, but I eat only dark chocolate because dark chocolate increase our mood swings, relax our mind and feel energetic.

✓ Yes, I like to eat chocolate, but I eat only dark chocolate because dark chocolate increases my mood, relaxes my mind, and makes me feel energetic.

Errors: plural 'chocolates' should be uncountable 'chocolate' when speaking generally (singular/plural issue). 'dark chocolate increase' is incorrect subject-verb agreement and fits both singular/plural and third person singular issues; here 'dark chocolate' is singular so the verb needs -s (increases). Pronoun 'our mind' is inconsistent with 'I'; use 'my mind'. Parallel verbs need third person singular: 'relaxes' and use 'makes me feel' for natural expression. Suggestion: use uncountable 'chocolate' for general liking, ensure subject-verb agreement with third person singular, keep pronouns consistent, and maintain parallel verb forms.

× I'm basically I eat chocolate at last week, uh, it was Dairy Milk chocolate was a very delicious chocolate. I have ever never had that chocolate.

✓ Basically, I ate chocolate last week; it was Dairy Milk, and it was very delicious. I had never had that chocolate before.

Errors: Tense misuse. 'I'm basically I eat chocolate at last week' mixes present and past; when referring to a specific time in the past use past simple ('ate'). 'at last week' is incorrect preposition and time expression; use 'last week'. 'it was Dairy Milk chocolate was a very delicious chocolate' is a run-on with repeated 'was' and redundant noun use; restructure. 'I have ever never had' is incorrect auxiliary order; use past perfect 'I had never had' when referring to a state before that past event. Suggestion: Use past simple for completed past events and past perfect to refer to something that had not happened before another past event; fix prepositions and simplify redundant phrases.

× Yes, I eat chocolate whenever and I was kid. Uh, do my mother bring me chocolates and my father also bring me chocolates to eat me?

✓ Yes, I ate chocolate whenever I was a kid. My mother brought me chocolates and my father also brought me chocolates for me to eat.

Errors: Use past tense when describing childhood habits ('ate' and 'was a kid'). Sentence structure and verb forms are incorrect: 'do my mother bring me' is present question form but intended as past statement; change to past simple 'my mother brought me'. 'to eat me' is incorrect word order and meaning; use 'for me to eat' or 'so I could eat them'. Also add article 'a' in 'a kid'. Suggestion: Use simple past to describe habitual past actions, correct word order for purpose phrases, and include necessary articles.

× Because it is tasty.

✓ Because it is tasty.

No grammatical correction needed. The sentence correctly uses present tense to state a general reason. Suggestion: You could expand ('Because it tastes good' or 'Because it is tasty and widely enjoyed') but grammatically it is acceptable.

× Cocoa butter.

✓ Cocoa butter.

Short answer naming a flavour is acceptable. If intended as 'My favourite flavour is cocoa butter.' the correction would be: 'My favourite flavour is cocoa butter.' The original is acceptable in spoken short-answer format. Suggestion: For full-sentence response include subject and verb.

× No, because it was cheap gift.

✓ No, because it is a cheap gift.

Errors: Tense and article use. The student used past 'was' but the question asks a general opinion about using chocolate as gifts—present tense 'is' is appropriate. Also missing indefinite article 'a' before 'cheap gift'. Suggestion: Use present tense for general opinions and include appropriate articles ('a' or 'the').