Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and structured. Start with a direct response, then add specific reasons using linking words. Also, avoid redundancy and minor grammar errors like "its" instead of "its".

例: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because it has a rich and creamy flavor that I find very satisfying.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more concise and natural. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeating the same point. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary.

例: I usually eat chocolate about once a week, especially when I'm feeling stressed, because it helps me relax and feel better.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks clear structure. Provide a direct answer first, then add supporting details with linking words. Also, correct tense usage and avoid repeating phrases.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child because I enjoyed it and sometimes used it as a treat for myself.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific. Also, correct word choice like "public" to "popular."

例: I believe chocolate is popular worldwide because of its rich and creamy flavor, and it also helps people relax when they feel stressed, making it a great treat.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by making it more concise and using linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repeating "because" twice in one sentence.

例: My favorite chocolate flavor is matcha because its slight bitterness complements the sweetness of the chocolate very well.

提案: Your answer is relevant but repetitive. Try to vary your vocabulary and use linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

例: Yes, I believe chocolate makes a great gift since most people enjoy its taste, and it can also help them feel relaxed.

× Absolutely yes because its rich flavor and tastes creamy so I like it.

✓ Absolutely yes because it has a rich flavor and tastes creamy, so I like it.

The pronoun 'its' is used incorrectly here; it should be 'it has' to indicate possession. Also, the sentence needs a comma before 'so' to separate the clauses properly.

× Maybe once a week when I feel stress, I will eat some chocolate to relax myself.

✓ Maybe once a week when I feel stressed, I eat some chocolate to relax myself.

The modal verb 'will' is unnecessary here because the sentence describes a habitual action. Also, 'feel stress' should be 'feel stressed' to use the correct adjective form.

× Definitely yes. When I was a child, I love eating, I love eating chocolate.

✓ Definitely yes. When I was a child, I loved eating chocolate.

The verb 'love' should be in the past tense 'loved' to match the past time frame indicated by 'when I was a child'. Also, the phrase 'I love eating' is redundant and can be combined with the next clause.

× To treat myself.

✓ It was a way to treat myself.

The original is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and verb. Adding 'It was a way' completes the sentence structure.

× I think chocolate is public around the world because it's rich and creamy flavor and it can help people relax themselves when they feel stressed.

✓ I think chocolate is popular around the world because of its rich and creamy flavor, and it can help people relax when they feel stressed.

The word 'public' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'popular'. Also, 'it's' should be 'its' to show possession. The phrase 'relax themselves' is awkward; 'relax' alone is sufficient.

× Maybe matcha flavor, because matcha is a little bit bitter and the combination of them is very nice because chocolate is a little bit sweet.

✓ Maybe matcha flavor, because matcha is a little bit bitter and the combination with chocolate is very nice since chocolate is a little bit sweet.

The phrase 'combination of them' is unclear; 'combination with chocolate' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'because' is repeated unnecessarily; 'since' improves sentence flow.

× Yes, I think so because I think everyone will like chocolate because it's flavor and it can help people feel relaxed.

✓ Yes, I think so because I think everyone will like chocolate because of its flavor and it can help people feel relaxed.

The phrase 'it's flavor' is incorrect; it should be 'its flavor' to indicate possession. Also, 'because' is repeated; the sentence can be improved by restructuring, but the main error is the pronoun misuse.