Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn nên tự nhiên hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'this taste is so delicious'. Bạn nên sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể hơn với liên từ phù hợp để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because it tastes delicious. In addition, some studies have shown that chocolate can improve mood and make people feel happier.

提案: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng từ lóng như 'wanna' trong bài thi IELTS và câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, mạch lạc hơn. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để nối các ý và tránh câu bị cắt ngắn hoặc thiếu chủ ngữ.

例: I often eat chocolate because I like to try new products. In fact, I buy chocolate almost every day.

提案: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và thiếu sự rõ ràng. Bạn nên sử dụng thì quá khứ đúng cách và tránh lặp từ. Hãy trình bày ý một cách mạch lạc, có liên từ để câu trả lời dễ hiểu hơn.

例: When I was a kid, I often ate chocolate when I felt tired, especially sweet chocolate. However, eating too much caused my teeth to decay. Sometimes, I would cry if I couldn't have chocolate.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn và câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'so it is made the gift'. Hãy dùng liên từ để kết nối ý và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể hơn.

例: In my opinion, chocolate is popular worldwide because of its rich and delicious flavor. Therefore, it is often given as a gift or treat on special occasions. Moreover, it is considered a romantic gift for couples.

提案: Câu trả lời có lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'shower' và 'sweat' không phù hợp. Bạn nên dùng từ chính xác và câu trả lời rõ ràng, mạch lạc hơn với liên từ để nối ý.

例: My favourite flavour of chocolate is strawberry because I love strawberries. The slightly sour taste of strawberry balances the sweetness of the chocolate, so I don't get bored of it.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu, tránh lỗi như 'in order to they impress'. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và cung cấp lý do cụ thể hơn.

例: I think chocolate is a good gift for special occasions like birthdays or holidays. It is often seen as a romantic gift that helps couples express their love and affection.

× Yes, I really like eating chocolate because this taste is so delicious.

✓ Yes, I really like eating chocolate because its taste is so delicious.

The pronoun 'this' is incorrectly used to refer to 'chocolate'. The correct possessive pronoun is 'its' to indicate that the taste belongs to chocolate.

× Moreover, some studies prove that chocolate and sweet candy make me feel happier.

✓ Moreover, some studies prove that chocolate and sweet candy make people feel happier.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'me' which is too specific and informal in this context. Using 'people' generalizes the statement, which is more appropriate for discussing studies.

× I often eat chocolate because I wanna try new products, buy chocolate every day.

✓ I often eat chocolate because I want to try new products and buy chocolate every day.

The sentence lacks a conjunction between two clauses. Adding 'and' connects the ideas properly. Also, 'wanna' is informal and should be replaced with 'want to'.

× I often eat chocolate when I was tired, especially sweet chocolate, so my tooth decay if I if I don't have chocolate I could cry until I have it.

✓ I often ate chocolate when I was tired, especially sweet chocolate, but my teeth decayed. If I didn't have chocolate, I would cry until I got it.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. 'Eat' should be 'ate' to match 'was tired'. 'Tooth decay' is a noun phrase; the verb form 'my teeth decayed' is correct. Conditional sentences require past tense and modal verbs for hypothetical situations.

× In my opinion, chocolate is popular around the world because its taste is so related with the rich flavor, so it is made the gift and a treat for the special day.

✓ In my opinion, chocolate is popular around the world because its taste is closely related to rich flavors, so it is made as a gift and a treat for special days.

The phrase 'related with' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'related to'. Also, 'made the gift' should be 'made as a gift'. 'Special day' should be pluralized to 'special days' for generalization.

× Moreover, it can improve their romance for the couple.

✓ Moreover, it can improve the romance between couples.

The pronoun 'their' is incorrectly used; 'the romance between couples' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I really like strawberry chocolate because strawberry is my favorite fruit and the taste is a bit sour so they can balance the shower and the sweat and then I am not bored.

✓ I really like strawberry chocolate because strawberry is my favorite fruit and its taste is a bit sour, so it can balance the sourness and the sweetness, and then I am not bored.

The pronoun 'they' incorrectly refers to 'taste'; 'its' is correct. Also, 'shower' and 'sweat' are incorrect words here; the intended words are 'sourness' and 'sweetness'.

× To me, it is good to use chocolate as special gift on the important occasions like birthday or holidays.

✓ To me, it is good to use chocolate as a special gift on important occasions like birthdays or holidays.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'special gift'. Also, 'birthday' should be pluralized to 'birthdays' to generalize the statement.

× It seems the romantic gift for the couple in order to they impress their love and affection.

✓ It seems like a romantic gift for couples in order to impress their love and affection.

The phrase 'in order to they impress' is incorrect; 'in order to impress' is correct. Also, 'the couple' should be 'couples' for generalization.