Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınız doğal ancak dilbilgisi hataları ve tekrarlar mevcut. "Chocolates taste is really good and sweet and sweet things makes my mood happier and energetic" cümlesinde "sweet" kelimesi iki kez kullanılmış ve dilbilgisi hataları var. Daha akıcı ve doğru cümleler kurmaya çalışın.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes delicious and sweet, which always lifts my mood and gives me energy.

提案: Cevabınızda anlam belirsizliği ve dilbilgisi hataları var. "It looks me" ve "It makes me look better" ifadeleri anlam açısından net değil. Ayrıca cümlelerinizde daha açık ve mantıklı bağlantılar kurmalısınız.

例: I usually eat one chocolate bar a day because eating more might cause me to gain weight, which I want to avoid.

提案: Cevabınızda bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve gereksiz tekrarlar var. "Children's Health" ifadesinde büyük harf kullanımı yanlış. Ayrıca "uh" gibi dolgu kelimelerinden kaçının ve cümlelerinizi daha akıcı yapmaya çalışın.

例: Yes, I used to eat a lot of chocolate every day, and my mom was often upset because she believed it was unhealthy for children. However, I have reduced my chocolate consumption since then.

提案: Cevabınızda cümle yapısı ve bağlaç kullanımı geliştirilmelidir. "It gives us a certain hormone" ifadesi daha açıklayıcı olabilir. Ayrıca cümleler arasında daha iyi bağlantılar kurmalısınız.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and can trigger the release of hormones that make people feel happier. Moreover, it pairs well with coffee and is a common ingredient in desserts.

提案: "Favorite flower" ifadesi yanlış, doğru kelime "flavour" olmalı. Ayrıca cümlelerinizde dilbilgisi ve anlam hataları var. "Wealth weight" ifadesi anlamsız. Daha açık ve doğru ifadeler kullanmalısınız.

例: My favorite flavor of chocolate is white chocolate because I think it tastes lighter and seems healthier compared to dark chocolate.

提案: Cevabınızda bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve anlamsal belirsizlikler var. "And doesn't they?" ifadesi yanlış. Ayrıca cümlelerinizi daha akıcı ve mantıklı bağlaçlarla birleştirmelisiniz.

例: Of course, chocolate is a great gift option because it is lightweight and easy to consume. People usually enjoy it immediately, so they don't need to store it away.

× Yes, I like eating chocolate because chocolates taste is really good and sweet and sweet things makes my mood happier and energetic.

✓ Yes, I like eating chocolate because chocolate tastes really good and sweet, and sweet things make my mood happier and more energetic.

The word 'chocolates' should be singular 'chocolate' to match the singular verb 'taste' which should be 'tastes'. Also, 'things makes' should be 'things make' because 'things' is plural. Additionally, 'more energetic' is the correct comparative form.

× I eat chocolates once a day and the size of the chocolate like 1 bar 1 bar of chocolates.

✓ I eat chocolate once a day and the size of the chocolate is like one bar of chocolate.

'Chocolates' should be singular 'chocolate' when referring to the general food item. Also, '1 bar 1 bar of chocolates' is redundant and ungrammatical; it should be 'one bar of chocolate'.

× If I eat more than this I can gain weight and it looks me.

✓ If I eat more than this, I can gain weight and it shows on me.

The phrase 'it looks me' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'it shows on me' to indicate weight gain is visible.

× Yes, I used to eat a lot of chocolates in a day, and my mom was very angry with me because, uh, she thinks that chocolate is not good for Children's Health.

✓ Yes, I used to eat a lot of chocolate in a day, and my mom was very angry with me because, uh, she thinks that chocolate is not good for children's health.

'Chocolates' should be singular 'chocolate' when referring to the food in general. Also, 'Children's Health' should be lowercase 'children's health' as it is not a proper noun.

× Because chocolate's taste is really delicious and it gives us a certain hormone which makes you happier and it's a good side dish next to coffee or it is really good taste in desserts.

✓ Because chocolate's taste is really delicious and it gives us a certain hormone which makes us happier, and it's a good side dish next to coffee or it tastes really good in desserts.

The pronoun 'you' should be 'us' to maintain consistency. Also, 'it is really good taste' is incorrect; it should be 'it tastes really good'.

× My favorite flower of chocolate is white ones because I feel like it is more innocent to eat to not gain wealth weight so it looks more healthier than black ones.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is white because I feel like it is lighter to eat and helps me not gain weight, so it seems healthier than dark ones.

'Flower' should be 'flavor'. 'More innocent' is incorrect; 'lighter' or 'less heavy' is appropriate. 'Wealth weight' is incorrect; it should be 'weight'. 'More healthier' is incorrect; 'healthier' is sufficient. 'Black ones' should be 'dark ones' when referring to chocolate.

× Of course it is a really good option for gifts because chocolates are not heavy to carry and people can consume it very easily. And doesn't they? They don't need to hide it or keep it in their cabinets or drawer.

✓ Of course, it is a really good option for gifts because chocolates are not heavy to carry and people can consume them very easily. And don't they? They don't need to hide them or keep them in their cabinets or drawers.

The pronoun 'it' should be 'them' to agree with the plural 'chocolates'. 'Doesn't they?' is incorrect; it should be 'don't they?'. Also, 'drawer' should be plural 'drawers' to match 'cabinets'.