Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. Try to directly state your preference and reasons in a simple, coherent way.

例: Yes, I like white chocolate the most because it is very sweet and creamy. I prefer it over dark chocolate, which tastes bitter to me.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and a bit unclear. Try to complete your sentences and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: I usually eat chocolate after my meals, like lunch or dinner. I often buy some from nearby shops because it helps satisfy my sweet cravings.

提案: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. Use correct tenses and clearer vocabulary to express your ideas.

例: No, my parents did not allow me to eat chocolate when I was a child because I had problems with tooth cavities. Eating chocolate would make my teeth hurt.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains errors. Use correct words and explain your ideas clearly with relevant reasons.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it is a sweet treat available everywhere, even in small shops. People enjoy it because it tastes good and is easy to eat quickly.

提案: Your answer is mostly clear but can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more natural.

例: My favourite flavour is white chocolate because it is sweeter and tastes very delicious compared to dark chocolate.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to give a direct opinion and support it with reasons or examples.

例: Yes, many people give chocolates as gifts because they create sweet memories. It is a popular and thoughtful present for friends and family.

× Yes, I like the most white chocolate because it's very sweet in taste and I prefer more rather than the dark chocolate because it's taste like. Sore, bitter type.

✓ Yes, I like white chocolate the most because it's very sweet in taste and I prefer it more than dark chocolate because it tastes sour, bitter type.

The phrase 'like the most white chocolate' is incorrect; the correct order is 'like white chocolate the most' (Grammar problem type ID:14). Also, 'prefer more rather than' should be 'prefer it more than' to correctly compare two items. 'It's taste like. Sore, bitter type.' is incorrect; it should be 'it tastes sour, bitter type.' because 'taste' needs to be a verb here (Grammar problem type ID:27).

× I like it more after my meal. Whenever I finish my meal, lunch or dinner, I go through the shops to buy chocolates. For me, it helps me to enhance my taste buds and.

✓ I like it more after my meal. Whenever I finish my meal, lunch or dinner, I go to the shops to buy chocolates. For me, it helps enhance my taste buds.

The phrase 'go through the shops' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'go to the shops' (Grammar problem type ID:11). Also, 'helps me to enhance' can be simplified to 'helps enhance' for better grammar and style.

× No, my parents don't allow me to eat chocolate when I was kid because of my tooth acne or cavity problem. Whenever I used to eat chocolate in my childhood, my toots are start spanning.

✓ No, my parents didn't allow me to eat chocolate when I was a kid because of my tooth decay or cavity problem. Whenever I used to eat chocolate in my childhood, my teeth would start hurting.

The sentence mixes present tense 'don't allow' with past time 'when I was kid'; it should be past tense 'didn't allow' (Grammar problem type ID:5). 'When I was kid' needs an article: 'a kid' (Grammar problem type ID:22). 'Tooth acne' is incorrect; the correct term is 'tooth decay' or 'cavity' (Grammar problem type ID:13). 'My toots are start spanning' is incorrect; it should be 'my teeth would start hurting' to express habitual past action (Grammar problem type ID:5 and 27).

× Because it's a sweet snake that we found everywhere in the market, even in a small town shops Mumbai and eat within a minute. It doesn't take time to for it to digest so that that's.

✓ Because it's a sweet snack that we find everywhere in the market, even in small town shops in Mumbai, and eat within a minute. It doesn't take time to digest.

'Sweet snake' is a wrong word; it should be 'sweet snack' (Grammar problem type ID:13). 'We found' should be 'we find' to match present tense (Grammar problem type ID:6). 'Small town shops Mumbai' needs prepositions: 'small town shops in Mumbai' (Grammar problem type ID:11). The phrase 'It doesn't take time to for it to digest so that that's' is incorrect and incomplete; corrected to 'It doesn't take time to digest.'

× I like the most white chocolate because it's sweeter than the dark chocolate and a very delicious in taste.

✓ I like white chocolate the most because it's sweeter than dark chocolate and very delicious in taste.

'I like the most white chocolate' should be 'I like white chocolate the most' (Grammar problem type ID:14). 'The dark chocolate' should be 'dark chocolate' without 'the' (Grammar problem type ID:17). 'A very delicious' is incorrect; 'very delicious' is correct without 'a' (Grammar problem type ID:14).

× Yeah, most of the people use chocolates as a gift to others. Make a sweet memory. Who? It depends on who gave you the gift as a chocolate.

✓ Yeah, most people use chocolates as gifts for others. It makes a sweet memory. It depends on who gave you the chocolate as a gift.

'Most of the people' should be 'most people' (Grammar problem type ID:14). 'Use chocolates as a gift to others' should be 'use chocolates as gifts for others' (Grammar problem type ID:11 and 14). 'Make a sweet memory' is a sentence fragment; it should be 'It makes a sweet memory' (Grammar problem type ID:23). 'Who?' is unclear and should be removed. 'It depends on who gave you the gift as a chocolate' should be 'It depends on who gave you the chocolate as a gift' for clarity and correct word order (Grammar problem type ID:26).