Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰，建议简化句子结构，直接表达观点，并补充具体原因。

例: I don't like eating chocolate because it harms my teeth. If I eat too much, I have to visit the dentist frequently.

提案: 回答不够流畅且语法错误较多，建议使用简单句表达频率，并说明具体情况。

例: I rarely eat chocolate unless there is a special occasion. Otherwise, I try to avoid it.

提案: 回答内容不相关且表达混乱，建议直接回答问题并补充具体细节。

例: No, I didn't eat chocolate often as a child because my mother limited sweets to protect my health.

提案: 表达不清晰且语法错误较多，建议用简单句说明巧克力受欢迎的原因，并举例说明。

例: Chocolate is popular because it tastes good and is made from rare ingredients. Many people enjoy its unique flavor.

提案: 表达较为清楚，但语法有误，建议注意时态和词形变化，丰富词汇。

例: My favorite chocolate flavor is the original one because I enjoy its natural taste without any added spices.

提案: 回答中断且重复较多，建议简洁表达并补充具体细节，如包装和朋友的反应。

例: Yes, I think chocolate makes a good gift. I once gave chocolate to a friend on her birthday, and she loved it because I wrapped it nicely.

× my teeth is very, uh, have because my teeth has has a, a bad leg situation.

✓ my teeth are very bad because my teeth have a bad leg situation.

teeth 是复数形式，谓语动词应使用复数形式 are 和 have。这里学生错误地使用了单数形式 is 和 has。

× I have to go to see dentist.

✓ I have to go to see the dentist.

在英语中，表示看医生时，通常需要加定冠词 the，表示特指的医生。缺少冠词导致表达不完整。

× I hardly to eat chocolate instead of have some Special Situations.

✓ I hardly eat chocolate except in some special situations.

hardly 后面不接 to do 形式，应直接接动词原形 eat。instead of 用法不当，应使用 except in 表示“除非在某些特殊情况下”。

× my kids are always, uh, in, uh, in a bad situation

✓ I was always in a bad situation as a kid.

这里学生想表达自己小时候的情况，使用了复数 kids 代替自己，且时态不对。应使用单数第一人称 I 和过去时态 was。

× my mom have a high, uh, request, uh, request in questions for me.

✓ my mom has high expectations for me.

mom 是第三人称单数，谓语动词应使用 has 而非 have；request 用法不当，应使用 expectations 表达“期望”。

× the materials are bought chocolate is is with very rarely

✓ the materials used to make chocolate are very rare

materials 是复数，谓语用 are；bought chocolate 结构不正确，应改为 used to make chocolate；very rarely 是副词短语，修饰形容词 rare 更合适。

× the progress also be complexed.

✓ the process is also complex.

progress 是不可数名词，且此处应使用 process 表示“过程”；complexed 不是正确形容词，应使用 complex。

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is original taste because I like the natural.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is the original taste because I like the natural flavor.

original taste 前应加定冠词 the；like the natural 后应补充名词 flavor，使表达完整。

× and don't added any spices.

✓ and it doesn't have any added spices.

don't added 结构错误，应使用 does not have any added spices，added 作形容词修饰 spices。

× before I also use the chocolate as a gift to my friend's birthday

✓ before, I also used chocolate as a gift for my friend's birthday

时态应为过去时 used；gift 后应接介词 for 表示“作为礼物送给某人”。

× she, she really like chocolate

✓ she really likes chocolate

第三人称单数 she，谓语动词应加 s，变为 likes；重复 she 多余。

× I did some, uh, special, uh, package it.

✓ I did some special packaging for it.

package 作名词时应为 packaging；动词 do 后接名词形式。

× It will be, uh, it will be distinctive and.

✓ It will be distinctive.

句子末尾 and 后无内容，造成句子不完整，应删去 and。