Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更准确的表达。

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate, especially milk chocolate, because it tastes delicious and makes me feel happy. Sweet foods often cheer me up.

提案: 回答较长且有语法错误，建议分句表达，使用连接词使句子更连贯，同时注意时态和词汇的准确使用。

例: I usually eat chocolate about twice a week. Recently, while preparing for exams, I eat a chocolate bar in the library when I feel hungry because it gives me energy to study longer.

提案: 回答中时态和语法错误较多，建议注意时态一致性，使用正确的动词形式，并简化表达。

例: No, I didn't eat chocolate often as a child because my parents thought it would harm my teeth. But as I grew up, I could decide for myself and started eating more chocolate.

提案: 回答内容较好，但部分表达重复且不够简洁，建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并避免重复。

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and is convenient. People can easily carry a chocolate bar as a quick snack when they feel hungry.

提案: 回答中有较多语法和发音错误，建议使用简单句表达喜好，避免重复和错误词汇。

例: My favourite flavour is milk chocolate because dark chocolate tastes bitter to me. Milk chocolate is smooth and sweet, so I like it.

提案: 回答表达混乱且有语法错误，建议简化句子结构，明确表达观点，并使用正确的词汇。

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift, especially for people who like sweets. You can buy a box with mixed flavors for them.

× Yes, I do like eating chocolates, especially the milk chocolate, and I think the most important reason is that I think chocolate is taste very well it and the second one is eating chocolate can make me feel happy.

✓ Yes, I do like eating chocolate, especially milk chocolate, and I think the most important reason is that I think chocolate tastes very good and the second one is eating chocolate can make me feel happy.

复数和单数的使用错误。'chocolates' 应改为不可数名词 'chocolate'，因为这里指的是巧克力这种食物的总称。动词 'taste' 应用第三人称单数形式 'tastes'，因为主语是单数 'chocolate'。

× Yes, I do like eating chocolates, especially the milk chocolate, and I think the most important reason is that I think chocolate is taste very well it and the second one is eating chocolate can make me feel happy.

✓ Yes, I do like eating chocolate, especially milk chocolate, and I think the most important reason is that I think chocolate tastes very good and the second one is eating chocolate can make me feel happy.

动词 'taste' 在这里应使用第三人称单数形式 'tastes'，而不是原形或其他形式。

× I think maybe twice a week recently I'm prepared for the examination, so I will eat a chocolate bar in the library when I'm studying and feel hungry.

✓ I think maybe twice a week recently. I'm preparing for the examination, so I will eat a chocolate bar in the library when I'm studying and feel hungry.

句子中 'prepared' 应为现在进行时 'preparing'，但这属于时态问题，暂不修改。此处无复数单数错误。

× No, actually I didn't because my parents thought that chocolate will do harm to my teeth, so they don't allowed me to eat chocolate.

✓ No, actually I didn't because my parents thought that chocolate would do harm to my teeth, so they didn't allow me to eat chocolate.

情态动词 'will' 在过去时态中应使用 'would'。动词 'allowed' 前不应加 'don't'，应改为过去式 'didn't allow'。

× No, actually I didn't because my parents thought that chocolate will do harm to my teeth, so they don't allowed me to eat chocolate.

✓ No, actually I didn't because my parents thought that chocolate would do harm to my teeth, so they didn't allow me to eat chocolate.

动词时态错误。'don't allowed' 应改为过去式 'didn't allow'，与前文过去时态保持一致。

× As I grow up, I can't decide whether to eat chocolate by myself and I began to eat more chocolate.

✓ As I grew up, I could decide whether to eat chocolate by myself and I began to eat more chocolate.

时态错误。'grow' 应为过去式 'grew'，'can't' 应为过去式 'could'，因为描述的是过去的情况。

× I think it is because of its taste and convenience. People can always take a chocolate bar as a quick snack with them when they feel hungry.

✓ I think it is because of its taste and convenience. People can always take a chocolate bar as a quick snack with them when they feel hungry.

此句无复数单数错误。

× They can take out and have a quick supplement.

✓ They can take it out and have a quick supplement.

缺少宾语代词 'it'，使句子完整。

× It's very convenient and the chocolate is also very delicious.

✓ It's very convenient and the chocolate is also very delicious.

此句无形容词或副词使用错误。

× Milk, I don't like a a black chocolate which which always very be taste bitter so the milk makes it taste smoothie and sweet.

✓ Milk. I don't like black chocolate which always tastes bitter, so the milk chocolate makes it taste smooth and sweet.

'a a black chocolate' 中多余 'a'，'black chocolate' 不加冠词。'taste' 应用第三人称单数 'tastes'。'smoothie' 应为形容词 'smooth'。

× Milk, I don't like a a black chocolate which which always very be taste bitter so the milk makes it taste smoothie and sweet.

✓ Milk. I don't like black chocolate which always tastes bitter, so the milk chocolate makes it taste smooth and sweet.

'very be taste bitter' 结构错误，应改为 'always tastes bitter'。'smoothie' 是名词，应改为形容词 'smooth'。

× Yes I do think so, especially the people who receive the gifts is lie liking like eating sweet food and you can buy some mixed flavor as a bog chocolate box for him or her.

✓ Yes, I do think so, especially people who like eating sweet food, and you can buy some mixed flavors as a big chocolate box for him or her.

'is lie liking like' 是错误的代词和动词搭配，应改为 'people who like'。'mixed flavor' 应为复数 'mixed flavors'。'bog' 应为 'big'。