Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to give a clear and consistent opinion. Avoid contradicting yourself and use simple, natural sentences. Also, keep your answer concise and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes delicious and makes me feel happy. However, I try not to eat too much because it can make me gain weight.

提案: Provide a more natural and complete answer with some supporting details. Use correct plural forms and avoid short answers.

例: I usually eat chocolate almost every day, especially as a small treat after meals.

提案: Use past tense consistently and add linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, avoid generalizations and focus on your own experience.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid. In fact, I used to eat it every day, which sometimes made my parents upset.

提案: Use correct grammar and more precise vocabulary. Provide clear reasons with linking words to improve coherence.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and can improve people's mood, especially for older adults.

提案: Try to use more natural expressions and avoid repetition. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: My favourite flavour is milk chocolate because it has a balanced taste. Dark chocolate is stronger, while white chocolate is lighter, so milk chocolate is just right for me.

提案: Improve grammar and clarity. Explain your opinion clearly with specific reasons and avoid unclear phrases.

例: I think giving chocolate as a gift can be risky because some people are allergic to ingredients in chocolate.

× I eat chocolates mostly daily.

✓ I eat chocolate mostly daily.

The word 'chocolate' is an uncountable noun when referring to the substance in general, so it should not be pluralized as 'chocolates' in this context.

× When I was a kid, I often eat chocolate every day.

✓ When I was a kid, I often ate chocolate every day.

The sentence refers to a past time ('when I was a kid'), so the verb should be in the past tense 'ate' instead of the present tense 'eat'.

× I think that chocolate is popular all around the world because it lifts old people mood and it just have a good and an amazing taste.

✓ I think that chocolate is popular all around the world because it lifts old people's mood and it just has a good and amazing taste.

The phrase 'old people mood' needs a possessive form 'old people's mood'. Also, 'have' should be 'has' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× Dark chocolate chocolates usually have a stronger taste of chocolate while mixed chocolate will usually have a lighter taste of chocolate.

✓ Dark chocolates usually have a stronger taste of chocolate while mixed chocolates usually have a lighter taste of chocolate.

The word 'chocolates' is plural here and should be consistent. 'Dark chocolate chocolates' is redundant; 'dark chocolates' is sufficient. Also, 'mixed chocolate' should be pluralized to 'mixed chocolates' to match the context.

× Chocolate have quiet ingredients that many people are allergic to, so being far from that mod.

✓ Chocolate has quite a few ingredients that many people are allergic to, so it's better to avoid it.

'Chocolate' is singular and requires the singular verb 'has' instead of 'have'. Also, 'quiet' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'quite'. The phrase 'being far from that mod' is unclear and has been corrected to 'it's better to avoid it' for clarity.