Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và trả lời đúng trọng tâm câu hỏi, tuy nhiên bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ví dụ, tránh dùng từ 'its' không rõ ràng và nên dùng số ít 'chocolate' thay vì 'chocolates'.

例: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it tastes delicious, and whenever I feel sad or stressed, eating chocolate makes me feel happier.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp, đặc biệt là chia động từ và sử dụng giới từ đúng. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời hơi dài và có phần lặp lại, bạn nên dùng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Actually, I rarely eat chocolate because I'm concerned about gaining weight. Besides, chocolates, especially brands like Hershey's, can be quite expensive. Therefore, I prefer to eat fruits or healthy snacks to maintain a balanced diet.

提案: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu không rõ ràng. Bạn nên sử dụng thì quá khứ đơn cho hành động trong quá khứ và tránh lặp từ không cần thiết. Hãy cố gắng trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn.

例: Actually, when I was a kid, I didn't like eating chocolate very much. I tried some chocolate products like milk chocolate and ice cream, but I didn't enjoy the taste, so I rarely ate chocolate.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng tốt nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và từ dùng không chính xác như 'its weekdays'. Bạn nên dùng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

例: I think chocolate is popular around the world because it's affordable and widely available. People enjoy it daily, and it is also used as an ingredient in many products like ice cream and milkshakes.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý phát âm và chính tả, ví dụ 'job flavor' nên là 'types' hoặc 'flavours'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời có thể ngắn gọn và rõ ràng hơn, tránh dùng mạo từ không cần thiết.

例: I have tried three different types of chocolate: white, dark, and milk chocolate. Among them, I like milk chocolate the most because it tastes sweeter and creamier than dark chocolate.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp số nhiều và số ít, ví dụ 'chocolates is' nên là 'chocolate is'. Ngoài ra, tránh dùng từ ngữ không cần thiết như 'uh' và dùng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I would say yes. I think chocolate is a great gift because it's not only delicious but also shows your love to someone. For example, people often give chocolate on occasions like Valentine's Day or birthdays to express their love and appreciation.

× Yes, I love eating chocolates because its taste is very delicious and whenever I feel sad or stressed, eating chocolate makes me feel happier.

✓ Yes, I love eating chocolate because its taste is very delicious and whenever I feel sad or stressed, eating chocolate makes me feel happier.

The word 'chocolates' is plural, but here it refers to chocolate in general, which is uncountable and should be singular. Also, 'its taste' correctly refers to singular 'chocolate'.

× Actually, I'm barely eats chocolate because I'm concerned about gaining weights.

✓ Actually, I barely eat chocolate because I'm concerned about gaining weight.

The subject 'I' requires the base form of the verb 'eat' without 's'. Also, 'gaining weights' is incorrect; 'weight' is uncountable here.

× Besides, chocolates, especially brands like Hershey's can be quite expensive.

✓ Besides, chocolate, especially brands like Hershey's, can be quite expensive.

'Chocolates' is plural countable, but here it refers to chocolate in general, which is uncountable and should be singular.

× I also try to maintain a balanced and healthier diet, so I'm prefer to eat fruit or snacks.

✓ I also try to maintain a balanced and healthier diet, so I prefer to eat fruit or snacks.

The phrase 'I'm prefer' is incorrect; 'prefer' is a verb and should not be used with 'am'.

× Actually when I was a kid I don't like eating chocolates very much.

✓ Actually, when I was a kid I didn't like eating chocolate very much.

The sentence refers to past time, so 'don't like' should be in past tense 'didn't like'. Also, 'chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as uncountable.

× I'm try some chocolates or related to products like milk chocolate and ice cream but I found it's were not suitable for me because I don't enjoy the taste so I'm really eats chocolate.

✓ I tried some chocolates or related products like milk chocolate and ice cream, but I found they were not suitable for me because I didn't enjoy the taste, so I really don't eat chocolate.

'I'm try' is incorrect; past tense 'tried' is needed. 'It's were' is incorrect; 'they were' is correct for plural. 'I don't enjoy' should be past tense 'didn't enjoy'. 'I'm really eats' is incorrect; 'I really don't eat' is correct.

× I found it's were not suitable for me because I don't enjoy the taste so I'm really eats chocolate.

✓ I found they were not suitable for me because I didn't enjoy the taste, so I really don't eat chocolate.

'It's' is singular, but refers to plural 'products', so 'they' is correct.

× People enjoy its weekdays and is also used as an ingredient in many products.

✓ People enjoy its sweetness and it is also used as an ingredient in many products.

'Weekdays' is incorrect here; likely intended 'sweetness'. Also, 'is' should be 'it is' to match subject.

× Products like ice cream or milkshake.

✓ Products like ice cream or milkshake use chocolate as an ingredient.

The sentence fragment lacks a verb and complete structure.

× I had the chance to try three different job flavor of chocolate which are a whites, dark and milk chocolate.

✓ I had the chance to try three different types of chocolate flavors which are white, dark, and milk chocolate.

'Job flavor' is incorrect; 'types of chocolate flavors' is correct. 'a whites' is incorrect; 'white' is correct adjective.

× Among them, I really enjoyed milk chocolates the most because it tastes sweeter and creamier than a dark chocolate.

✓ Among them, I really enjoyed milk chocolate the most because it tastes sweeter and creamier than dark chocolate.

'Milk chocolates' should be 'milk chocolate' as uncountable. 'a dark chocolate' should be 'dark chocolate' without article.

× I would say yes, I think chocolates is a great, great gift because it's not only delicious but also show your love to someone else.

✓ I would say yes, I think chocolate is a great gift because it's not only delicious but also shows your love to someone else.

'Chocolates is' should be 'chocolate is' (singular). 'show' should be 'shows' to agree with singular subject.

× For example, people often give chocolates on occasion like Valentine's or birthday to show their, uh, love and appreciate.

✓ For example, people often give chocolates on occasions like Valentine's Day or birthdays to show their love and appreciation.

'On occasion' should be plural 'on occasions'. 'Valentine's' should be 'Valentine's Day'. 'Appreciate' should be noun 'appreciation'.