Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid unclear or incorrect words like 'celery taste' which confuses the listener. Use clear and relevant vocabulary to describe chocolate, and keep sentences concise and natural.

例: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it is sweet and creamy, especially the ones with nuts which add a nice crunchy texture.

提案: Make your answer more direct and structured. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy. Also, check grammar such as 'contain' should be 'contains'.

例: I eat chocolate quite often. If I don't have a chocolate bar, I usually enjoy cakes or drinks that contain cocoa powder because I am a big fan of it.

提案: Avoid repeating previous points and improve grammar, for example, 'milk that contain' should be 'milk that contains'. Also, be more specific and concise in your answer.

例: Yes, I ate chocolate almost every day as a kid because I loved the creamy and crunchy textures, especially milk chocolate with cocoa powder.

提案: Use clearer sentence structures and linking words. For example, 'the combination of sweetness and bitterness makes chocolate popular worldwide.' Also, avoid awkward phrases like 'those bitterness form cacao powder'.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it combines the sweetness of sugar and milk with the slight bitterness of cocoa powder, creating a perfect balance of flavors.

提案: Clarify your dislikes and avoid incomplete sentences. For example, 'I do not like caramel flavor very much.' Also, complete your thoughts and use proper grammar.

例: My favorite chocolate flavor is dark chocolate with nuts like almonds and pistachios. I don't like caramel flavor very much because I prefer sweet and salty fillings.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence clarity. For example, 'I think chocolate is a good gift because most people like it. It's rare to find someone who doesn't like chocolate.' Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I think chocolate is a great gift because most people around the world like it. It's rare to find someone who doesn't enjoy chocolate, so it's a safe choice when buying presents.

× I really like how sweet, creamy from the cocoa butter and milk and also the celery taste.

✓ I really like how sweet and creamy the cocoa butter and milk taste, and also the celery flavor.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'creamy from the cocoa butter and milk' which is awkward. It should be 'creamy the cocoa butter and milk taste' to correctly describe the taste. Also, 'celery taste' should be 'celery flavor' for natural expression.

× I like the crunchy with the sweet.

✓ I like the crunchy texture with the sweetness.

'Crunchy' is an adjective and needs a noun to modify, so 'crunchy texture' is correct. 'With the sweet' is incorrect; it should be 'with the sweetness' to properly use the noun form.

× I would say frequently if I do not eat a bar of chocolate, I would eat something that contains chocolate, like a cake or a drink that contain cacao powder.

✓ I would say frequently; if I do not eat a bar of chocolate, I would eat something that contains chocolate, like a cake or a drink that contains cacao powder.

The sentence is a run-on and needs a semicolon or period to separate ideas. Also, 'contain' should be 'contains' to agree with singular 'a drink'.

× like a cake or a drink that contain cacao powder.

✓ like a cake or a drink that contains cacao powder.

The verb 'contain' must agree with the singular subject 'a drink', so it should be 'contains'.

× I would say that I'm a big fan of cocoa powder.

✓ I would say that I'm a big fan of cocoa powder.

This sentence is correct; no change needed.

× Everyone would often eat chocolate.

✓ Everyone often ate chocolate.

'Would often eat' is awkward here; simple past 'often ate' fits better for past habitual action.

× I would say I eat chocolate almost every day when I was a kid.

✓ I would say I ate chocolate almost every day when I was a kid.

The verb 'eat' should be in past tense 'ate' to match the past time reference 'when I was a kid'.

× Like I said before, I really like those creamies and crunchy textures and I really like milk that contain cacao powder.

✓ Like I said before, I really like those creamy and crunchy textures, and I really like milk that contains cacao powder.

'Creamies' is incorrect; the adjective 'creamy' should be used. Also, 'contain' should be 'contains' to agree with singular 'milk'.

× milk that contain cacao powder.

✓ milk that contains cacao powder.

The verb 'contain' must agree with singular subject 'milk', so it should be 'contains'.

× because the combination of sweetness from sugar and milk and those bitterness form cacao powder make a perfect combination for those who like sweet and also bitter feeling.

✓ because the combination of sweetness from sugar and milk and the bitterness from cacao powder makes a perfect combination for those who like sweet and bitter flavors.

'Those bitterness form' is incorrect; it should be 'the bitterness from'. Also, 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular 'combination'. 'Sweet and also bitter feeling' is better as 'sweet and bitter flavors'.

× those bitterness form cacao powder make a perfect combination

✓ the bitterness from cacao powder makes a perfect combination

'Bitterness' is singular, so the verb should be 'makes' not 'make'. Also, 'those' is incorrect; 'the' is appropriate.

× My favorite flavors of chocolate is dark chocolate with nuts, especially almond and pistachio.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate with nuts, especially almonds and pistachios.

'Flavors' is plural but the verb 'is' is singular; either change to singular 'flavor' or plural verb. Also, 'almond' and 'pistachio' should be plural as they refer to types of nuts.

× I do not like how so not that much and also caramel flavor.

✓ I do not like it that much, and I also do not like caramel flavor.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. It should be rephrased for clarity and correct quantifier use.

× I like sweet and salty fillings and also.

✓ I like sweet and salty fillings as well.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and also.' It should be completed properly.

× I think it's good to give chocolate to other as a present because almost 80% of population in the world like chocolate.

✓ I think it's good to give chocolate to others as a present because almost 80% of the population in the world likes chocolate.

'Other' should be plural 'others'. 'Population' needs the definite article 'the'. The verb 'like' should be 'likes' to agree with singular 'population'.

× almost 80% of population in the world like chocolate.

✓ almost 80% of the population in the world likes chocolate.

'Population' is singular, so the verb should be 'likes'.

× I would find it really for someone to don't like chocolate.

✓ I would find it rare for someone to not like chocolate.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Really' is incomplete; 'rare' fits the intended meaning. 'Don't' should be 'to not' in this infinitive phrase.

× So I think chocolate is a safe choice for you if you want to buy someone a gift.

✓ So I think chocolate is a safe choice if you want to buy someone a gift.

'For you' is unnecessary and awkward here; removing it makes the sentence clearer.