Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语言较自然，但存在重复和语法错误，如"and and"。建议简洁表达，避免重复，并注意语法准确。

例: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it's one of my favorite desserts, especially chocolate cakes. Eating sweets always makes me feel happy.

提案: 回答内容较完整，但表达不够流畅，"bad for keep fit"表达不准确。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并注意语法。

例: I used to eat chocolate every day, but now I'm on a diet because chocolate contains a lot of fat, which isn't good for staying fit.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，如"really addicted"应为"was really addicted"，"Defend me"用词错误。建议加强语法和词汇准确性。

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because I was really addicted to its sweet taste. However, my mom usually didn't allow me to eat it, so I bought it with my pocket money.

提案: 回答结构不够清晰，连接词使用不当，且有语法错误。建议使用恰当的连接词，注意主谓一致和句子完整。

例: There are many reasons why chocolate is popular worldwide. Firstly, it is a delicious treat that makes people feel happy and relaxed. Secondly, it is often given as a gift to loved ones.

提案: 回答表达基本清楚，但存在语法错误，如"give a perfume"应为"gives a fragrance"。建议注意动词形式和词汇搭配。

例: My favorite flavor of chocolate is strawberry chocolate because I love strawberries. It not only has the sweet fragrance of strawberries but also the rich taste of chocolate.

提案: 回答中词汇使用不准确，如"intimation relationships"应为"intimate relationships"，且句子结构不够自然。建议使用正确词汇并简化表达。

例: Absolutely, giving chocolate as a gift is a great idea. Couples and close friends often give chocolate to express good wishes and affection.

× Absolutely, I'm crazy about eating chocolate because dessert is one of my favorite foods and and I especially the chocolate cakes.

✓ Absolutely, I'm crazy about eating chocolate because dessert is one of my favorite foods and I especially like chocolate cakes.

句子中出现了重复的连词“and and”，应删除多余的“and”，并且“especially”后面缺少动词，应补充动词“like”。

× Actually, I used to eat chocolate every day, but these days I'm just on a diet. You know, chocolate is full of fat, which is really bad for keep fit.

✓ Actually, I used to eat chocolate every day, but these days I'm just on a diet. You know, chocolate is full of fat, which is really bad for keeping fit.

短语“bad for keep fit”中，“keep”应使用动名词形式“keeping”，因为介词“for”后面应接动名词。

× Yes, I usually eat chocolate when I was a kid because I really addicted to its sweetie taste, but my mom always. Defend me to do that so I just buy it with my pocket money.

✓ Yes, I usually ate chocolate when I was a kid because I was really addicted to its sweet taste, but my mom always forbade me to do that so I just bought it with my pocket money.

描述过去习惯时应使用过去时态，如“usually ate”，而非“usually eat”。“addicted”前缺少助动词“was”。“Defend”用词错误，应为“forbade”。“buy”应改为过去式“bought”。“sweetie”应为“sweet”。

× Maybe there are many reasons behind this, but I think there are two main reason.

✓ Maybe there are many reasons behind this, but I think there are two main reasons.

“reason”应为复数形式“reasons”，因为前面提到的是“两(main)”，表示多个原因。

× On the one hand, chocolate is really a delicious treat that makes people feel inspiring and relaxed, but also can as a good gift to give the person we love.

✓ On the one hand, chocolate is really a delicious treat that makes people feel inspired and relaxed, and it can also be a good gift to give to the person we love.

句子结构不完整，“but also can as a good gift”缺少谓语动词，应改为“and it can also be a good gift”。“inspiring”应为“inspired”，表示人的感受。

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is strawberry chocolate. You know, strawberry is one of my most favorite fruits. I think the strawberry chocolate not only give a perfume of strawberries but also have the thick taste of chocolate.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is strawberry chocolate. You know, strawberry is one of my most favorite fruits. I think the strawberry chocolate not only gives a perfume of strawberries but also has the rich taste of chocolate.

“give”应为第三人称单数“gives”，与主语“strawberry chocolate”一致。“have”应改为“has”。“thick taste”表达不自然，改为“rich taste”更合适。

× Absolutely, I think it's a nice choice to give others chocolate as a gift. You know, between couple and intimation relationships, people always give a chocolate as a symbol of expressing good wishes and sweet.

✓ Absolutely, I think it's a nice choice to give others chocolate as a gift. You know, between couples and intimate relationships, people always give chocolate as a symbol of expressing good wishes and sweetness.

“couple”应为复数“couples”。“intimation”用词错误，应为“intimate”。“a chocolate”应去掉冠词，直接用“chocolate”。“sweet”应改为名词“sweetness”。