Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，存在重复和冗余。建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并注意冠词和单复数的使用。

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it gives me energy due to its high sugar content. Also, I enjoy its various shapes, which I find very attractive.

提案: 回答中有很多语气词和语法错误，表达不清晰。建议练习简洁明了的句子，避免重复和不必要的填充词。

例: I usually eat chocolate once a week because I believe moderate consumption is better for my health and mood.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，表达不够流畅。建议使用连贯的句子，注意时态和主谓一致。

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child because I was attracted by its different shapes and flavors. Visiting chocolate shops and tasting various kinds made me very happy and energetic.

提案: 回答内容较好，但表达不够自然，句子结构有待改进。建议使用更自然的表达方式，避免直译。

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it has a long history and is traded globally. Its variety of shapes and delicious taste attract many people.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复，表达不够简洁。建议简化句子，避免重复，并使用更准确的词汇。

例: My favourite chocolate flavours are fruit ones, like blueberry and strawberry, because they taste natural and sweet.

提案: 回答表达基本清楚，但句子结构不够连贯。建议使用连词使句子更流畅，并注意单复数一致。

例: I think chocolate makes a beautiful gift because it comes in various flavors and shapes. When people receive chocolate, they usually feel happy and surprised.

× I suffer from low pressures and I need a sugars to retain my energy

✓ I suffer from low pressure and I need sugar to retain my energy

pressure 和 sugar 是不可数名词，不能加复数形式的 -s。这里应使用单数形式。

× chocolate contains lots of sugars and energy

✓ chocolate contains lots of sugar and energy

sugar 是不可数名词，不能用复数形式 sugars，应使用单数形式。

× it's attracted me

✓ it attracts me

这里应使用主动语态，主语是 it，动词用一般现在时 attracts，且用主动形式。

× I ate chocolate once a week

✓ I eat chocolate once a week

问题是询问频率，使用一般现在时表示习惯动作，不能用过去时 ate。

× I think eat chocolate, uh, frequently doesn't uh, improve my house

✓ I think eating chocolate frequently doesn't improve my health

house 应为 health，且动词 eat 应改为动名词 eating，表示习惯行为。

× moderate time to eat chocolate is a good and it's better for my house body and my mood

✓ moderate time to eat chocolate is good and it's better for my health and my mood

a good 应去掉冠词 a，house body 应为 health，表达更准确。

× chocolate shapes and their different, uh, flavors attracts me a lot

✓ chocolate shapes and their different flavors attract me a lot

主语是复数，动词应使用复数形式 attract。

× When I visited to the chocolate shops

✓ When I visited the chocolate shops

visit 后面不需要介词 to，直接加宾语。

× which makes me very happy and it, and keep my energy levels up

✓ which makes me very happy and keeps my energy levels up

主语是 which，动词应使用第三人称单数形式 keeps。

× it across all of the world and to communicate and to import or export the chocolate

✓ it is across all of the world and is used to communicate and to import or export chocolate

缺少系动词 is，且 chocolate 前不需要定冠词 the。

× Also the chocolate has very different shapes and it has a good taste which attracts a lot of people around the world

✓ Also chocolate has very different shapes and it has a good taste which attracts a lot of people around the world

chocolate 前不需要定冠词 the。

× I like to eat fruit flavor or chocolate like blueberry or strawberry and lots of kinds of fruit

✓ I like to eat fruit-flavored chocolate like blueberry or strawberry and lots of kinds of fruit

fruit flavor 应改为 fruit-flavored chocolate，表达更准确。

× because I think fruits, it's a natural plant and it contains a lot of, uh, good taste

✓ because I think fruits are natural plants and they contain a lot of good taste

fruits 是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式 are 和 they。

× Also, the fruit taste is very sweet

✓ Also, the fruit tastes very sweet

taste 作动词时，主语是 fruit，动词用第三人称单数形式 tastes。

× Chocolates has different chips and different flavors of taste

✓ Chocolate has different chips and different flavors

Chocolate 作为不可数名词，动词用单数 has，chips 应为 chocolate chips，flavors of taste 冗余，简化为 flavors。

× People. When people receive the chocolate, they will feel very happy and surprised

✓ When people receive chocolate, they will feel very happy and surprised

the chocolate 前不需要定冠词 the。