Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but a bit repetitive and has minor grammar errors. Try to be more concise and avoid repeating words. Also, explain your opinion with a bit more detail to make your answer richer.

例: I don't like eating chocolate because its bitter-sweet taste doesn't appeal to me. Additionally, the texture feels unpleasant in my mouth, which makes me avoid it.

提案: Your answer is good but a bit long and has some grammar mistakes. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid repeating words. Also, try to be more precise with your sentences.

例: I don't eat chocolate regularly unless someone gifts it to me. For example, a friend once gave me a chocolate with a creamy base, which I really enjoyed because of its smooth taste.

提案: Your answer has good content but contains grammar errors and incomplete sentences. Try to use correct tenses and complete your thoughts clearly. Also, use linking words to make your answer flow better.

例: I didn't eat chocolate often as a child because my parents were concerned about my health. Therefore, they encouraged me to eat fruits and healthy meals instead of sweets.

提案: Your answer repeats ideas and has grammar mistakes. Try to organize your points clearly and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it is a universal snack enjoyed by many. Moreover, it is affordable, with options ranging from inexpensive to premium, making it accessible to different people.

提案: Your answer is relevant but a bit repetitive and informal. Try to avoid repeating words and use more precise vocabulary to express your opinion.

例: Although I generally don't like chocolate, I enjoy varieties with a creamy base because they have a mild and pleasant flavor.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Make sure to finish your sentences and explain your ideas fully. Also, use linking words to connect your points logically.

例: Giving chocolate as a gift is thoughtful; however, it depends on the recipient's preferences. Some people may appreciate it, while others might prefer different gifts.

× I do not like eating chocolate because it has a strange taste.

✓ I do not like to eat chocolate because it has a strange taste.

In English, after verbs like 'like', both the gerund (-ing form) and the infinitive (to + verb) can be used, but 'like to eat' is more common when expressing preference in general. Using 'to eat' here sounds more natural and clear.

× It has this bitter and sweet taste and I don't like how it it feels.

✓ It has this bitter and sweet taste and I don't like how it feels.

There is a repeated word 'it' which is a typographical error. Removing the extra 'it' corrects the sentence.

× There was a particular chocolate my friend gave to me when I went visiting.

✓ There was a particular chocolate my friend gave to me when I went visiting.

This sentence is correct in past tense and needs no correction.

× This chocolate tasted so good I had to take note of it and I had I read the ingredients.

✓ This chocolate tasted so good that I had to take note of it and I read the ingredients.

The sentence is missing the conjunction 'that' to connect the clauses properly. Also, 'I had I read' is incorrect; it should be 'I read' to maintain correct sentence structure.

× I discovered that it also had the creamy base and I loved the taste.

✓ I discovered that it also had a creamy base and I loved the taste.

'Creamy base' is a general noun phrase here, so the indefinite article 'a' is appropriate instead of the definite article 'the'.

× I didn't eat chocolate when I was in a kid.

✓ I didn't eat chocolate when I was a kid.

The preposition 'in' is unnecessary before 'a kid'. The correct phrase is 'when I was a kid'.

× They thought that having chocolate as a child will have a negative impact on my health.

✓ They thought that having chocolate as a child would have a negative impact on my health.

Since the main verb 'thought' is in the past tense, the modal verb should be 'would' (past form) instead of 'will' to maintain tense consistency.

× So they decided that I it's either I take fruits or healthy meals and it's.

✓ So they decided that I should either take fruits or healthy meals.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Correcting it to a clear structure with 'should' and removing unnecessary words improves clarity and grammar.

× There are expensive chocolate and they are very affordable chocolate hence the reason why is popular around the world.

✓ There is expensive chocolate and there is very affordable chocolate; hence the reason why it is popular around the world.

'Chocolate' is uncountable here, so singular verbs 'is' are used. Also, 'it' refers to 'chocolate' as a singular noun, so 'it is' is correct.

× Chocolate is popular around the world because it is a universal snack that is acceptable by everyone and it has it is budget very budget friendly.

✓ Chocolate is popular around the world because it is a universal snack that is acceptable to everyone and it is very budget friendly.

The phrase 'acceptable by everyone' should be 'acceptable to everyone'. Also, 'it has it is budget very budget friendly' is incorrect; it should be 'it is very budget friendly'.

× A lot of people can afford it.

✓ A lot of people can afford it.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× There are expensive chocolate and they are very affordable chocolate hence the reason why is popular around the world.

✓ There is expensive chocolate and there is very affordable chocolate; hence the reason why it is popular around the world.

Repeated correction for clarity: 'chocolate' is uncountable, so singular verbs and pronouns are appropriate.

× As I mentioned earlier, I do not like chocolate, but I love the one that is combined with a creamy base.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I do not like chocolate, but I love the one that is combined with a creamy base.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× It gives it this mild taste that is very very appealing to my taste buds.

✓ It gives it this mild taste that is very appealing to my taste buds.

Repeating 'very' twice is redundant. Using 'very' once is sufficient and more natural.

× Giving chocolate to people as gifts is a very thoughtful gesture, but this depends on the preference of the person you are gifting. Elasticity.

✓ Giving chocolate to people as gifts is a very thoughtful gesture, but this depends on the preference of the person you are gifting.

The word 'Elasticity' at the end is unrelated and should be removed to correct the sentence structure.