Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but a bit repetitive and has grammatical errors. Try to make your response more concise and correct the grammar, for example, avoid repeating words like 'when' and use singular/plural forms correctly. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes delicious. Moreover, I often eat it when I feel sad, as it helps to lift my mood.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid using 'often' and 'once or twice a month' together as it sounds contradictory. Also, try to combine your sentences using linking words for better flow.

例: I usually eat chocolate once or twice a month, so I don't consume it regularly.

提案: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and is a bit unclear. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and incorrect plural forms like 'children's'. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because children usually prefer sweet candies. I was always excited to eat chocolate as well.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases. For example, 'they are very expensive and sweets' is confusing. Try to explain reasons clearly and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it is a sweet treat that many people enjoy. Also, chocolates are commonly given as gifts on special occasions.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more natural. For example, use 'flavours' instead of 'flavors' in Indian English, and avoid 'they always reflect my mood' which is unclear. Use linking words to explain your preference.

例: I like all flavours of chocolate, but if I have to choose one, I prefer Cadbury Dark Milk because it is sweet and suits my taste.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For example, 'many peoples gave chocolates to their' is incorrect. Try to use correct plural forms and clearer sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I think chocolates make good gifts. On occasions like birthdays and weddings, many people give chocolates to surprise their loved ones.

× Yes, I like eating chocolates because they are very delicious and I always prefer to eat chocolates when I when my mood is very sad and after eating chocolates I can lift my moods.

✓ Yes, I like eating chocolate because it is very delicious and I always prefer to eat chocolate when my mood is very sad and after eating chocolate I can lift my mood.

The word 'chocolate' is generally used as an uncountable noun when referring to the substance or food in general, so 'chocolates' should be 'chocolate'. Also, 'moods' should be singular 'mood' because it refers to the speaker's current emotional state. Using singular forms here is grammatically correct and natural in English.

× I often eat chocolates once or twice a month and I don't eat chocolates regularly.

✓ I often eat chocolate once or twice a month and I don't eat chocolate regularly.

Again, 'chocolate' is uncountable when referring to the food in general, so 'chocolates' should be 'chocolate'. This correction makes the sentence grammatically correct and natural.

× Yes, of course I ate chocolate when I was a kid because uh children's are always preferred to eat chocolate candies and many more and I also very excited to eat for eating a chocolate.

✓ Yes, of course I ate chocolate when I was a kid because children always preferred to eat chocolate candies and many more and I was also very excited to eat chocolate.

The word 'children's' is incorrect here; the plural noun 'children' should be used without an apostrophe. Also, 'preferred' should be in past tense to match 'ate'. The phrase 'I also very excited to eat for eating a chocolate' is incorrect; it should be 'I was also very excited to eat chocolate'. The article 'a' before 'chocolate' is unnecessary because 'chocolate' is uncountable here.

× Yes, I think chocolate is very popular around all over the world because they are very expensive and sweets and when people want to give any gift to someone they always give chocolates to them.

✓ Yes, I think chocolate is very popular all over the world because it is a very popular sweet and when people want to give a gift to someone they always give chocolate to them.

'They are very expensive and sweets' is incorrect; 'chocolate' is singular and uncountable, so 'it is a very popular sweet' is correct. Also, 'all over the world' is the correct phrase, not 'around all over the world'. 'Any gift' should be 'a gift' for natural usage. 'Chocolates' can be 'chocolate' here as uncountable noun.

× I like all flavors, but if I talk about one flavor, I like Cadbury Dark Milk because these chocolates are very sweet and they always reflect my mood.

✓ I like all flavors, but if I talk about one flavor, I like Cadbury Dark Milk because this chocolate is very sweet and it always reflects my mood.

'These chocolates' should be 'this chocolate' because referring to a specific type or brand of chocolate as a singular uncountable noun. The verbs 'are' and 'reflect' should agree with the singular subject 'chocolate'.

× Yes, I think it is a good to use chocolates as a gift to others and whenever some occasions comes many peoples gave chocolates to their for their surprise like birthday parties and weddings.

✓ Yes, I think it is good to use chocolate as a gift to others and whenever some occasions come many people give chocolate to them for their surprise like birthday parties and weddings.

'A good' should be 'good' without 'a' because 'good' is an adjective here. 'Chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as uncountable noun. 'Some occasions comes' should be 'some occasions come' because 'occasions' is plural. 'Many peoples' is incorrect; 'people' is already plural. 'Gave' should be 'give' to match present tense. 'To their' is incomplete; it should be 'to them'.