Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear opinion first, then explain with simple and correct sentences. Avoid repetition and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: I don't like eating chocolate very much because it is not healthy due to its high sugar content. However, I prefer sugar-free chocolate when I want to enjoy it.

提案: Your answer is a bit repetitive and lacks fluency. Use linking words like 'but' or 'however' properly and avoid repeating words. Also, try to make your sentences more natural and concise.

例: I don't often eat chocolate because it contains a lot of sugar. However, if someone gives me chocolate as a gift, I usually enjoy eating it.

提案: Your answer is confusing and has many hesitations. Try to organize your thoughts before speaking. Use simple sentences and avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh'. Also, make sure your grammar is correct.

例: Yes, I ate a lot of chocolate when I was a child because my grandmother often gave me some. She told me it was okay to enjoy chocolate when I was young.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains many filler words and some grammar mistakes. Try to speak more fluently and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, use correct plural forms and avoid unnecessary words.

例: In my opinion, chocolate is popular worldwide because it is a sweet treat that many people enjoy. Therefore, it is loved by people of all ages.

提案: Your answer is clear but repetitive. Try to avoid repeating words and use varied vocabulary. Also, you can add a reason to make your answer more interesting.

例: My favourite chocolate flavour is vanilla because it tastes smooth and creamy. Sometimes, I also enjoy Oreo-flavoured chocolate for its crunchy texture.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and has grammatical errors. Try to complete your sentences and use correct word forms. Also, explain why chocolate makes a good gift with clear reasons.

例: From my perspective, chocolate is a good gift because it makes people happy when they receive it. It is a sweet treat that many enjoy, so it is a thoughtful present.

× Chocolate, no, I'm hopeless about it because of because it's not healthy for healthy for people.

✓ Chocolate, no, I'm hopeless about it because it's not healthy for people.

The phrase 'because of because' is redundant and incorrect. Also, 'healthy for healthy for people' repeats 'healthy for' unnecessarily. The correct preposition is 'for' to indicate who is affected.

× If I eat chocolate without sugar, then I I prefers to eat.

✓ If I eat chocolate without sugar, then I prefer to eat it.

The verb 'prefer' should be in the base form 'prefer' after 'I' (first person singular). 'Prefers' is for third person singular subjects. Also, 'I I' is a repetition and 'to eat' needs an object 'it' for clarity.

× Though I don't prefer to eat chocolate as it is contained a lot of sugar, but sometimes if anyone give give give chocolate as a gift then I prefer to eat.

✓ Though I don't prefer to eat chocolate as it contains a lot of sugar, sometimes if anyone gives chocolate as a gift, then I prefer to eat it.

The phrase 'it is contained a lot of sugar' is incorrect; 'contains' is the correct verb. 'Give give give' is a repetition error. Also, 'if anyone give' should be 'if anyone gives' for subject-verb agreement. The conjunction 'but' is unnecessary after 'though'. 'Prefer to eat' needs an object 'it'.

× I would like to see I eat lots of chocolate when I was child, umm, because of uh, umm, my grandmother was always told me, uh, you eat a lot of chocolate, uh, when you, when you are, you are child and he was.

✓ I would like to say I ate lots of chocolate when I was a child because my grandmother always told me, 'You eat a lot of chocolate when you are a child.'

'Would like to see' should be 'would like to say'. 'Eat' should be past tense 'ate' to match 'when I was a child'. 'Was child' needs the article 'a'. 'Was always told me' is incorrect; 'always told me' is correct. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity.

× In my personal opinion, chocolate is, uh, very renowned around the world because of, uh, it's uh, one kind of sweet items and many people loves to, uh, take sweet item. That's why, uh, chocolate is very popular.

✓ In my personal opinion, chocolate is very renowned around the world because it is one kind of sweet item and many people love to eat sweet items. That's why chocolate is very popular.

'One kind of sweet items' is incorrect; 'one kind of sweet item' is singular. 'Many people loves' should be 'many people love' for subject-verb agreement. 'Take sweet item' is unnatural; 'eat sweet items' is better.

× I prefer to eat vanilla flavor of chocolate and sometimes I prefer to take Oreo Oreo flavored chocolate.

✓ I prefer to eat vanilla-flavored chocolate and sometimes I prefer Oreo-flavored chocolate.

'Vanilla flavor of chocolate' is better expressed as 'vanilla-flavored chocolate'. Repetition of 'Oreo Oreo' is an error. 'Prefer to take' is unnatural; 'prefer' alone suffices.

× For my own perspective, I would like to say chocolates. Chocolate is the good gift to give others because of whenever people get chocolates from others then they feel very delightable and.

✓ From my own perspective, I would like to say chocolate is a good gift to give others because whenever people get chocolates from others, they feel very delighted.

'For my own perspective' should be 'From my own perspective'. 'Chocolates. Chocolate is the good gift' is fragmented; corrected to 'chocolate is a good gift'. 'Delightable' is not a correct word; 'delighted' is appropriate.