Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更准确的词汇表达。

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes sweet and has a unique flavor. Moreover, chocolate can be beneficial to our health when eaten in moderation.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复，建议使用连贯的句子表达频率，并解释原因时注意句子完整和逻辑性。

例: I eat chocolate about three times a week. Although I enjoy it, I try to limit my intake because it contains a lot of sugar.

提案: 回答不完整且语法错误较多，建议简化表达，避免重复，清晰说明原因。

例: No, I didn't eat much chocolate as a child because my mother controlled my intake of junk food.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，建议使用连贯的句子，明确表达原因，并使用连接词使内容更流畅。

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes good and people enjoy it. Also, it is widely available, making it easy for people to buy.

提案: 回答不完整且表达混乱，建议明确列出理由，避免重复，使用正确的语法和词汇。

例: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it is healthier with less sugar. Also, it has a rich taste that I enjoy.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，建议简洁表达观点，避免重复，并用连贯的句子说明理由。

例: I think chocolate can be a good gift because it symbolizes affection. It is especially suitable as a gift from boyfriends to their partners.

× Definitely, I like eat chocolate because it is no doubt that chocolate is chocolate flavor is good and it's sweet and has a unique fever.

✓ Definitely, I like eating chocolate because there is no doubt that chocolate flavor is good, it's sweet and has a unique flavor.

动词like后面应接动名词形式，故将like eat改为like eating。

× Definitely, I like eat chocolate because it is no doubt that chocolate is chocolate flavor is good and it's sweet and has a unique fever.

✓ Definitely, I like eating chocolate because there is no doubt that chocolate flavor is good, it's sweet and has a unique flavor.

表达“毫无疑问”时应使用there is结构，原句缺少there is，导致表达不完整。

× Definitely, I like eat chocolate because it is no doubt that chocolate is chocolate flavor is good and it's sweet and has a unique fever.

✓ Definitely, I like eating chocolate because there is no doubt that chocolate flavor is good, it's sweet and has a unique flavor.

单词fever（发烧）用错，应为flavor（味道）。

× On the other hand, on the other thing, chocolate is also be beneficial to our health.

✓ On the other hand, chocolate is also beneficial to our health.

“On the other thing”用法错误，应使用“On the other hand”表示转折。

× On the other hand, on the other thing, chocolate is also be beneficial to our health.

✓ On the other hand, chocolate is also beneficial to our health.

动词be不应加be动词，去掉多余的be。

× Although I like chocolate very much, but chocolate always contain a lot of sugar and I I should control myself not to eat so much, so I will only eat it.

✓ Although I like chocolate very much, chocolate always contains a lot of sugar, so I should control myself not to eat too much and will only eat it occasionally.

“Although”与“but”不能同时使用，且句子结构需调整使逻辑更通顺。

× Although I like chocolate very much, but chocolate always contain a lot of sugar and I I should control myself not to eat so much, so I will only eat it.

✓ Although I like chocolate very much, chocolate always contains a lot of sugar, so I should control myself not to eat too much and will only eat it occasionally.

主语chocolate为单数，谓语动词contain应改为contains。

× Although I like chocolate very much, but chocolate always contain a lot of sugar and I I should control myself not to eat so much, so I will only eat it.

✓ Although I like chocolate very much, chocolate always contains a lot of sugar, so I should control myself not to eat too much and will only eat it occasionally.

“so much”用于不可数名词，表达频率时应使用“too much”或“too many”，此处用“too much”更合适。

× Umm, not so much. And I eat even less chocolate when I was a kid than now I'm an adult because my mother always control me to eat junk food and uh and be because she think she think.

✓ Umm, not so much. I ate even less chocolate when I was a kid than now because my mother always controlled me not to eat junk food, because she thought so.

描述过去的动作应使用过去时，eat改为ate，control改为controlled，think改为thought。

× Umm, not so much. And I eat even less chocolate when I was a kid than now I'm an adult because my mother always control me to eat junk food and uh and be because she think she think.

✓ Umm, not so much. I ate even less chocolate when I was a kid than now because my mother always controlled me not to eat junk food, because she thought so.

动词control后应接宾语加不定式或动名词，原句中“control me to eat”不正确，应改为“controlled me not to eat”。

× Hmm, maybe because chocolate is chocolate flavor is good and people around the world both like eat chocolate.

✓ Hmm, maybe because chocolate flavor is good and people around the world both like eating chocolate.

动词like后应接动名词形式，like eat应改为like eating。

× Hmm, maybe because chocolate is chocolate flavor is good and people around the world both like eat chocolate. And another reason maybe the maybe the product now can sell all around the world and people can buy chocolate conveniently.

✓ Hmm, maybe because chocolate flavor is good and people around the world both like eating chocolate. Another reason may be that the product can now be sold all around the world and people can buy chocolate conveniently.

“And another reason maybe the maybe the product now can sell”结构混乱，应调整为“Another reason may be that the product can now be sold”。

× Black chocolate well the reason it has two reasons for one reason chocolate black chocolate is more healthier because it will always contain less sugar and another reason is that black sugar also has a effect to make.

✓ Black chocolate. Well, there are two reasons. First, black chocolate is healthier because it always contains less sugar. Another reason is that black chocolate also has an effect to make...

“more healthier”是冗余比较级，应改为“healthier”。“black sugar”应为“black chocolate”。冠词“a effect”应为“an effect”。

× Black chocolate well the reason it has two reasons for one reason chocolate black chocolate is more healthier because it will always contain less sugar and another reason is that black sugar also has a effect to make.

✓ Black chocolate. Well, there are two reasons. First, black chocolate is healthier because it always contains less sugar. Another reason is that black chocolate also has an effect to make...

“a effect”错误，effect以元音音素开头，前面应使用“an”。

× That depends because in my opinion a chocolate may have a symbol of affection and it may be a bit a way to express love.

✓ That depends because in my opinion chocolate may have a symbol of affection and it may be a way to express love.

“a chocolate”不合适，chocolate作为不可数名词不加冠词。

× That depends because in my opinion a chocolate may have a symbol of affection and it may be a bit a way to express love.

✓ That depends because in my opinion chocolate may have a symbol of affection and it may be a way to express love.

“a bit a way”表达不正确，应去掉“bit”，直接说“a way”。

× So it it it is suitable for the boyfriends to to buy this gift.

✓ So it is suitable for boyfriends to buy this gift.

重复使用“it”和“to”是多余的，应删除重复词。