Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and completeness. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, followed by specific reasons or examples. Avoid incomplete sentences and redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it is delicious and comforting. When I was younger, I used to enjoy various types of chocolates that my mother would buy for me. Chocolate always makes me feel happy and relaxed.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Provide a direct response about frequency, then explain with reasons using linking words. Avoid hesitation and incomplete thoughts to make your answer more effective.

例: Currently, I eat chocolate only occasionally because I am aware of the health effects of consuming too much sugar. Earlier, I used to eat chocolate more frequently, but now I try to limit it for my well-being.

提案: Your answer is generally relevant but incomplete and contains hesitations. Try to complete your sentences and add specific details with linking words to make your response coherent and natural.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child because it was my favourite snack. My mother used to buy different kinds of chocolates for me, and I enjoyed trying various flavours and types.

提案: Your answer has some relevant points but lacks clarity and coherence. Focus on giving clear reasons why chocolate is popular, use linking words, and avoid unnecessary details about production unless relevant.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes sweet and satisfies people's cravings. Moreover, it comes in many varieties, such as milk, dark, and white chocolate, which appeal to different preferences.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by making sentences more concise and avoiding hesitation. Use linking words to compare your preferences clearly and provide specific reasons.

例: My favourite flavour of chocolate is white chocolate because of its creamy and sweet taste. However, I also enjoy dark chocolate since it has a rich and slightly bitter flavour, which I find refreshing.

提案: Your answer is relevant but incomplete and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas clearly with complete sentences and use linking words to explain why chocolate makes a good gift.

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a great gift, especially for people who love sweets. Giving chocolate can make others happy because it is a delicious treat that many enjoy.

× Chocolate is one of my favorite thing when it comes to the sweet dish.

✓ Chocolate is one of my favorite things when it comes to sweet dishes.

The word 'thing' should be plural 'things' because 'one of' is followed by a plural noun. Also, 'sweet dish' should be plural 'sweet dishes' to generalize the category.

× When I was very younger, I used to consume lots of chocolates varieties in it.

✓ When I was very young, I used to consume lots of varieties of chocolates.

The phrase 'very younger' is incorrect; 'younger' is comparative and should be 'young' here. Also, 'chocolates varieties' is incorrect word order; it should be 'varieties of chocolates'.

× My mom used to bring different kinds of chocolates.

✓ My mom used to bring different kinds of chocolate.

The word 'chocolates' is usually uncountable when referring to types or kinds; 'kinds of chocolate' is correct.

× Chocolate is.

✓ Chocolate is my favorite.

The sentence 'Chocolate is.' is incomplete and lacks a complement; it should be completed to convey meaning.

× Uh, for present I do not eat lots of chocolate.

✓ Uh, at present I do not eat a lot of chocolate.

The phrase 'for present' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'at present'. Also, 'lots of' is informal; 'a lot of' is better here.

× Now I know the importance of eating sweet, but earlier I used to eat a late comparatively.

✓ Now I know the importance of eating sweets, but earlier I used to eat a lot comparatively.

The word 'sweet' should be plural 'sweets' when referring to sweet foods in general. 'Eat a late' is incorrect; it should be 'eat a lot'. 'Comparatively' is better placed at the end.

× Nowadays I feel that eating lot of sweet can leads to this is like.

✓ Nowadays I feel that eating a lot of sweets can lead to problems like this.

'Eating lot of sweet' should be 'eating a lot of sweets'. 'Can leads' is incorrect; it should be 'can lead'. The sentence is incomplete and needs clarification.

× I used to consume a lot of chocolate when I was a kid.

✓ I used to consume a lot of chocolate when I was a kid.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× My mother used to bring lot of chocolate for me because I was, uh, it was my favorite snack ever I had and uh, I used to eat in varieties of things from.

✓ My mother used to bring a lot of chocolate for me because it was my favorite snack, and I used to eat it in various forms.

'Lot of' should be 'a lot of'. The sentence is fragmented and unclear; it needs restructuring for clarity.

× I think everybody loves sweet a lot, and when it comes to chocolate, it's really among the popular.

✓ I think everybody loves sweets a lot, and when it comes to chocolate, it's really very popular.

'Sweet' should be plural 'sweets' when referring to sweet foods in general. 'Among the popular' is incorrect; 'very popular' is better.

× We know how chocolate is preserved from the seed and it goes through certain process and then sugar is added to it and it forms into a big ton of chocolate.

✓ We know how chocolate is made from the seed; it goes through a certain process, then sugar is added, and it forms into a large amount of chocolate.

'Preserved' is incorrect; 'made' is appropriate. 'Certain process' should be 'a certain process'. 'Big ton' is informal and unclear; 'large amount' is better.

× Uh, I think chocolate comes in variety.

✓ Uh, I think chocolate comes in variety.

The sentence is incomplete; it should be 'comes in a variety of types' or 'comes in various varieties'.

× I love white chocolate.

✓ I love white chocolate.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× The reason is that it's not because of its color, but the flavor it gives.

✓ The reason is that it's not because of its color, but because of the flavor it gives.

The phrase 'not because of its color, but the flavor' is incomplete; it should be 'but because of the flavor' for parallel structure.

× When you just dip a sip or piece or a spoon of chocolate in your mouth, it feels like heaven.

✓ When you just dip a sip, a piece, or a spoonful of chocolate in your mouth, it feels like heaven.

The phrase 'a spoon of chocolate' is incorrect; it should be 'a spoonful of chocolate'. Also, commas are needed for clarity in the list.

× And comparatively, I also love a dark chocolate.

✓ And comparatively, I also love dark chocolate.

'A dark chocolate' is incorrect when referring to the type of chocolate; 'dark chocolate' is uncountable here.

× Yes, it's really a better thing I can save to give a gift for specially for people those who love chocolates and chocolate is something that people are really feel happy when you give them and chocolate brings happiness and.

✓ Yes, it's really a good thing I can give as a gift, especially to people who love chocolate. Chocolate is something that really makes people happy when you give it to them, and chocolate brings happiness.

The sentence is fragmented and contains multiple errors: 'a better thing I can save to give a gift' is unclear; 'especially' is misspelled; 'people those who' should be 'people who'; 'people are really feel happy' should be 'people really feel happy'; sentence needs restructuring for clarity.