Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误，如“can makes”应为“can make”，且句子较长且重复，建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，同时注意语法正确。

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it helps me relax and feel joyful. Swiss chocolate, in particular, is my favorite due to its rich taste.

提案: 回答中有口语填充词“umm”较多，影响流畅度，且表达不够清晰，建议减少填充词，使用更准确的表达方式。

例: I eat chocolate every day because I really love it. I usually buy it from the supermarket, and my favorite types are strawberry and milk chocolate.

提案: 回答内容较完整，但句子结构稍显简单，且“most of the kids are like chocolate”表达不准确，建议使用更地道的表达。

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child because I loved its sweet taste. However, I know it’s not very healthy for kids due to the high sugar content.

提案: 回答不完整且句子未结束，表达不清晰，建议完整表达观点并使用连接词使句子连贯。

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it comes in many flavors like strawberry, grape, and banana. Moreover, sharing chocolate often brings people closer together.

提案: 表达不够准确，“must contain sweets”用词不当，建议用更合适的词汇描述口味特点。

例: My favorite chocolate flavor is strawberry because it tastes fresh and has a nice balance of sweetness and slight sourness.

提案: 句子结构混乱，语法错误较多，建议简化句子并注意时态和主谓一致。

例: Yes, I believe giving chocolate as a gift makes people happy. For example, when my boyfriend gives me chocolate, I feel very happy and loved.

× I like eating chocolate because I like Swiss food and I think eating chocolate can makes me feel more relaxed and release the stress and I think chocolates can makes people feel joyful and.

✓ I like eating chocolate because I like Swiss food and I think eating chocolate can make me feel more relaxed and release the stress and I think chocolates can make people feel joyful.

动词make在第三人称单数形式中应为make而非makes，因为can后面接动词原形。这里的主语是can，后面动词应为原形。

× I always buy a chocolate in a supermarket and I love all the favorite about the chocolate, for example strawberry, umm umm, milk chocolate.

✓ I always buy chocolate in a supermarket and I love all the flavors of chocolate, for example strawberry, umm umm, milk chocolate.

chocolate作为不可数名词时不需要冠词a；favorite用法错误，应使用flavors表示多种口味。

× I think most of the kids are like chocolate and even chocolate is not really good for kids because they're really sweet and it contains a lot of sugar.

✓ I think most kids like chocolate and even though chocolate is not really good for kids because it's really sweet and contains a lot of sugar.

most of the kids改为most kids更自然；are like改为like；they're指代不清，改为it's指代chocolate。

× Nowadays, chocolates have provided a lot of flavour like strawberry, grapes, bananas and I think chocolate can be the connection with people when people.

✓ Nowadays, chocolates have many flavors like strawberry, grape, banana and I think chocolate can be a connection between people.

flavour前不应使用provided，应使用have many flavors；grapes和bananas应为单数形式表示口味；the connection with people改为a connection between people更合适。

× I like strawberry flavor because it is really really fresh and it must contain sweets, but also a little bit sour is really nice.

✓ I like strawberry flavor because it is really fresh and it contains sweetness, but also a little bit of sourness which is really nice.

must contain sweets用法不当，应改为contains sweetness；a little bit sour应改为a little bit of sourness。

× Yes, I think most of the people received chocolate as a gift will be very happy and I received chocolate from from my boyfriend. I will also feel very blissful because it is what he bring for me is.

✓ Yes, I think most people who receive chocolate as a gift will be very happy and when I receive chocolate from my boyfriend, I also feel very blissful because it is what he brings me.

most of the people改为most people；received改为receive保持时态一致；重复from；he bring应为he brings；句子结构不完整，需调整使其通顺。