Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中出现了语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，例如“because I have 3 tooth”不合逻辑且语法错误。建议用更自然的表达方式说明喜欢巧克力的原因，并避免无关信息。

例: Yes, I love chocolate because it tastes delicious and helps me relax when I feel anxious, even though it contains a lot of calories.

提案: 回答较为完整，但句子结构稍显重复，建议使用连接词使表达更流畅，同时注意语法，如“has high calories”应为“has a high calorie content”。

例: I usually eat chocolate about twice a week because it helps me relax, although I try not to eat it too often due to its high calorie content.

提案: 回答内容较好，但有语法错误和口语填充词较多，建议减少“uh”等词汇，注意时态一致性，如“my tooth will become decayed”应为“my teeth would become decayed”。

例: No, I rarely ate chocolate as a child because my mother didn't allow me to eat too much, especially when I was getting my adult teeth, as it could cause tooth decay.

提案: 回答不完整且语法错误较多，表达不连贯。建议提前组织答案，使用连接词，避免重复和口语填充词，完整表达观点。

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it contains caffeine, which can be addictive. Moreover, it is often chosen as a gift due to its pleasant taste and wide appeal.

提案: 回答中有词汇错误，如“credit chocolate”应为“favorite chocolate”，表达不够准确。建议使用正确词汇，句子更简洁流畅。

例: My favorite chocolate is dark chocolate because it contains less sugar, which makes me feel healthier. Also, it has a smoother taste compared to milk chocolate, which I find too sweet.

提案: 回答表达基本清楚，但有词汇错误，如“trolley bars”应为“chocolate bars”。建议注意词汇准确性，避免错误影响表达。

例: Yes, definitely. Chocolate bars make perfect gifts, so I often give them to my friends. However, they might not be suitable for people who are worried about obesity or diabetes.

× Yes I do love chocolate because I have 3 tooth.

✓ Yes I do love chocolate because I have 3 teeth.

“tooth”是单数形式，表示一颗牙齿；当数量大于1时，应使用复数形式“teeth”。这里说有3颗牙齿，应该用复数形式。

× Although it has a high calories I still love it because when I feel anxious it could help me relax.

✓ Although it has high calories I still love it because when I feel anxious it could help me relax.

“calories”是可数名词复数，前面不应加不定冠词“a”，应直接用“high calories”。

× I don't eat chocolate in a fixed schedule, but most of the time I tend to eat twice a week because eating chocolate could help me relax, although it has high calories.

✓ I don't eat chocolate on a fixed schedule, but most of the time I tend to eat it twice a week because eating chocolate could help me relax, although it has high calories.

固定表达是“on a fixed schedule”，而不是“in a fixed schedule”。另外，“eat twice a week”前应加宾语“it”指代巧克力。

× No, I seldom ate chocolate when I was kid because my mom didn't allow me to eat too much uh, especially when I was uh, getting my adult teeth.

✓ No, I seldom ate chocolate when I was a kid because my mom didn't allow me to eat too much, especially when I was getting my adult teeth.

“when I was kid”缺少冠词，应为“when I was a kid”。

× If I ate too much chocolate, my tooth will become decayed.

✓ If I ate too much chocolate, my teeth will become decayed.

“tooth”应使用复数形式“teeth”，因为指的是多颗牙齿。

× I think there are a lot of reason, uh, I think the first reason is that chocolate have some, uh, caffeine, which can let people addicted to it.

✓ I think there are a lot of reasons, uh, I think the first reason is that chocolate has some, uh, caffeine, which can make people addicted to it.

“a lot of reason”应为复数“a lot of reasons”；“chocolate have”主语是单数，应用“has”。

× I think there are a lot of reason, uh, I think the first reason is that chocolate have some, uh, caffeine, which can let people addicted to it.

✓ I think there are a lot of reasons, uh, I think the first reason is that chocolate has some, uh, caffeine, which can make people addicted to it.

主语“chocolate”是第三人称单数，谓语动词应使用“has”而非“have”。

× which can let people addicted to it.

✓ which can make people addicted to it.

动词“let”后面不接形容词“addicted”，应使用“make”来表达使人上瘾的意思。

× My credit chocolate must be the dark chocolate because I think dark chocolate contains light sugar which makes me feel healthier.

✓ My favorite chocolate must be dark chocolate because I think dark chocolate contains little sugar which makes me feel healthier.

“light sugar”表达不准确，应使用“little sugar”表示“少量糖”。

× Besides, uh, it is smoother than other types like by chocolate milk chocolate.

✓ Besides, uh, it is smoother than other types like white chocolate and milk chocolate.

“by chocolate”应为“white chocolate”，且“milk chocolate”前应加连词“and”连接两种巧克力类型。

× Other kinds of chocolates are too sweet.

✓ Other kinds of chocolate are too sweet.

“chocolate”作为不可数名词时不加复数形式，故应为“kinds of chocolate”。

× I think chocolate bars must be perfect gifts for others, so I usually send the trolley bars to my friends.

✓ I think chocolate bars must be perfect gifts for others, so I usually send the trolley bars to my friends.

此句中“trolley bars”可能是拼写错误，若指“truffle bars”应更正为“truffle bars”。但因不在语法问题列表中，故不做修改。