Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and incomplete. Try to give a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and complete your thoughts within 5 sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it comes in many varieties like dark, sugar-free, and milk chocolate. Among these, I especially enjoy Kit Kat due to its unique crunchy texture. Moreover, different flavors keep me interested and satisfied.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid repeating the word 'chocolate' too often and use linking words to improve flow.

例: I usually eat chocolate whenever I feel down because it lifts my mood. Since I am a big fan, I try to enjoy it daily as a small treat.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Try to form complete sentences and explain your ideas clearly. Use linking words to connect your points logically.

例: No, I did not eat chocolate often as a child because my parents were concerned about dental cavities. Therefore, they rarely allowed me to have chocolates until I grew older.

提案: Good points but try to use more precise vocabulary and link your ideas better. Also, avoid minor grammar mistakes for clarity.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because of its delicious taste, smooth texture, and attractive packaging. Additionally, the variety of flavors and textures, like crunchy chocolates, appeals to many people.

提案: Your answer is expressive but could be more concise and natural. Avoid exaggerations and use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: I enjoy many types of chocolate, but my favorite is Kit Kat because of its crunchy texture. This variety stands out among others for me.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. Try to complete your sentences and explain your ideas clearly with linking words.

例: Yes, I believe chocolate makes a great gift, especially for those who love sweets. Giving chocolate is a nice way to express good wishes and show appreciation.

× Yes, I just love chocolates.

✓ Yes, I just love chocolate.

In English, 'chocolate' as a general food item is usually uncountable and used in singular form when talking about it in general. Using 'chocolates' implies individual pieces or types, but here the general love is for chocolate as a substance.

× I like different kind of chocolates such as sugar free chocolates, dark chocolates, sugary chocolates and so on.

✓ I like different kinds of chocolate such as sugar-free chocolate, dark chocolate, sugary chocolate and so on.

The phrase 'different kind' should be pluralized to 'different kinds' because it refers to multiple types. Also, 'chocolates' should be 'chocolate' when referring to types or varieties in general. Hyphenation is needed in 'sugar-free' as a compound adjective.

× Different flavours of chocolates are are my favorite among them.

✓ Different flavours of chocolate are my favorites among them.

The sentence has a repeated word 'are are' which is a typographical error. Also, 'flavours of chocolates' should be 'flavours of chocolate' as 'chocolate' is uncountable here. 'Favorite' should be plural 'favorites' to agree with 'flavours'.

× Kit Kat and.

✓ Kit Kat is one of my favorites.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb and object. Completing the sentence clarifies the meaning.

× I try to enjoy chocolate because I think chocolate lift my mood and chocolate is very tasty.

✓ I try to enjoy chocolate because I think chocolate lifts my mood and chocolate is very tasty.

The verb 'lift' should be in third person singular form 'lifts' to agree with the singular subject 'chocolate'.

× I am a big chocolate lover so I try to enjoy it daily.

✓ I am a big chocolate lover, so I try to enjoy it daily.

A comma is needed before 'so' to separate the clauses properly.

× No my parents survey St. of it eating chocolate because they think dental caries will be happen in my tooth so they didn't allow me to have chocolates but after my.

✓ No, my parents were against me eating chocolate because they thought dental caries would happen to my teeth, so they didn't allow me to have chocolates, but after that...

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'survey St. of it' is unclear and likely incorrect; 'think' should be past tense 'thought' to match past context; 'will be happen' is incorrect, should be 'would happen'; 'tooth' should be plural 'teeth' as dental caries affect multiple teeth; sentence is incomplete and needs proper punctuation and structure.

× I think chocolate is very famous throughout the world because of its texture, taste and its packaging.

✓ I think chocolate is very famous all over the world because of its texture, taste, and packaging.

'Throughout the world' is acceptable but 'all over the world' is more natural here. Also, 'its' before 'packaging' is redundant when already used before 'texture' and 'taste'. Commas are needed in the list.

× Some chocolates are crunchy and so people love it to have different flavour.

✓ Some chocolates are crunchy, so people love to have different flavours.

'Flavour' should be plural 'flavours' to match 'different'. 'Love it to have' is incorrect; correct form is 'love to have'. Comma needed before 'so'.

× As I love chocolates more than my life so I have no boundaries to choose a single type of chocolate.

✓ As I love chocolate more than my life, I have no boundaries in choosing a single type of chocolate.

'Chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as uncountable noun. Comma needed after introductory clause. 'To choose' should be 'in choosing' for correct prepositional phrase.

× But among different type of chocolate, I love Kit Kat one because it has a crunchy taste.

✓ But among different types of chocolate, I love Kit Kat because it has a crunchy taste.

'Type' should be plural 'types' to agree with 'different'. 'Kit Kat one' is awkward; 'Kit Kat' suffices.

× Yes, I think chocolate can be great gift who loves chocolate because through chocolate people can send their good wishes to others and.

✓ Yes, I think chocolate can be a great gift for those who love chocolate because through chocolate people can send their good wishes to others.

Missing article 'a' before 'great gift'. 'Who loves chocolate' should be 'for those who love chocolate' to correctly refer to people. Sentence was incomplete; completed for clarity.