Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有些重复和语法错误，表达不够自然。建议简洁明了地表达喜欢巧克力的原因，避免重复，并用正确的句子结构。

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because I have a sweet tooth. Especially when I feel sad, I enjoy eating dark chocolate as it cheers me up.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，建议用简洁的句子表达频率，并说明原因，避免重复词汇。

例: I usually eat chocolate once a week because eating it every day would harm my teeth, which is unfortunate.

提案: 回答不完整且有语法错误，建议完整表达童年吃巧克力的经历，避免语法错误，并用连贯的句子。

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child because my parents' friends brought some from their travels. I remember the chocolates were always very delicious.

提案: 回答较好，但开头有多余词汇，建议用更自然的表达开头，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: In my opinion, chocolate is popular worldwide because it has a unique flavor compared to other candies. Moreover, it is often given as a thoughtful gift to friends and family.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复，建议用正确时态和词汇表达喜好变化，避免重复和错误。

例: When I was a kid, I preferred milk chocolate or chocolate with nuts. However, as I grew up, I became more interested in dark chocolate because of its unique flavor, even though it is a bit bitter.

提案: 回答内容完整，但表达略显重复，建议用更自然的连接词和句式，使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I think chocolate makes a good gift because it suits most people, especially children and young adults. Additionally, its price is reasonable, making it an appropriate present.

× I I'm very fond of eating chocolate because I have a sweet tooth.

✓ I'm very fond of eating chocolate because I have a sweet tooth.

The repetition of 'I' is unnecessary and incorrect. The correct form is 'I'm' as a contraction of 'I am'. Remove the extra 'I' to correct the sentence.

× When I when I feel sad, I often eat some chocolate, especially the dark chocolate.

✓ When I feel sad, I often eat some chocolate, especially the dark chocolate.

The phrase 'When I when I' repeats 'when I' unnecessarily. Removing the repeated phrase corrects the sentence.

× It can kill me and make me funny.

✓ It can cheer me up and make me feel happy.

The original sentence 'It can kill me and make me funny' is incorrect and unclear. 'Kill me' is inappropriate here, and 'make me funny' is not the intended meaning. The corrected sentence uses appropriate expressions to convey the intended meaning.

× I I often eat chocolate maybe every week, not every day, although I really want to eat chocolate every day and every time I want.

✓ I often eat chocolate maybe every week, not every day, although I really want to eat chocolate every day and every time I want.

The repetition of 'I' is unnecessary and incorrect. Removing the extra 'I' corrects the sentence.

× But it is harmful to my teeth, so it is it it so so it is sad.

✓ But it is harmful to my teeth, so it is sad.

The sentence contains repeated words 'it is it it so so it is' which are unnecessary and incorrect. Removing the repetitions corrects the sentence.

× I often eat chocolate when I was a kid because my parents friends always bring some chocolate when they go abroad to travel and I remember they they always were too delicious.

✓ I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because my parents' friends always brought some chocolate when they went abroad to travel and I remember they were always very delicious.

The sentence mixes present tense verbs 'eat', 'bring', 'go' with past time 'when I was a kid'. All verbs should be in past tense to maintain consistency. Also, 'parents friends' should be possessive 'parents' friends'. The phrase 'they they always were too delicious' is corrected to 'they were always very delicious' for clarity and correctness.

× But it's disappointing that maybe the chocolate make me.

✓ But it's disappointing that maybe the chocolate made me sick.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'made me sick' completes the thought and uses past tense 'made' to match the context.

× In well, in my opinion, the fundamental factor is definitely a special flavor compared with other candies, and in addition, chocolate also can be regarded as a delicate gift to people's friend or families.

✓ Well, in my opinion, the fundamental factor is definitely a special flavor compared with other candies, and in addition, chocolate can also be regarded as a delicate gift to people's friends or families.

The phrase 'In well' is incorrect; 'Well' alone is appropriate. 'Chocolate also can be' is better as 'chocolate can also be' for natural word order. 'People's friend or families' should be plural 'friends or families' to match the meaning.

× Well, when I was a kid I prefer the milk chocolate or chocolate with nuts in inside inside it.

✓ Well, when I was a kid I preferred milk chocolate or chocolate with nuts inside it.

The verb 'prefer' should be in past tense 'preferred' to match 'when I was a kid'. The phrase 'in inside inside it' is redundant; 'inside it' is correct.

× But when I grow up I I I'm more interesting about the dark chocolate because it is because it has a special flavor, although it is a little bit litter.

✓ But when I grew up, I became more interested in dark chocolate because it has a special flavor, although it is a little bit bitter.

The phrase 'I I I'm more interesting about' is incorrect; it should be 'I became more interested in'. 'Grow up' should be past tense 'grew up' to match the time frame. 'Litter' is a typo for 'bitter'.

× I think it's good to use chocolate as gift to others.

✓ I think it's good to use chocolate as a gift for others.

The phrase 'as gift to others' is incorrect. The correct prepositions are 'as a gift for others'.

× On one hand, chocolate is suitable for most people, especially kids or young adults, and on the other hand the price of the chocolate is also proper for as a gift, so I think it's OK.

✓ On one hand, chocolate is suitable for most people, especially kids or young adults, and on the other hand, the price of chocolate is also appropriate as a gift, so I think it's OK.

The phrase 'proper for as a gift' is incorrect; it should be 'appropriate as a gift'. Also, 'the chocolate' is better as 'chocolate' here because it refers to chocolate in general. Added comma after 'on the other hand' for clarity.