Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use correct grammar and avoid redundancy. For example, say "I love eating chocolate because it makes me feel happy and peaceful." Also, avoid repeating the same idea twice; instead, combine them smoothly.

例: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it makes me feel happy and calm, especially when I'm anxious or nervous.

提案: Use correct tense and clearer sentence structure. Also, avoid unclear expressions like "It smells in my heart." Instead, be specific and concise.

例: I usually eat two chocolates a day, one Kit Kat and one Dairy Milk, because I find their rich taste very satisfying.

提案: Clarify your answer and use correct grammar. For example, say "I often ate chocolate as a kid because I loved it, but it caused cavities and dental problems."

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because I loved it, but it caused cavities and other dental problems.

提案: Improve sentence clarity and grammar. Use linking words and avoid vague percentages unless you can support them. For example, "Chocolate is popular worldwide because many people enjoy its sweet and smooth taste."

例: Chocolate is popular around the world because many people enjoy its sweet and smooth flavor.

提案: Complete your sentences and avoid trailing off. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: My favorite chocolate is Kit Kat because it has a creamy texture and a sweet taste.

提案: Make your ideas clearer and use correct grammar. For example, "Chocolate is a good gift because it symbolizes sweetness and makes people happy when they receive it."

例: Yes, chocolate is a great gift because it represents sweetness and always brings happiness to the recipient.

× Yes, of course I love to eating chocolate because it's make me happy and peaceful.

✓ Yes, of course I love eating chocolate because it makes me happy and peaceful.

The verb 'love' should be followed by the gerund form 'eating' instead of the infinitive 'to eating'. Also, 'it's make' is incorrect; the correct form is 'it makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× Yes, of course I love to eating chocolate because it's make me happy and peaceful.

✓ Yes, of course I love eating chocolate because it makes me happy and peaceful.

The verb 'make' must be conjugated as 'makes' to agree with the third person singular subject 'it'.

× In a day I ate 2 chocolate and on his Kit Kat and on his Dairy Milk and these two chocolate taste very rich and satisfying for me.

✓ In a day I ate 2 chocolates, one Kit Kat and one Dairy Milk, and these two chocolates taste very rich and satisfying for me.

The noun 'chocolate' should be pluralized to 'chocolates' when referring to countable items. Also, 'on his' is incorrect and should be replaced with 'one'.

× In a day I ate 2 chocolate and on his Kit Kat and on his Dairy Milk and these two chocolate taste very rich and satisfying for me.

✓ In a day I ate 2 chocolates, one Kit Kat and one Dairy Milk, and these two chocolates tasted very rich and satisfying for me.

The verb 'taste' should be in the past tense 'tasted' to match the past tense context 'I ate'.

× Of course I always eat chocolate, not often because I love to eat chocolate and that's why my teeth problem becoming grow and that time I had cavity also.

✓ Of course I always ate chocolate, not often, because I love to eat chocolate and that's why my teeth problems grew, and at that time I also had cavities.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. 'Always eat' should be 'always ate' to refer to past habits. 'Becoming grow' is incorrect; the past tense 'grew' is appropriate. 'Cavity' should be plural 'cavities' to match the context.

× Of course I always eat chocolate, not often because I love to eat chocolate and that's why my teeth problem becoming grow and that time I had cavity also.

✓ Of course I always ate chocolate, not often, because I love to eat chocolate and that's why my teeth problems grew, and at that time I also had cavities.

The phrase 'teeth problem' should be pluralized to 'teeth problems' because 'teeth' is plural. Similarly, 'cavity' should be plural 'cavities' to indicate multiple dental issues.

× I think chocolate is a famous food in every country because every country people love chocolate very much.

✓ I think chocolate is a famous food in every country because people in every country love chocolate very much.

The phrase 'every country people' is incorrect; it should be 'people in every country' to properly use the preposition and pronoun.

× 99% people like chocolate because of its sweetness and melty and like it's very.

✓ 99% of people like chocolate because of its sweetness and meltiness, and they like it very much.

'Melty' is informal and should be replaced with 'meltiness' (noun form). The phrase 'like it's very' is incomplete and unclear; it should be 'they like it very much' for clarity and correctness.

× My favorite chocolate is Kit Kat and I love it because about its taste, it's very creamy and it's very sweet and.

✓ My favorite chocolate is Kit Kat and I love it because of its taste; it's very creamy and very sweet.

The phrase 'because about its taste' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'because of'. Also, the sentence was incomplete and needed proper punctuation.

× Of course it's good to use as a gift because it's so how their connection sweet and it feels like when someone give chocolate, it's always being happy and.

✓ Of course it's good to use as a gift because it sweetens their connection, and it feels like when someone gives chocolate, they are always happy.

The phrase 'it's so how their connection sweet' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'it sweetens their connection'. Also, 'someone give' should be 'someone gives' to agree with third person singular, and 'it's always being happy' should be 'they are always happy' for correct pronoun and verb usage.