Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is too short and lacks explanation. Try to give a clear reason why you like chocolate and avoid just naming a brand. Use a complete sentence and add some details.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes sweet and makes me feel happy. For example, I enjoy Dairy Milk because it is smooth and creamy.

提案: Your answer is a bit repetitive and unclear. Try to organize your ideas logically and avoid repeating words. Use linking words to connect your points and explain how chocolate affects you.

例: I eat chocolate quite often, especially Dairy Milk, because it has a smooth and creamy taste. Moreover, it gives me an energy boost and cheers me up when I feel tired.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and confusing. Make sure to answer the question directly with a full sentence and add some details about your childhood habits.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because it was my favourite treat after school.

提案: Your answer repeats the word 'chocolate' too much and lacks clear reasons. Try to explain why people like chocolate globally with specific reasons and use linking words.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes smooth and creamy. In addition, many people enjoy it as a sweet treat that can improve their mood.

提案: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to state your favourite flavour clearly and explain why you like it with simple and correct sentences.

例: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it has health benefits, such as being good for the heart.

提案: Your answer is confusing and does not directly answer the question. Use clear sentences to express your opinion and give reasons why chocolate can be a good gift.

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because many people like it and it is suitable for special occasions.

× Yes, I like eating chocolate and Dairy Milk.

✓ Yes, I like eating chocolate, especially Dairy Milk.

The original sentence lacks clarity and proper adjective order. 'Especially' is used to specify preference, making the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I really I I really enjoy eating chocolate, especially Dairy Milk because it is a very smooth and creamy taste and energy boost and chocolate armature cheers me and my makes my feel happy.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate, especially Dairy Milk, because it has a very smooth and creamy taste and gives me an energy boost. Chocolate cheers me up and makes me feel happy.

The original sentence is repetitive and structurally incorrect. Correcting repetition, adding necessary articles, and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× And just eat chocolate. You were a kid. I like chocolate.

✓ I used to eat chocolate when I was a kid. I like chocolate.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Combining ideas into a complete sentence with proper tense improves understanding and grammar.

× Yes, chocolate is popular around the world because chocolate is very smoothly creamy and chocolate is very healthy.

✓ Yes, chocolate is popular around the world because it is very smooth and creamy, and it is also very healthy.

'Smoothly creamy' is incorrect; 'smooth and creamy' are adjectives describing chocolate. Also, replacing repeated 'chocolate' with pronouns avoids redundancy.

× Dark chocolate is often of the positive effect on the heart, making both the dishes and somewhat health.

✓ Dark chocolate often has a positive effect on the heart and is both delicious and somewhat healthy.

The original sentence is grammatically incorrect and unclear. Correcting verb usage and sentence structure clarifies the meaning.

× Yet yes, it is a good juice. Chocolate as a gift, as a some some special gift is a chocolate.

✓ Yes, it is a good choice. Chocolate as a gift, as a special gift, is appreciated.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and contains redundant words. Correcting pronoun usage and removing redundancy improves clarity and grammar.