Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 직접적이지만, 좀 더 자연스럽고 구체적인 이유를 덧붙여 보세요. 예를 들어, 'I don't like eating chocolate because it can cause tooth decay and isn't very healthy if eaten too much.'처럼 말할 수 있습니다.

例: I don't like eating chocolate because it can cause tooth decay and isn't very healthy if eaten too much.

提案: 답변이 모순되고 문법적으로 부자연스럽습니다. 'I often do'와 'only for special occasions'가 상충합니다. 문장을 명확히 하고, 연결어를 사용해 보세요.

例: I don't eat chocolate often; I usually have it only on special occasions like parties, holidays, or weddings.

提案: 문법 오류가 있습니다. 과거 시제에 맞게 'I was'를 사용하고, 문장을 더 자연스럽게 다듬으세요.

例: Yes, I ate chocolate often when I was a kid because I didn't know it could be harmful.

提案: 문법과 어휘 사용에 주의하세요. 'its taste'와 'not too sweet or bitter'를 정확히 표현하고, 문장을 연결하는 표현을 사용하세요.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because its taste is balanced—not too sweet or bitter—and many children like it.

提案: 'not too much sweet' 대신 'not too sweet'를 사용하고, 문장을 간결하고 자연스럽게 만드세요.

例: I like dark chocolate because it's not too sweet or bitter; it tastes just right.

提案: 문장이 완성되지 않았고, 의미 전달이 불명확합니다. 문장을 완성하고, 이유를 명확히 표현하세요.

例: Yes, chocolate makes a good gift because many people enjoy it and feel happy when they receive it.

× I often eat chocolate only for a special occasion like party, holiday, wedding and some other stays.

✓ I often eat chocolate only on special occasions like parties, holidays, weddings, and some other events.

In English, we use 'on' with days and special occasions. Also, 'party', 'holiday', and 'wedding' should be plural to match 'occasions'. 'Stays' is incorrect here; 'events' or 'occasions' is more appropriate.

× Yes, I ate chocolate when I were a kid because that time I don't know about the harmful side in chocolate.

✓ Yes, I ate chocolate when I was a kid because at that time I didn't know about the harmful side of chocolate.

The subject 'I' requires the verb 'was' in past tense, not 'were'. Also, 'don't know' should be past tense 'didn't know' to match the past context. 'Harmful side in chocolate' should be 'harmful side of chocolate'.

× Chocolate is popular around the world because of it taste.

✓ Chocolate is popular around the world because of its taste.

'It' is a subject pronoun; the possessive form 'its' is needed to show ownership of 'taste'.

× It taste is not too much sweet or not too much better.

✓ Its taste is not too sweet or too bitter.

'Too much' is used with uncountable nouns, but with adjectives like 'sweet' and 'bitter', we use 'too' directly. Also, 'better' is comparative; 'bitter' is the correct adjective here.

× It is popular because children likes chocolate.

✓ It is popular because children like chocolate.

'Children' is plural, so the verb should be 'like' not 'likes'.

× I like dark chocolate because it's not too much sweet or not too much bitter.

✓ I like dark chocolate because it's not too sweet or too bitter.

'Too much' is incorrect with adjectives; 'too' alone is used before adjectives like 'sweet' and 'bitter'.

× Yes, it's good to use chocolate as a gift to others because many people like chocolate they are very joyful when they. Bought chocolates?

✓ Yes, it's good to use chocolate as a gift for others because many people like chocolate and they are very joyful when they receive chocolates.

The sentence is fragmented and lacks proper conjunctions. 'Gift to others' should be 'gift for others'. The phrase 'they are very joyful when they. Bought chocolates?' is incomplete and incorrect; it should be 'they are very joyful when they receive chocolates.'