Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to form a complete, natural sentence and avoid repeating words. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because it helps improve my mood when I feel sad or upset.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical mistakes. Make sure to use correct sentence structures and avoid incomplete sentences. Also, explain your reasons more clearly with linking words.

例: I usually eat chocolate two or three times a week because I believe eating it every day is not very healthy for my body.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use past tense correctly and form complete sentences. Also, try to add linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a child, especially when I was at the supermarket. I would buy chocolate to make myself feel happy as I left the store.

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and concise. Use linking words to connect your points and correct subject-verb agreement. Avoid repeating the word 'chocolate' too often.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it is widely available, loved by many people, and comes in various types.

提案: Your answer is clear but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Use correct verb forms and avoid repeating similar ideas. Linking words can help improve coherence.

例: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it is less sweet, which I prefer. However, I sometimes enjoy milk chocolate as well.

提案: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical mistakes and repetitive phrases. Use correct plural forms and linking words to make your answer more natural and fluent.

例: Yes, I think chocolate makes a great gift because everyone, especially children, likes it. Moreover, there are many types to choose from, so it can please different tastes.

× I really like eating chocolate because I think chocolate can make me happy when I'm feel sad or or bad mood.

✓ I really like eating chocolate because I think chocolate can make me happy when I feel sad or in a bad mood.

The phrase 'I'm feel sad' is incorrect because 'I'm' is a contraction of 'I am' and should be followed by a present participle (verb+ing) or adjective. Here, 'feel' is a base verb and should not be used with 'am'. The correct form is 'I feel sad'. Also, 'or or bad mood' has a repeated 'or' and lacks the preposition 'in' before 'bad mood'. The correct phrase is 'or in a bad mood'.

× I often chocolate two or three days a week because I think chocolate is not healthier for my body.

✓ I often eat chocolate two or three days a week because I think chocolate is not healthy for my body.

The sentence is missing the verb 'eat' after 'I often'. Also, 'healthier' is a comparative adjective and requires a comparison; here, the intended meaning is negative health effect, so 'healthy' is correct. The phrase should be 'not healthy'.

× If you eat chocolate almost every day.

✓ If you eat chocolate almost every day, it can affect your health.

The sentence is a fragment because it starts with 'If' but lacks a main clause. To be complete, it needs a main clause explaining the consequence or result of eating chocolate every day.

× Yes, I often chocolate when I child, especially when I'm at supermarket.

✓ Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a child, especially when I was at the supermarket.

The verb 'chocolate' is incorrectly used as a verb; it should be 'ate chocolate'. Also, 'when I child' lacks the verb 'was' and the article 'a' before 'child'. 'I'm at supermarket' should be 'I was at the supermarket' to match past tense and include the definite article.

× I buy chocolate to make me feel happy when I'm going out from supermarket.

✓ I bought chocolate to make me feel happy when I was going out of the supermarket.

The verb tense should be past ('bought') to match the past context. 'I'm going out from supermarket' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'out of' and the article 'the' is needed before 'supermarket'. Also, 'I'm' should be 'I was' for past continuous tense.

× I think chocolate is popular around the world because chocolate is very easy to find and ready in the countries and everyone like chocolate and then chocolate has many types.

✓ I think chocolate is popular around the world because it is very easy to find and available in many countries, everyone likes chocolate, and chocolate comes in many types.

Repeated use of 'chocolate' is awkward; pronouns like 'it' should be used. 'Ready in the countries' is incorrect; 'available in many countries' is better. 'Everyone like' should be 'everyone likes' for subject-verb agreement. 'Chocolate has many types' is better expressed as 'chocolate comes in many types'.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate because it is not very sweet to me and I enjoyed about it.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate because it is not very sweet to me and I enjoy it.

'I enjoyed about it' is incorrect; 'enjoy' is a verb that does not require 'about'. Also, the tense should be present ('enjoy') to match the current preference.

× But sometimes I eat milk chocolate but I prefer dark chocolate.

✓ Sometimes I eat milk chocolate, but I prefer dark chocolate.

The sentence is correct except for the redundant 'But' at the beginning and the lack of a comma before 'but'. Removing the initial 'But' and adding a comma improves clarity.

× Yes, I think it's good to use chocolate as a gift to others because everyone's like chocolate, especially kids, and chocolate have many types and chocolate makes everyone enjoy it.

✓ Yes, I think it's good to use chocolate as a gift for others because everyone likes chocolate, especially kids, and chocolate has many types and makes everyone enjoy it.

'Everyone's like' should be 'everyone likes' for subject-verb agreement. 'Chocolate have' should be 'chocolate has'. 'Use chocolate as a gift to others' is better expressed as 'use chocolate as a gift for others'.