Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and unclear phrases such as 'I am AF'. Also, structure your answer clearly by stating your liking for chocolate and giving a reason. For example, mention why you like chocolate and specify your favourite brand in a clear way.

例: Yes, I really like eating chocolate because it tastes delicious and makes me feel happy. My favourite brand is Dairy Milk because it has a smooth and creamy texture.

提案: Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like 'due to some gravy'. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Keep your answer concise and clear by stating frequency and reasons for eating chocolate.

例: I usually eat chocolate once or twice a week, especially when I feel stressed or while watching TV, as it helps me relax.

提案: Use past tense correctly and avoid unclear phrases like 'which made my taste very little'. Provide clear reasons and examples. Use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child, especially on special occasions like birthdays and holidays, because I loved its creamy texture and sweet taste.

提案: Improve sentence structure and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Be specific about reasons for chocolate's popularity.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because of its sweet taste and versatility. Moreover, people often give chocolates as gifts on special occasions, which adds to its popularity.

提案: Avoid repetition and incomplete explanations. Clearly state your favourite flavour and explain why you like it with specific reasons.

例: My favourite flavour of chocolate is dark chocolate because I enjoy its rich and slightly bitter taste, which is different from sweet milk chocolate.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by avoiding vague phrases like 'very good' and by using more precise vocabulary. Also, try to make the last sentence clearer and more natural.

例: Yes, I believe chocolates make excellent gifts because they are loved by many and suitable for various occasions. For example, giving chocolates during holidays is a wonderful way to share joy and show appreciation.

× Of course, I'm a foodie person and uh, I am AF.

✓ Of course, I'm a foodie person and, uh, I am a fan.

The phrase 'I am AF' is unclear and incorrect in this context. 'AF' is an informal abbreviation and not appropriate here. The correct expression is 'I am a fan' to indicate liking something.

× I usually eat chocolate once or twice in a week and sometimes when I feel stressful and due to some gravy at that time I usually eat chocolate and sometimes also when usually I watch the TV.

✓ I usually eat chocolate once or twice a week, and sometimes when I feel stressed or during some cravings, I usually eat chocolate, and sometimes also when I watch TV.

The preposition 'in a week' should be 'a week' without 'in'. 'Feel stressful' is incorrect; it should be 'feel stressed'. 'Due to some gravy' is incorrect and unclear; likely meant 'cravings'. 'The TV' should be 'TV' without 'the'. The sentence is also restructured for clarity.

× Yes I will as in childhood everyone loves to eat chocolates and mostly I eat chocolates on some special occasions like birthdays, holidays because of chocolate creamy texture which made me very which made my taste very little.

✓ Yes, I did, as in childhood everyone loved to eat chocolates, and mostly I ate chocolates on special occasions like birthdays and holidays because of the creamy texture of chocolate, which I liked very much.

The modal 'will' is incorrectly used for past habitual action; 'did' is correct. Verb tenses are corrected to past tense to match the time frame. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Well, chocolate place a significant role in everyone's life and it is popular all over the globe due to its sweet taste and all kind of people prefer chocolate and they also give chocolates to others on the special occasions.

✓ Well, chocolate plays a significant role in everyone's life and is popular all over the globe due to its sweet taste. All kinds of people prefer chocolate and also give chocolates to others on special occasions.

The verb 'place' should be 'plays' to agree with singular subject 'chocolate'. 'All kind of people' should be 'all kinds of people' to match plural form. 'The special occasions' should be 'special occasions' without 'the'.

× Well honestly speaking, my favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate. I enjoy it because the taste and due to due to the taste and preference.

✓ Well, honestly speaking, my favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate. I enjoy it because of the taste and my preference.

The phrase 'because the taste and due to due to the taste and preference' is incorrect and repetitive. It should be 'because of the taste and my preference' to correctly use prepositions and avoid repetition.