Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and has many hesitations. Try to give a clear and complete sentence without filler words. For example, say directly why you like chocolate and how it makes you feel.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it gives me a lot of enjoyment and makes me feel happy.

提案: Your answer is good but a bit long and slightly unclear. Try to use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Also, be more specific about how often you eat chocolate.

例: I eat chocolate regularly because it instantly refreshes my mood and makes me feel happy.

提案: Your answer has many hesitations and is incomplete at the end. Try to complete your sentences and avoid repeating words. Also, explain clearly why you did not like chocolate as a kid.

例: No, I did not eat chocolate often as a kid because I disliked its mushy texture.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and has many filler words. Try to finish your thoughts clearly and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it brings happiness and relaxation, and also because it tastes delicious.

提案: Your answer is good but has some repetition and minor errors. Try to avoid repeating words and use correct expressions for flavors.

例: My favourite flavour of chocolate is orange because I enjoy its tangy taste.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and has many hesitations. Try to complete your sentences and give clear reasons or examples for your opinion.

例: It depends on the person, but generally, chocolates are a special gift. For example, I like giving chocolates to my sisters because they enjoy them.

× Definitely. I love, uh, eating chocolate because it, uh, gives me a sense of uh, uh. In enjoyment and.

✓ Definitely. I love eating chocolate because it gives me a sense of enjoyment.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains unnecessary fillers and incomplete phrases. Removing fillers and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I eat the chocolate on a regular basis because it is my therapy for for happiness and refreshment my mood gets instantly.

✓ I eat chocolate on a regular basis because it is my therapy for happiness and refreshment; my mood improves instantly.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'chocolate' when speaking generally. Also, the sentence is run-on and needs proper punctuation and wording for clarity.

× No, it uh, no, it is the habit that I picked up when I grew older. Uh, uh, when I was a kid, I, I used to hate the mushy nature of the.

✓ No, it is a habit that I picked up when I grew older. When I was a kid, I used to hate the mushy nature of it.

The sentence was incomplete and had redundant fillers. Correcting the tense and completing the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I believe umm, the happiness and the relaxation that the chocolate uh, brings is the are the reasons for its popularity around the world. Uh, also, I think that, uh, it is kind of.

✓ I believe the happiness and relaxation that chocolate brings are the reasons for its popularity around the world. Also, I think that it is kind of special.

The sentence had redundant words and incomplete thoughts. Correcting pronoun use and completing the sentence improves clarity and grammar.

× I love eating chocolate chocolate with oranges flavour because I love love the tangy some flavor that it has.

✓ I love eating chocolate with orange flavor because I love the tangy flavor it has.

The phrase 'chocolate chocolate with oranges flavour' is redundant and incorrectly ordered. Correcting adjective order and removing repetition improves clarity.

× It depends on to the person receiving it. Generally, chocolates, uh, are uh, a quite special gift to provide, uh, others. For example, uh, it is a very special to give chocolates to sisters and.

✓ It depends on the person receiving it. Generally, chocolates are quite a special gift to give to others. For example, it is very special to give chocolates to sisters.

Incorrect preposition 'on to' was used; it should be 'on'. Also, the phrase 'a quite special gift to provide' is awkward; 'quite a special gift to give' is correct. The sentence was incomplete and needed completion for clarity.