Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınızda daha doğal ve akıcı ifadeler kullanmalısınız. "I'm not prefer to eat in chocolate" yerine "I don't prefer to eat chocolate" demelisiniz. Ayrıca, cümlenizi daha kısa ve net tutarak, gereksiz tekrarları önleyin. Örneğin, sağlıksız olduğunu belirtirken, nedenlerini açık ve spesifik şekilde ifade edin.

例: I like chocolate like many people, but I don't prefer to eat it often because it contains a lot of sugar and artificial ingredients, which are unhealthy.

提案: Cümlenizde daha doğru zaman ve yapı kullanmalısınız. "I'm not preferred to eating chocolate" yerine "I don't prefer eating chocolate" demelisiniz. Ayrıca, neden ayda bir yediğinizi daha açık ve net ifade edin. Bağlaçları kullanarak cümlelerinizi daha akıcı hale getirin.

例: I eat chocolate only once a month because it coincides with my period. On other days, I prefer eating protein bars or homemade sugar-free chocolate instead.

提案: Cümlelerinizi daha düzgün ve akıcı kurmalısınız. "I'm this not sweet things" ifadesi anlam açısından belirsiz. "I didn't have a sweet tooth as a child" gibi net ifadeler kullanın. Ayrıca, geçmiş zaman kullanımı ve bağlaçlarla cümlelerinizi geliştirin.

例: No, I wasn't a big fan of chocolate as a child because I didn't have a sweet tooth. I preferred savory snacks like chips and homemade food, and I still don't like sugary things.

提案: Cümlelerinizi daha açık ve mantıklı bağlaçlarla birleştirin. "Almost every pupil have a sweet tooth" yerine "Most people have a sweet tooth" demelisiniz. Ayrıca, fikrinizi tam ve net ifade edin, cümlelerinizi tamamlayın.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and most people have a sweet tooth. However, I don't always prefer chocolate, but if I choose something sweet, chocolate is a good option.

提案: Daha doğal ve doğru ifadeler kullanmalısınız. "I'm gonna choose specific one" yerine "I don't have a specific favourite" diyebilirsiniz. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizi daha kısa ve net yaparak, tekrarları önleyin.

例: I don't have a specific favourite flavour, but if I eat chocolate, I prefer ones with nuts because I don't like plain chocolate.

提案: Cümlelerinizi daha akıcı ve mantıklı bağlaçlarla birleştirin. "Chocolate is not good gifts" yerine "Chocolate is not always a good gift" demelisiniz. Ayrıca, fikirlerinizi daha net ve detaylı açıklayın.

例: I think chocolate can be a good gift sometimes, but I prefer flowers because everyone has different tastes, and chocolate options are very varied.

× I'm not prefer to eat in chocolate because that's really unhealthy and that's really a lot of process, sugar and etcetera and artificial.

✓ I don't prefer to eat chocolate because it's really unhealthy and contains a lot of processed sugar and artificial ingredients.

The modal verb 'prefer' is incorrectly used with 'I'm not prefer'. The correct form is 'I don't prefer'. Also, 'process' should be 'processed' as an adjective describing sugar.

× I'm not prefer to eat in chocolate because that's really unhealthy and that's really a lot of process, sugar and etcetera and artificial.

✓ I don't prefer to eat chocolate because it's really unhealthy and contains a lot of processed sugar and artificial ingredients.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used after 'eat'. The correct phrase is 'eat chocolate' without 'in'.

× And I don't like eating Shepherd. I'm not pre. This is not my prefer.

✓ And I don't like eating chocolate. It's not my preference.

'Shepherd' is likely a mispronunciation or incorrect word; it should be 'chocolate'. 'I'm not pre' is incomplete and unclear; it should be 'It's not my preference' to express dislike properly.

× Just one time in a month because this is my period, this relationship with my period actually.

✓ Just once a month because it relates to my period.

'One time' is better expressed as 'once'. 'This relationship with my period actually' is awkward; rephrased for clarity.

× And the other days I'm not, I'm not preferred to eating chocolate.

✓ And on other days, I don't prefer eating chocolate.

'I'm not preferred' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I don't prefer'. Also, 'to eating' should be 'eating' without 'to'.

× I just use, I eat generally protein bar and I do homemade chocolate without sugar.

✓ I generally eat protein bars and make homemade chocolate without sugar.

'Use' is unnecessary here. 'Protein bar' should be plural 'protein bars'. 'Do homemade chocolate' is incorrect; 'make homemade chocolate' is correct.

× No, I'm not a big fan of chocolate. I'm this not sweet things.

✓ No, I'm not a big fan of chocolate. I don't like sweet things.

'I'm this not sweet things' is grammatically incorrect and unclear; corrected to 'I don't like sweet things'.

× I was child.

✓ I was a child.

Missing article 'a' before 'child'.

× I like, umm, savory things like chips and homemade food. I'm not big fan of chocolate and sugar things now.

✓ I like savory things like chips and homemade food. I'm not a big fan of chocolate and sugary things now.

Missing article 'a' before 'big fan'. 'Sugar things' should be 'sugary things' as an adjective.

× Because the taste is really good, they generally almost every pupil have a sweet tooth.

✓ Because the taste is really good, almost every person has a sweet tooth.

'They generally almost every pupil have' is incorrect subject-verb agreement and pronoun use. 'Pupil' is less appropriate; 'person' is better.

× So this is the so this is so basic things to each sweet things actually.

✓ So these are basic things for every sweet item actually.

'This is' with plural 'things' is incorrect; should be 'these are'. 'Each sweet things' is incorrect; 'every sweet item' is better.

× But I'm not preferred just chocolate.

✓ But I don't prefer just chocolate.

'I'm not preferred' is incorrect; correct form is 'I don't prefer'.

× I'm gonna choose specific one, but if I eat chocolate I want to add some nuts in here in in it because I don't like normal chocolate.

✓ I'm going to choose a specific one, but if I eat chocolate, I want to add some nuts to it because I don't like plain chocolate.

'Add some nuts in here in in it' is incorrect; correct preposition is 'to it'. 'Normal chocolate' is better expressed as 'plain chocolate'.

× If I eat chocolate I want different kind of stuff and eat it.

✓ If I eat chocolate, I want different kinds of stuff to eat.

Missing plural 'kinds' and awkward phrasing; corrected for clarity.

× Because chocolate is not good gifts.

✓ Because chocolate is not a good gift.

'Gifts' should be singular 'gift' to agree with 'is'.

× I prefer to flowers because chocolate is so specific that everyone has a different kind of umm, taste.

✓ I prefer flowers because chocolate is so specific that everyone has a different kind of taste.

'Prefer to flowers' is incorrect; correct is 'prefer flowers' without 'to'.

× And chocolate is not basic.

✓ And chocolate is not basic.

This sentence is grammatically correct but could be clearer by specifying 'basic' as 'a basic gift'.

× There's lots of option.

✓ There are lots of options.

'Option' should be plural 'options' to agree with 'lots of'. Also, 'There are' is correct for plural.