Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免语法错误，如“Eating chocolate always cheer me up”应为“Eating chocolate always cheers me up”。此外，回答应更连贯，避免句子碎片。

例: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it always cheers me up and helps me recharge my energy to handle the next task.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和重复表达，如“helped me to really stress”应为“helps me relieve stress”。建议使用连贯的句子并避免重复。

例: I probably eat chocolate every day because it helps me relieve stress and makes me feel happier.

提案: 回答较自然，但语法需改进，如“don't allow”应为“didn't allow”。建议减少口头语“umm”，使表达更流畅。

例: Of course, when I was a kid, I was even crazier about chocolate. If my mom didn't allow me to eat it, I could cry for a whole day.

提案: 注意单词形式，如“flavored”应为“flavor”。句子结构需更完整，使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: Well, personally, I think chocolate is popular mainly because it has a unique flavor. Moreover, it makes people feel happier after eating it.

提案: 注意代词使用，“he”应为“it”。句子应更完整，避免语法错误，如“other kind”应为“other kinds”。

例: I am a big fan of milk chocolate because it is often sweeter and softer than other kinds of chocolate.

提案: 注意冠词使用，“a appropriate”应为“an appropriate”。“all kind of situation”应为“all kinds of situations”。句子应更准确，避免双重否定。

例: Definitely. I think chocolate is an appropriate gift for all kinds of situations, especially for Valentine's Day, mainly because almost everyone likes chocolate.

× Eating chocolate always cheer me up.

✓ Eating chocolate always cheers me up.

主语是单数第三人称（Eating chocolate），谓语动词应加-s，表示第三人称单数形式。

× Help me recharge enough energy to handle the next task.

✓ It helps me recharge enough energy to handle the next task.

句子缺少主语，导致结构不完整，应补充主语使句子完整。

× Well I think I probably eat chocolate every day because it really helped me to really stress and they also would make me feel umm happier when I eating chocolate.

✓ Well, I think I probably eat chocolate every day because it really helps me relieve stress and it also makes me feel happier when I eat chocolate.

时态不一致，前半句用一般现在时，后半句不应用过去时helped，应改为现在时helps；动词形式错误，stress应为动词relieve stress；主语和谓语不一致，they改为it；动词ing形式错误，when I eating应为when I eat。

× Like if my mom, umm, don't allow me to eat it, I could cry for a whole day.

✓ Like if my mom, umm, didn't allow me to eat it, I could cry for a whole day.

条件句中描述过去的情况，动词应使用过去式，don't改为didn't。

× Well personally I think mainly because it has a unique flavored.

✓ Well, personally I think mainly because it has a unique flavor.

flavored是形容词，表示“有味道的”，此处应使用名词flavor表示“味道”。

× What's more, it also let people feel happier after eating it.

✓ What's more, it also lets people feel happier after eating it.

主语it是第三人称单数，谓语动词应加-s，let改为lets。

× Oh I am a big fan of milk chocolate because he often sweeter and softer than other kind of chocolate.

✓ Oh, I am a big fan of milk chocolate because it is often sweeter and softer than other kinds of chocolate.

代词he错误，应为it指代milk chocolate；谓语动词缺失，应加is；kind应为复数kinds。

× Definitely. I think chocolate is a appropriate gift for all kind of situation, especially for Valentine, mainly because there's nobody who don't like chocolate.

✓ Definitely. I think chocolate is an appropriate gift for all kinds of situations, especially for Valentine's Day, mainly because there's nobody who doesn't like chocolate.

冠词a应改为an，因为appropriate以元音音素开头；kind应为复数kinds；situation应为复数situations；Valentine应为Valentine's Day；否定句中don't应为doesn't，主语nobody为单数。