Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by correcting grammar and avoiding redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes delicious and helps me experience different flavors. Also, since I love sugar, I often eat chocolate when I feel my sugar level is low.

提案: Improve sentence structure and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Be specific about frequency and occasions.

例: I usually eat chocolate when my brother comes from abroad because he brings many chocolates for me. Also, I enjoy chocolate during parties or special occasions.

提案: Make your answer clearer by correcting grammar and providing more specific details. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a kid because my friends used to bring it during summer. Seeing them enjoy it made me love chocolate too.

提案: Use correct grammar and avoid repetition. Provide clear reasons with linking words to explain popularity.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and attracts children. Moreover, it offers a variety of flavors that people enjoy.

提案: Clarify your ideas and correct grammar. Provide specific reasons and use linking words to connect your points.

例: My favourite flavour is milk chocolate because it contains protein and is less harmful to teeth and the body compared to other types.

提案: Improve sentence clarity and grammar. Use linking words to explain why chocolate is a good gift choice.

例: Yes, chocolate is a good gift because it is common and appreciated by many people. Also, it is an easy and convenient option to offer someone.

× Yes, I like to eat chocolate because when I eat chocolate it's feel very delicious and it's help me to know the different types of taste and I can.

✓ Yes, I like to eat chocolate because when I eat chocolate it feels very delicious and it helps me to know the different types of taste.

The verbs 'feel' and 'help' need to be in the third person singular present tense 'feels' and 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, the sentence was incomplete and redundant parts were removed for clarity.

× I love sugar that's why I always try to eat chocolate when I missed my sugar level.

✓ I love sugar; that's why I always try to eat chocolate when my sugar level is low.

The phrase 'missed my sugar level' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'when my sugar level is low' to indicate a drop in sugar level. Also, a semicolon is used to connect related independent clauses.

× Actually when my brother come comes from abroad, that time I eat chocolate too much because he brings a lot of chocolate from for me and when it's a party or something that's time I eat chocolate.

✓ Actually, when my brother comes from abroad, I eat too much chocolate because he brings a lot of chocolate for me, and when there is a party or something, that's when I eat chocolate.

The verb 'come' should be 'comes' to agree with the third person singular subject 'my brother'. Also, 'from for me' is corrected to 'for me'. Added 'there is' for clarity and corrected sentence structure for better flow.

× Yes, when I was a kid, I loved eating chocolate because at that time I saw that my summer friend bring chocolate and eat it.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid, I loved eating chocolate because at that time I saw that my summer friend brought chocolate and ate it.

The verbs 'bring' and 'eat' should be in the past tense 'brought' and 'ate' to match the past time frame indicated by 'when I was a kid' and 'at that time'.

× I think chocolate are chocolates are popular in the world because it's so delicious and have a interest for children to eat it and you can taste the different types of sugar by chocolate.

✓ I think chocolates are popular in the world because they are so delicious and interesting for children to eat, and you can taste the different types of sugar in chocolate.

The subject 'chocolate' should be plural 'chocolates' to match the plural verb 'are'. Also, 'have a interest' is corrected to 'are interesting'. 'By chocolate' is corrected to 'in chocolate' for proper preposition use.

× I like that milk chocolate most because milk chocolate is full of protein and it's also help to keep feed and I think it has the lowest lowest effect of our teeth and body.

✓ I like milk chocolate the most because it is full of protein and it also helps to keep you healthy, and I think it has the least harmful effect on our teeth and body.

'Help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'it'. 'Keep feed' is incorrect; corrected to 'keep you healthy'. 'Lowest lowest effect' is redundant and unclear; corrected to 'least harmful effect'. Prepositions corrected to 'on our teeth and body'.

× Yes, I think it is good to use chocolate as a gift because no chocolates is the most common thing to give someone.

✓ Yes, I think it is good to use chocolate as a gift because chocolates are the most common things to give to someone.

'No chocolates is' is incorrect; corrected to 'chocolates are' to agree in number. 'Thing' changed to plural 'things' to match plural subject 'chocolates'. Added 'to' before 'someone' for correct preposition use.

× You can give it somebody. That's can be a very easy gift option for for offer someone.

✓ You can give it to somebody. That can be a very easy gift option to offer someone.

Added preposition 'to' after 'give it' for correct sentence structure. 'That's can be' corrected to 'That can be'. Removed duplicate 'for' and corrected 'for offer someone' to 'to offer someone' for proper infinitive use.