Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了观点，但语法和用词不够准确，且有些重复。建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并注意时态和单复数的正确使用。

例: I like eating chocolate sometimes because it satisfies my sweet cravings. However, there are times when I prefer not to eat sweets at all.

提案: 回答简洁明了，但可以增加连接词使句子更流畅，同时注意表达的自然性。

例: I usually eat chocolate twice a month because I think eating it too often can be harmful to my health.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题。建议使用正确的时态和句型，避免语法错误，并使表达更自然。

例: I used to eat a lot of chocolate when I was a kid because I was very attracted to sweets. However, my mom often told me not to eat too much.

提案: 回答内容不够具体且语法错误较多。建议提供更具体的原因，并注意语法和表达的准确性。

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes sweet and can make people feel happy. In many cultures, sweet foods are considered treats.

提案: 回答表达了观点，但语法和用词有误。建议注意动词形式和句子结构，使表达更自然流畅。

例: My favourite flavour is milk chocolate because it tastes sweet, unlike dark chocolate which is bitter. I prefer sweet tastes even though I know they are not very healthy.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误。建议简化句子，避免重复，并使用更自然的表达方式。

例: I think chocolate is a great gift because it symbolizes warmth and sweetness. I also enjoy receiving chocolate as a present.

× I think it depend on different situation because sometimes I just want to eat some sweet scenes or snacks.

✓ I think it depends on different situations because sometimes I just want to eat some sweet snacks.

这里'situation'应使用复数形式'situations'，因为表示不同的情况；动词'depend'应加第三人称单数形式'depends'，因为主语是单数it。'sweet scenes'应为'sweet snacks'，'scenes'意思不对。

× I think it depend on different situation because sometimes I just want to eat some sweet scenes or snacks.

✓ I think it depends on different situations because sometimes I just want to eat some sweet snacks.

主语it是第三人称单数，谓语动词depend应加-s变为depends。

× I think it's depend on the different situation.

✓ I think it depends on the different situation.

主语it是单数，谓语depend应加-s变为depends。

× I think it's depend on the different situation.

✓ I think it depends on the different situation.

主语it是第三人称单数，谓语动词depend应加-s。

× Normally it's twice a month.

✓ Normally I eat it twice a month.

原句缺少主语和谓语，'it's twice a month'表达不完整，应补充主语和谓语。

× It's not very usual 'cause I think that's harmful for my body, so I don't eat that very often.

✓ It's not very usual because I think it's harmful to my body, so I don't eat it very often.

'that's'指代不清，应改为'it's'；'harmful for'应为'harmful to'；'eat that'应为'eat it'，指代巧克力。

× I ate a lot when I was a kid 'cause sweet scenes like chocolate or dessert has the very strong attracted to me.

✓ I ate a lot when I was a kid because sweet things like chocolate or dessert had a very strong attraction to me.

过去时态中，'has'应改为'had'；'sweet scenes'应为'sweet things'；'attracted'用法错误，应改为'noun'形式'attraction'。

× But my mom told me don't allow me to eat that so.

✓ But my mom told me not to allow me to eat that.

'don't allow me'语法错误，应改为'not to allow me'；句子结构不完整，需调整。

× I think because it's sweet.

✓ I think it's because it's sweet.

句子缺少连词'because'的主句部分，应补充完整。

× I've been read a reference that says sweet things isn't normal in the Asian so nowadays people over eat sweet things to let themselves happy.

✓ I've read a reference that says sweet things aren't common in Asia, so nowadays people overeat sweet things to make themselves happy.

'I've been read'错误，应为'I've read'；'isn't normal'应为'aren't common'；'in the Asian'应为'in Asia'；'over eat'应为'overeat'；'to let themselves happy'应为'to make themselves happy'。

× Well I think it's the milk chocolate because it's taste so sweet, not like the other chocolate, like it tastes bitter.

✓ Well, I think it's milk chocolate because it tastes so sweet, not like other chocolate, which tastes bitter.

'it's taste'应为'it tastes'；'the milk chocolate'改为'milk chocolate'更自然；'like it tastes bitter'应改为'which tastes bitter'。

× I like to I like others to give me chocolate for a gift.

✓ I like others to give me chocolate as a gift.

句子中重复'I like'，应删除多余部分；'for a gift'改为'as a gift'更合适。

× Well I think it is a good example for a perfect gift if you choose the chocolate cause chocolate always a symbol of sweet warm heart.

✓ Well, I think it is a good example of a perfect gift if you choose chocolate because chocolate is always a symbol of sweet warm heart.

'example for'应为'example of'；'choose the chocolate'改为'choose chocolate'；'cause'应为'because'；缺少动词'is'。