Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự tự nhiên và có lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'I don't really into' nên là 'I'm not really into'. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng hơn, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, mạch lạc.

例: I don't like eating chocolate because I find it too bitter for my taste. I prefer sweeter snacks instead.

提案: Câu trả lời không rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi phát âm, ngữ pháp khiến người nghe khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản và rõ ràng, tránh nói lắp và dùng từ không chính xác.

例: I rarely eat chocolate because I don't really like it. Maybe once every few months.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp, ví dụ 'I have been received' nên là 'I received'. Câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child because I used to receive it as gifts. I really enjoyed eating it back then.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng liên từ phù hợp và tránh lặp từ như 'umm'. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, mạch lạc và có cấu trúc tốt hơn để thể hiện ý tưởng một cách logic.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it is widely available in stores and is affordable. Additionally, many children enjoy its sweet taste.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ 'which is have not' nên là 'which does not have'. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để người nghe dễ hiểu hơn.

例: My favourite flavour is white chocolate because it is sweet and not bitter. I like to eat it with some sour fruits or juice.

提案: Bạn nên tránh dùng số liệu không chính thức như '100% is yes' và sử dụng câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Ngoài ra, chú ý dùng giới từ đúng, ví dụ 'grateful for your present' thay vì 'grateful with'.

例: Yes, I think chocolate makes a great gift because many people love it and appreciate receiving it.

× Actually, I don't really into chocolate because I'm not really into the bitter things and chocolates is really bitter, so that's why I don't really like it.

✓ Actually, I am not really into chocolate because I'm not really into bitter things and chocolate is really bitter, so that's why I don't really like it.

The phrase 'don't really into' is incorrect; it should be 'am not really into' to use the correct verb 'to be' with the preposition 'into'. Also, 'chocolates is' should be 'chocolate is' because 'chocolate' is uncountable here.

× Actually, I don't really into chocolate because I'm not really into the bitter things and chocolates is really bitter, so that's why I don't really like it.

✓ Actually, I am not really into chocolate because I'm not really into bitter things and chocolate is really bitter, so that's why I don't really like it.

The word 'chocolates' is plural, but here it refers to chocolate in general, which is uncountable, so it should be 'chocolate'.

× Ashley ones in the in the bulimos. Umm I'm not really into in this kind of food so that's why I'm not often taste that.

✓ Only once in the bulimic episodes. Umm, I'm not really into this kind of food, so that's why I don't often taste it.

The original sentence is unclear and has structural errors. 'Ashley ones in the in the bulimos' is unintelligible and likely a mishearing or miswriting. The corrected sentence assumes the intended meaning is 'Only once during bulimic episodes'. Also, 'I'm not really into in this kind of food' has an extra preposition 'in'. 'I'm not often taste that' is incorrect; it should be 'I don't often taste it'.

× Yes, absolutely. I have been received a lot of chocolate when I was a kid, like a present. So that's why I umm, have a lot of them. So I would like to eat them when I was a kid.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I received a lot of chocolate when I was a kid, as presents. So that's why I had a lot of them. I liked to eat them when I was a kid.

'I have been received' is incorrect; the correct past tense is 'I received'. 'Have a lot of them' should be past tense 'had a lot of them' to match the time frame. 'I would like to eat them when I was a kid' should be 'I liked to eat them when I was a kid' to indicate past habitual action.

× Actually today it is really easy to find chocolate in the store so that's why the child would like to eat them. And moreover umm chocolates also have a really affordable price which is umm make them to be more and more famous.

✓ Actually, today it is really easy to find chocolate in stores, so that's why children like to eat it. Moreover, chocolate also has a really affordable price, which makes it more and more popular.

'The child' should be plural 'children' to generalize. 'Them' refers to chocolates, but 'chocolate' is uncountable and singular here, so 'it' is correct. 'Chocolates also have' should be 'chocolate also has' to match singular. 'Which is umm make' should be 'which makes' for subject-verb agreement.

× To be honest I really love white chocolate which is have not the bitter taste so that I can eat them with a big of a sours and juice.

✓ To be honest, I really love white chocolate which does not have a bitter taste, so I can eat it with a bit of sour things and juice.

'Which is have not' is incorrect; it should be 'which does not have'. 'A big of a sours' is incorrect; it should be 'a bit of sour things'. 'Them' should be 'it' because 'white chocolate' is singular and uncountable.

× 100% is yes. Many people are in love with this kind of food, so if you use chocolates as a gift to others, they might be really grateful with your present.

✓ 100% yes. Many people love this kind of food, so if you use chocolates as a gift for others, they will be really grateful for your present.

'Might be really grateful with' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'grateful for'. Also, 'use chocolates as a gift to others' should be 'as a gift for others'. 'Are in love with' is better as 'love' in this context.