Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it satisfies my cravings and improves my mood. Whenever I feel stressed, a piece of chocolate makes me feel happier and more relaxed.

提案: Avoid redundancy and improve grammar. Use linking words to show sequence and cause-effect clearly. Keep your answer concise and structured.

例: I eat chocolate daily, usually in the morning and after dinner. Eating chocolate helps to lift my mood and satisfy my cravings.

提案: Improve verb tenses and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Provide more specific details to enrich your answer.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid. My uncle used to bring chocolates from abroad, and I enjoyed eating them every day.

提案: Work on sentence clarity and avoid filler words. Use linking words to connect reasons logically. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because of its sweet taste and its role as a gift to express feelings. People often buy chocolates for their loved ones to make them happy.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly and concisely.

例: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it suits my taste. It has a rich and original flavour that I really enjoy.

提案: Avoid redundancy and improve grammar. Use linking words to explain your opinion clearly and provide reasons.

例: Yes, I believe chocolates are great gifts for friends and family. They help strengthen relationships by showing care and affection.

× Yes I do like eating chocolate.

✓ Yes, I do like eating chocolate.

A comma is needed after 'Yes' to separate the introductory word from the main clause for correct punctuation.

× I usually like eating chocolate because I I'm craving for it so it it just enhance my mood and it just make me happy.

✓ I usually like eating chocolate because I'm craving it, so it just enhances my mood and makes me happy.

The phrase 'I I'm craving for it' is incorrect; 'I'm craving it' is correct. Also, 'enhance' and 'make' should be in third person singular form 'enhances' and 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. The word 'for' after 'craving' is unnecessary.

× I always like eating chocolate and I eat it daily.

✓ I always like eating chocolate, and I eat it daily.

A comma is needed before 'and' to separate two independent clauses for clarity.

× Like in morning I eat chocolate in after dinner I crave for chocolate and I eat it again so it changed my mood.

✓ Like in the morning, I eat chocolate; after dinner, I crave chocolate and eat it again, so it changes my mood.

The phrase 'in morning' should be 'in the morning' with the definite article 'the'. 'In after dinner' is incorrect; it should be 'after dinner'. The preposition 'for' after 'crave' is unnecessary. Also, 'changed' should be 'changes' to match present tense.

× Yes, I often eat chocolate.

✓ Yes, I often ate chocolate.

The question is about past habits ('when you were a kid'), so the verb should be in past tense 'ate' instead of present tense 'eat'.

× When I was I was a kid, my uncle, my uncle get some chocolates for me from abroad and I eat them daily.

✓ When I was a kid, my uncle got some chocolates for me from abroad, and I ate them daily.

The phrase 'I was I was' is repetitive and should be 'I was'. 'Get' should be in past tense 'got' and 'eat' should be 'ate' to match the past time frame.

× I think because of its sweetness and like chocolate is a gesture of to show something to to show your feelings to someone.

✓ I think it's because of its sweetness, and chocolate is a gesture to show your feelings to someone.

The phrase 'a gesture of to show' is incorrect; it should be 'a gesture to show'. The repeated 'to' should be removed. Also, 'like' is unnecessary here.

× So people often buy chocolates for their loved ones and they make their life happy.

✓ So people often buy chocolates for their loved ones, and they make their lives happy.

'Life' should be plural 'lives' because it refers to multiple people. A comma before 'and' improves sentence clarity.

× My favorite taste of chocolate is dark chocolate because it is more near to my taste and it just it just showed me that the perfect taste of the chocolate and the originality of it.

✓ My favorite type of chocolate is dark chocolate because it is closer to my taste, and it shows me the perfect taste and originality of chocolate.

'More near' is incorrect; 'closer' is the correct comparative form. 'Taste' should be 'type' when referring to chocolate variety. 'Showed' should be 'shows' to match present tense. The phrase 'the perfect taste of the chocolate' is awkward; 'the perfect taste and originality of chocolate' is clearer.

× Yes, I do think like this that chocolates are the best gift you can give to anyone, any friend or any family member and it just make your relationship more healthy.

✓ Yes, I do think that chocolates are the best gift you can give to anyone, any friend, or any family member, and they just make your relationships healthier.

The phrase 'like this' is unnecessary and awkward. 'Make' should be 'make' agreeing with plural 'chocolates'. 'Relationship' should be plural 'relationships' because it refers generally. 'More healthy' should be 'healthier' as the correct comparative form.

× That is why I think chocolate is the best gift you can give to anyone.

✓ That is why I think chocolate is the best gift you can give to anyone.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.